The Lightning Thief
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help us write a scene part 2
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Feb 24, 2013 11:12AM
Percy tried to snap Annabeth out of her trance but Annabeth was to far gone in Manias visions
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"STOP HURTING MY GIRLFRIEND, WITCH!" Percy was desperately trying to call down Annabeth, who was still screaming. "It's okay, the spiders aren't real!"
"It isn't spiders, Percy!" Annabeth sobbed.
To that Percy couldn't say any thing so he turned his anger and frustration on Mania."I swear if you don't stop i wont help you with whatever it is you are here for!"
"So we understand each other then?" purred Mania "i stop toying with your girlfriend and you do what i ask of you."
"Deal, Perseus Jackson," Mania said. "Now for what I want."
(what happened to Thalia, nico and rachel??)
realizing the situation he had just gotten himself into the colour drained from Percy's face.but Annabeth had begun to quiet down and all that could be heard from her is a quiet whimpering.
(Rachel is knocked out, Nico's spine is broken, idk about Thalia.)
"You want the sword," Percy said cautiously.
"We don't have the sword anymore so you can just take your ugly horse-thing and leave us to get OUT OF HERE," Annabeth practically yelled.
"You.... don't have the sword?" Mania said slowly. Then she spun in anger and let out an "ARRGH" and release of energy that sent Percy flying.
"Percy!" Annabeth screamed. Even though she wasn't a daughter of Hades, she shot Mania a death glare and ran after Percy.
(haha that was funny)"Annabeth, run..." he groaned.
Seeing that Mania was in a dangerous mood Annabeth figured attacking her would be stupid so she let out a long breath and tried to regain control before she attacked Mania and probably end her and her friends lives in the process. So she tried to do what shed seen countless children of Aphrodite, sweet talk. "So then i guess you dont need us anymore then" Annabeth tried to say innocently.
"Not so fast!" Annabeth felt a huge force enveloping her keeping her frozen in place.
"im not done with you yet" Mania snarled
(ill change that didnt see the post above it)
"No..." Percy choked, his abdomen bleeding. "Annabeth!"He watched in horror as Mania advanced toward Annabeth.
Sarah wrote: "(what did you mean by she attacked Mania and probably ending her and all her friends lives.)"like if she attacked Mania, shed probably die and mania would kill her friends
(should i delete my post or change it?)
(well I would just say 'if she attacked Mania, she would probably end her and her friends lives' it makes more sense. yeah mae can you delete that post/change it cuz i am so confused)
(anyway, Mania is advancing....)
Sarah wrote: "(well I would just say 'if she attacked Mania, she would probably end her and her friends lives' it makes more sense. yeah mae can you delete that post/change it cuz i am so confused)"(better?)
As Mania approached Annabeth, Percy struggled to sit up.Mania ran a finger down Annabeths arm leaving a trail of goosebumps.
Annabeth struggled but she could neither move nor talk
"Hmm, how about i strike a bargain with you Annabeth? And you'd do well to accept im feeling rather generous today. How about I let you and all of your friends out of Tartarus if you give me one small itty bitty thing?"
"Don't agree to anything!" Yelled Percy
with a snap of her fingers Mania left Percy opening and closing his mouth trying to speak.
"So Annabeth what do you say?"
"All you need to do is give me one small memory you won't even notice that it's gone" Tears had begun to form in Annabeths eyes as she struggled to turn to look ta Percy.
(have you read the Iron Fey Series? They're pretty good)
"Do I get to choose which one?" Annabeth asked in a small voice after Mania allowed her to talk with the snap of her fingers.
"Do I get to choose which one?" Annabeth asked in a small voice after Mania allowed her to talk with the snap of her fingers.
(This sounds crazy and evil but why dont we make Mania drive Annabeth crazy but she lets them out of Tarturus and then Percy is mad so she offers them a solution and since theyre desperate they agree and so she takes Annabeth to her castle or whatever but Annabeth becomes her sort of pet cause Mania did something to her brain?? i think that would be super tragic just a random idea)
(that sounds good. We can incorporate the prophecy too! Mr. D could maybe make a guest appearance since he's the god of insanity/madness - the wine)
(looooved Iron Fey!!! i actually almost called Mania Machina like a billion times :P)
(awesome!!! what was the prophecy again?)
