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Shambhawi wrote: "Thanks :), but I felt this piece was missing something. Like a story. This is just the beginning though - I was planning to write more but the muses betrayed me. Everything sounded so cliche and le..."Hmm, I didn't really feel that it was lacking at all... It seemed to me like it was exactly what it was--a beginning--and the rest would come later. That's just my opinion, of course.
I hope those traitorous muses realize what a grievous error they made in abandoning you, and plead for forgiveness! Good luck good luck good luck!!!
Ooh, I like this! I actually prefer short poems to long ones, because it's easier to keep it all in your (that is, my) head. Some poems drag on and on and on, and my brain just kind of shuts down, my eyes glazing over as I lose track of the entire thing. Not so with this, thankfully. It's short, dark, and vivid, exactly how I like them. Well done, Shambhawi!!!
Shambhawi wrote: "Thanks :) You guys are making me blush.My poems are usually short. I have a bulk of them that I've kept since I was 12. [spoilers removed]
Okay, here's another poem - an older work as well as a ..."
*stares in dumbfounded wonder for a while before she can coherently write this out*
That is beautiful, Shambhawi! It just kind of flows; whenever I try to write poetry, it sounds all jumbled and broken up, but you've obviously figured something out that I haven't. Must... have... more...
*goes to read it again*
Haha, you'd think I'm addicted to writer's block, if you knew how much I got it. I'm sorry it's gotten you, though. Would it help to know that your writing is being loved? Because it is. It really, really is...
I wish I could write that well. I love it! I'm really wishing there was more, in fact; I feel like I'm following a will-o'-the-wisp off a cliff, happily reading along only to reach the end and fall. I can't wait to see what you post next!