Fantasy and Science Fiction: The Human Mind, Our Modern World - summer 2013 discussion

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Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland / Through the Looking-Glass
Week 02 - Lewis Carroll
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Alice's adventures in wonderland - when you are done
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Also - cool note! I saw a printing of Alice Underground at my bookstore. The had written original version that Carroll wrote and illustrated. I almost bought it and may have to go back to buy it.



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peer 1 → Too much quotes don't leave much space for the author's own thoughts.
peer 2 → An enriching read. I was especially affected by this part of your analysis: "Alice struggles with these new expectations. Throughout the book, she is asked to recite various texts she has memorized, but they all come out nonsense." You have got me thinking with that one! The rest of the essay was great too. I think your argument is especially persuasive because even in Looking Glass, Alice's progression from pawn to Queen indicates a similar pattern of growing in stature and experience, and coming out of one role into a new role. Well done.
peer 3 → The essay shows an understading of the work and the arguments make sense, but it feels like the arguments are not quite persuasive and significant.
peer 4 → The content is very good you have clearly stated your understanding of the text and you have clearly read a lot of literature out of the text to make your argument stronger. You have truly dedicated a lot of time to the essay. Keep it up..
If you can think of a way to improve my argument, let me know. Perhaps not mentioning the second book at made the essay feel a little lighter rather than tighter which is what I was trying for although no one mentioned it but it might have been in the subconscious.
Overall I think I did better on this essay than the last essay regardless of the score. So I'm not that fussed. If I get a better grade on Dracula I might start doubting my abilities since I was almost as rushed this week as I was for the Grimm essay and it got the better grade as well. :D

I didn't include Alice in Wonderland at all and only gave one quote. Then a peer said it didn't prove that I had read the books.
I liked the way you put quotes in so I can't agree with peer 1 that it had too many quotes.
Peer 3 has said the arguments make sense but are not significant. In so few words one can't expect to write a significant thesis.
I would concentrate on the positive points.


I managed a 5.5 on it, and deliberately focused on Alice in Wonderland rather than both.
I really wanted to do something about "Alice as Inspiration" - but I felt that went out of the bounds of the assignment and would also take more than 320 words.