This is the End

[Valencia]

Hey! I'm working on a Christian Dystopian and I'd love some reviews/criticism on what I've written so far.

Here's the first chapter: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

And the excerpt that inspired the story: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

I'd love to know your reactions, what parts of what I've written need to explained better, what more do I need to add, what questions you have, pretty much any commentary is what I'm looking for. Thanks in advance!

[Sam~~ we cannot see the moon, and yet the waves still rise~~]

Hey valencia. I'm sorry, i'm a little bit confused. what exactly is a christian dystopia? what makes it christian? i've never heard that phrase used before.

[Colby]

I'm assuming it's a dystopian novel that is based in religion.

[Valencia]

Yea it's something I kind of came up with on the spot. It's a dystopian book, but I put a religious spin on it.

[Sam~~ we cannot see the moon, and yet the waves still rise~~]

Oh, okay. Sorry about that. I'll read it when i get the chance. :D

[Valencia]

Thanks!!!

[Valencia]

It's not that long at all maybe 600-750 words?