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Althea *Go wolves and dragons!*(Coach Hedge)
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So the girl surprisingly survived and now has the power of the sword while the kid ( boy which is kyle)has the power of the watch everyone wants the weapons and try to kill them so they fight to survive and they meet friends and enemies while doing it .
(( BTW THAT'S MY LEAST FAVORITE I HAVE ALOT IF IDEAS AND I DO WRITE STORIES , RIGHT NOW IM WRITING A LONG FANTASY ABOUT THE FUTURE WHERE THREE KIDS FIND A TIME MACHINE AND IT FALLS IN THE HAND OF A PHARAOH. I'LL POST IT WHEN I FINISH ))
((( BTW AGAIN WHY NOT MAKE A TOPIC ABOUT THIS, YOU KNOW POSTING STORIES AND STUFF)))

I have this idea of a story. I'm not gonna tell though. It's weird.

Seriously:( Us Upstate Newyorkers are suffering Gaia's wrath.

Me:*shoves Harry potter book in her face and growls*read it..."
Annabeth's a big reader, I bet she read HP before:) It seems like her. And then her and Hermione could meet in an alternate universe, and hash out all their smarty-pants guy issues together!
Right? Wouldn't that be awesome?

I have this idea of a story. I'm not gonna tell though. It's weird."
please tell!!!!!

Not a bad idea, c'mon you can do it!!

That is awesome and creative.

Me:*shoves Harry potter book in her face and growls*read it..."
Annabeth's a big reader, ..."
I read the book. I don't like her. Hermione. She just memorises stuff and has no brains at all. She wouldn't last a day without her wand.
Me:I think you're jealous
A:I am not jealous. Why would I be jealous?
Me:whatever you say....


here it is:
There was a poor kid named Scott who lived in a small rotted house. His family was so poor that they only had one bed. His family just wanted some money to build a house or at least to buy some good food but they didn’t have enough money. One day he heard from his friends that there’s a lottery ticket price, but he couldn’t buy a lottery ticket if he wanted to eat. So his life was like hell until one day he was going to school and he found a lottery ticket on the ground. He wanted to hide it and then find its owner because it was not his. He went to home and forgot the lottery ticket in his pocket. He and his family listened to the winner’s number in their small tiny radio the winner’s numbers were the exact numbers on the lottery ticket in Scott’s pocket. He told his mom and dad they were happy because now they have 10,000 dollars they can buy good food and maybe build a small house. His family persuaded him to keep it. When it was time to exchange the lottery ticket with the money he went to a place called “The lottery prize” it was big and huge, he never saw a place like it before, he wanted to give the ticket to the employer, then some homeless man entered and said “it’s mine I lost it on the street.” Everyone laughed at him and thought he was crazy. But Scott had enough with lying, and he finally said the truth and went out of the shop. He saw the homeless man wearing a gentle suit. Scott was surprised, the man looked at him and smiled then he said “I knew you were the perfect kid”. “What do you mean?” Scott asked him. The man said “you really thought I was a homeless person didn’t you?” “Yes” Scott said. The man said “Will you are wrong I’m Bill Anderson, people call me Billy and I don’t need the lottery ticket”. “Can I have it please” Scott asked. “That’s not the only thing you could have, I have billions of dollars I own the biggest company in the world. I’m going to give my money to someone when I die. I have no family so I wanted an honest kid like you to own the company after I pass away”. “You mean you want me to own your company when I grow up?!” Scott asked. “Yes” Billy said. “I’ll start by giving 500 million dollars is that enough?” Billy said. “That’s more than enough” Scott said anxiously “ok then” Billy said. Now Scott and his family have money to buy good food and to buy a big house. Now Scott’s life became just like heaven.


_____ agreed. instead of _____ said yes.
I think some sentences could be ended sooner, instead of with a comma. With a comma it makes it seem like the sentence will never stop. ( as i'm reader it makes me think off it))
Was it a one shot? If it was add more details like:
Scott's family was so poor, his clothes were always stained ragged or filthy. Sometimes all at the same time!



And
Invisible cream
And you can change your genes o what type you like : smart, attractive and so on




and I doubt you really know what It's like. So don't make a comment like that to me again.

And I meant it to people in General that's one of my problems I don't think I just say
I am soooooooooo sorry hope you enjoy the party with your sister



How many times did we understand each other in the wrong way!
It's kind of funny when you think about it
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