My first (& second) attempt at free verse. Which style do you like more?
Longing (Original)
I awoke today from a pleasant slumber Feeling your naked chest beneath my hand Slowly I decided to move my touch over to your shoulder Where I encircled it as I smiled I then continued to work my way down your upper arm Where I could feel the contours of your powerful muscles I grabbed them gently feeling safe in your embrace The soft touch of your skin against mine I brushed my fingers softly back up your arm Knowing in your grasp was where I belonged I again moved my hand over your bare chest Filled with passion and desire, I stopped suddenly Unable to hide the deep sensation I had I squeezed your breast hard and agressively As a chill briefly swayed down the small of my back I opened my eyes to gaze into yours To my defeat, however, our eyes would not meet My hand lay, isolated, alone on my pillow
or
Longing (revised)
I awoke today Such sweet dreams There was your chest Naked beneath my hand Slowly Gently I move my touch I encircle your shoulder My small hands Down your arm I find myself Searching Discovering Your powerful muscles So perfectly shaped Gently I grab Security in your arms The softness of your skin Complete Embraced against me Soothing My fingers brush I find myself Again on your bare chest Passionate Deep desire I stop Deep sensation I squeeze your breast Hard Aggressive A chill down the small of my back I open my eyes To see you To look into your eyes Defeated Our eyes not met My hand Isolated Alone on my pillow
Longing (Original)
I awoke today from a pleasant slumber
Feeling your naked chest beneath my hand
Slowly I decided to move my touch over to your shoulder
Where I encircled it as I smiled
I then continued to work my way down your upper arm
Where I could feel the contours of your powerful muscles
I grabbed them gently feeling safe in your embrace
The soft touch of your skin against mine
I brushed my fingers softly back up your arm
Knowing in your grasp was where I belonged
I again moved my hand over your bare chest
Filled with passion and desire, I stopped suddenly
Unable to hide the deep sensation I had
I squeezed your breast hard and agressively
As a chill briefly swayed down the small of my back
I opened my eyes to gaze into yours
To my defeat, however, our eyes would not meet
My hand lay, isolated, alone on my pillow
or
Longing (revised)
I awoke today
Such sweet dreams
There was your chest
Naked beneath my hand
Slowly
Gently
I move my touch
I encircle your shoulder
My small hands
Down your arm I find myself
Searching
Discovering
Your powerful muscles
So perfectly shaped
Gently I grab
Security in your arms
The softness of your skin
Complete
Embraced against me
Soothing
My fingers brush
I find myself
Again on your bare chest
Passionate
Deep desire
I stop
Deep sensation
I squeeze your breast
Hard
Aggressive
A chill down the small of my back
I open my eyes
To see you
To look into your eyes
Defeated
Our eyes not met
My hand
Isolated
Alone on my pillow
Copyright 2009 by Jean Ann Townsend ©
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