Help Editing and Friendly Suggestions

[Weiting]

Hey!
Can you help me edit or give me some info. that should be added in?
In my story of course which is in:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...
Thanks.

[Weiting]

Feel I have to be clearer.
Here's the description:

When Astro turned 13, he never knew what gifts waited for him.
His 'sweet and caring' mother and only family turns out to be a war commander-the most powerful one. He discovers that his mom and the dad he never knew were demigods, and he's the most powerful greek thing alive.
And that, makes TROUBLE.
He will have to follow his mother's steps and his father's skills as he starts-barely his own adventures

[Mimi ❤]

Look I'm being brutally honest, Weiting. In no way shape or form is this a personal attack, but the story needs a lot of work--especially in the character department. It moved lightning quick (haha, see what I did there?) and the characters were robotic with programmed dialogue. Emotions were played down very cheesy and inhumane. The narrator needs a lot of work on a distinguished voice. There was zero substance and character in your writing.

Of course I believe you have potential and your plot shows some promise! I just think your writing could use a little. I'd be happy to help with a couple of things since I'm an aspiring writer myself--but only if you want to :) But please don't let my opinions break you down, you'll only get better

[Jasmine]

I’m afraid I have to agree with Melina on your writing. It is a bit too fast, not very detailed and the characters had lack of depth.
But the idea is imaginative. You have good ideas.

You have talent, so please; learn your craft. Take on creative-writing classes. The more you write the better you get.