(and could u add in ur last post that Mania let her talk cause b4 she couldnt)
(First prophecy:
You shall meet the goddess that seeks revenge
And hang from a cliff edge.
The son of Poseidon must stop the goddess of fears
Across the ocean filled with tears
Find the island where sailors meet their doom
Enter the way to the wailing tomb
A brother, a traitor and a friends sacrifice
To find the sword buried deep in his eyes.
and second:
"The dark and black goddess of fears
Will release an evil that has been trapped for years
And use a goddess to help in her aid
Something lost to be stolen and a debt repaid.
A life for a life, an eye for an eye,
There is danger in a sparrow's wistful cry."
we can expand on these too!)
(the cliff edge thing makes the most sense)
You shall meet the goddess that seeks revenge
And hang from a cliff edge.
The son of Poseidon must stop the goddess of fears
Across the ocean filled with tears
Find the island where sailors meet their doom
Enter the way to the wailing tomb
A brother, a traitor and a friends sacrifice
To find the sword buried deep in his eyes.
and second:
"The dark and black goddess of fears
Will release an evil that has been trapped for years
And use a goddess to help in her aid
Something lost to be stolen and a debt repaid.
A life for a life, an eye for an eye,
There is danger in a sparrow's wistful cry."
we can expand on these too!)
(the cliff edge thing makes the most sense)
"oh and one more thing you've got 30 seconds or i chose for you." Annabeth was overwhelmed how could she pick??
as she began thinking Mania started cackling like a maniac
"She believed me oh how cute and niave she thought id let her pick"
she continuted to laugh as feeling of dread began to settle on Annabeth.
"Lets get this over with shall we" Mania purred as a look of pure joy covered her face. "hmm let me see so much happiness so much love, its like shopping i cant pick i want them all!" At this point tears were streaming down annabeths face and Percy lay in a heap watching in despair
"I'll take this one," Mania said maniacally. At first, Annabeth felt like she was having the biggest brain freeze, like her synapses were clogging, disabling her way to think logically. "Good luck little demigod" echoed in her head and was no doubt Mania. "Get out of my head" Annabeth barely thought. Annabeth closed her eyes, all scenes of her life were swirling around her. Meeting Thalia and Luke for the first time, seeing Percy unconscious on the steps of the Big House at camp, winning capture the flag at Camp Half-Blood, going on her first quest, getting to listen to the Sirens' song, her father saving her outside the Garden of Hesperides, meeting Pan, receiving the most awesome and complicated gift of Daedalus's laptop, getting to design Olympus, her's and Percy's first kiss together, watching Luke die, her stepmom yelling at her that she didn't want her near any of her siblings, feeling loss when Percy was gone for several months, facing Arachne and her spiders, falling into Tartarus... Finally came a hot, fiery pain as if Mania were cutting giant hole in her head to get the memory out. Make it quick make it quick make it quick, was all that was on her mind. When Annabeth opened her eyes, she didn't know who all these people around her were.
(thanks!)
Jason was unconscious. Again. It was getting to be like a hobby for him.
Jason was unconscious. Again. It was getting to be like a hobby for him.
(ommgg thats amazing now make it so Mania makes Annabeth thinks shes good!!! that would be so epic!!)
Jason's morning did not start off well. For one thing, he woke up face to face with his father('s statue). That thing was so lifelike, Jason thought it was really him.
Trying to shake off the dream, Jason ran to the Aphrodite Cabin to check on Piper only to be told by Lacey that she was missing.
Trying to shake off the dream, Jason ran to the Aphrodite Cabin to check on Piper only to be told by Lacey that she was missing.
"MANIA!!!" Jason shouted as soon as he was alone. There was no reason to scare the little campers with his freaking out moment. He touched his chest to see if the wound was true too. Luckily, it wasn't but it felt as if he had a hole in his heart from the loss of Piper.
