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message 1: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments It's about time I made one of these. I always wanted one, but all the others were so entertaining I kept forgetting.

Well! Here's a few of my pet projects, none of which are going very well. Oh well. If you have any constructive criticism, please share, and be as harsh as possible!!!

Nikara and Nightshade:

Interesting background behind that one. It was a cross between a dream I had in fifth grade, and a dream my friend had on the same night. This is the revision of the original, thus far.

The Water Angel:

This is also the revised version. The non-revised version is on Goodreads, too, but since the non-revised is not to have any more progress, I'd prefer advice on this one.


Most of the stuff on this one is my old stuff from past contests. So, not a whole lot of new material there.

Thank you!!!

message 2: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments Also have a dystopian novel in progress, as well as a short fantasy novel. In order below:



message 3: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments A collection of short stories, memoirs, and novel excerpts. Most of it is probably familiar from past contests on here.


message 4: by Jocelyn (new)

Jocelyn (Ducky113) Ah, Kyra, my friend, I love your writing so much, and you know it.

And I take full credit for Nightshade. XD

Write on!

message 5: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments (shocked) Uh... I'm pretty sure I read that wrong. Did you just... compliment me??

Well, in that case, thank you! And I love reading your writing too, so maybe you should go write something now.

You know. Since you're leaving for China soon and all. (Hmph)

message 6: by Jocelyn (last edited Jun 20, 2013 01:02PM) (new)

Jocelyn (Ducky113) Yup, tomorrow.

Don't get used to the compliments, it'll probably never happen again in your lifetime. XD

message 7: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments XD XD Shame, that.
I keep asking you how China was. And you still haven't told me anything but "they have cool stuff here", "I'm reading lots of books", and "the Chinese are cheats"!!!

message 8: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments And I should probably inform you... I am almost done with Nightshade's novella.

message 9: by M (new)

M | 10153 comments I read a little of what you’ve posted of your dystopian novel. I think the writing is excellent!

message 10: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments Thank you so much, M!!! I'm trying to rewrite what I did in fifth grade... but I hate editing so much... XD

message 11: by Kyra (last edited Jun 29, 2013 09:23AM) (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments Kyra wrote: "And I should probably inform you... I am almost done with Nightshade's novella."

Scratch that. I am done with Nightshade's novella. See, I told you it would happen. :D

Here's a link for Ducky (or anyone else interested): http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

message 12: by Edward (last edited Jun 29, 2013 10:58AM) (new)

Edward (EdwardThereseJr) | 2434 comments I get to that after some cleaning.

message 13: by Jocelyn (new)

Jocelyn (Ducky113) It's nice, Kyra. Quite nice. I think. ;)

Maybe you didn't need quite so much bulk with the kids, but more with the fight? If you're not going to have them reappear in N+N, you don't need so much of them in here. More Lincoln scenes are good, since I barely know who he is. (And that may only be because I know my character so well. ;)) And more fight scene, definitely. That was a little too rushed. And it's important, too. Last bit of Nighthsade's life before she meets You. Oh, the horror. XD

message 14: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments (snort) Nightshade was blessed to meet Me. And I'll prove it by making her say so. Ha!! ;P

More fight scene, less kids. Excellent idea. Thanks, Ducky!!

message 15: by Kyra (new)

Kyra (Nikara) | 1221 comments The first draft of the Water Angel is done! It's currently undergoing VERY heavy editing. I'm well aware that it's not particularly good, but if any of you can offer any advice on editing, then it's be much appreciated!

P.S. Disregard the first link. I scraped that version of the story completely, and started from scratch. Here you are:


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