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Annabeth looked around. There was a cute boy with black hair and sea green eyes that looked about as old as she, an unconscious girl with red hair and colorful apparel, another boy also with dark hair but wearing an aviator jacket with a skull ring and another girl in silver clothing and a band around her head so she looked like a hippie. Floating in front of her was a woman, tall, elegant and powerful, floating on a red cloud.
"I-I know you?" she said to the lady in black. "You're here to help me right? Am I dead?"
Annabeth looked around. There was a cute boy with black hair and sea green eyes that looked about as old as she, an unconscious girl with red hair and colorful apparel, another boy also with dark hair but wearing an aviator jacket with a skull ring and another girl in silver clothing and a band around her head so she looked like a hippie. Floating in front of her was a woman, tall, elegant and powerful, floating on a red cloud.
"I-I know you?" she said to the lady in black. "You're here to help me right? Am I dead?"
He what now?! Annabeth blinked in shock, "You... wait, I'm confused..." She stammered and turned to Mania again, "What's going on?" Mania gave her a sickly sweet smile.
"You shall see my dear, come with me," Mania held out her hand to Annabeth.
"You shall see my dear, come with me," Mania held out her hand to Annabeth.
"Who says I can trust you either?" Annabeth argued, "For all I know, you're the bad guy here!"
"Please, listen to me." Percy pleaded, eyes shining, "You know me, you do. Don't listen to her."
"Please, listen to me." Percy pleaded, eyes shining, "You know me, you do. Don't listen to her."
"Look into my eyes, and tell me you feel nothing." Percy said seriously, "You need to trust me, Annabeth."
"Don't listen to him!" Mania hissed, "He's the reason you're down here in Tartarus!"
"Don't listen to him!" Mania hissed, "He's the reason you're down here in Tartarus!"
"Ugh..." Jason groaned, "I'm desperate..." He trudged to the Hephaestus cabin and knocked on the door.
"Who is it?!" A voice yelled in a fake high-pitch.
"Jason, open up Leo!" The door opened to reveal Mr. Fix-It himself, covered in grease and grime.
"Hey man, what's up?" Leo asked.
"We have a problem."
"Who is it?!" A voice yelled in a fake high-pitch.
"Jason, open up Leo!" The door opened to reveal Mr. Fix-It himself, covered in grease and grime.
"Hey man, what's up?" Leo asked.
"We have a problem."
((Haha, niiice))
"It's bigger than serious! It's-"
"Gargantuan, got it. What is it?" Leo asked impatiently.
"Piper's missing, along with Percy, Annabeth, Rachel, and Nico." Jason told him about his dream from earlier.
"It's bigger than serious! It's-"
"Gargantuan, got it. What is it?" Leo asked impatiently.
"Piper's missing, along with Percy, Annabeth, Rachel, and Nico." Jason told him about his dream from earlier.
Jason groaned and banged his head on the door. This was just great...
He opened the door back up.
"Listen, Sparky. You need help with finding your girlfriend and I need help welding the finishing pieces of Festus's head. You can rant to me and help me at the same time. Just no more thunder, 'k?"
"Listen, Sparky. You need help with finding your girlfriend and I need help welding the finishing pieces of Festus's head. You can rant to me and help me at the same time. Just no more thunder, 'k?"
"Help me first, then we'll talk!" Jason called.
"I heard that," Jason said, "Now come on, we've got work to do."
It looked like some deflated him like a balloon.
"It's okay, buddy," Nico said, feeling awkward to be comforting him. "We'll get her back."
"Yeah," Percy said sadly. "Right after we save the world 3 other times."
"It's okay, buddy," Nico said, feeling awkward to be comforting him. "We'll get her back."
"Yeah," Percy said sadly. "Right after we save the world 3 other times."
Rachel was starting to regain consciousness which didn't make a difference seeing as in all there was was darkness. She did make out a figure crying though. Was that Percy? Percy Jackson?
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