Weekly Short Stories Contest and Company! discussion

field day


In his magazine,
Wished the raven-haired Zeldine,
Is where to be seen,
Amidst fields of buxom girls
Showing more than just their pearls.

Not the raven-haired Zeldine!


Naughtier than nice,
a pearl of dubious price,
she bought me a drink.

Having learned to sink
like an olive among ice,
I followed her out.

Thank you, Alex!

LoL! Nice, M.

Yes, thank you Al!

grey matters


Wisdom is no pearl.
The woman, no longer young
Gave her drink a swirl.
"I was at one time Zeldine,
with black hair, I was once seen."

Belly, this is actually approaching a real Haiku as opposed to a Senryu!


sort of twiddles

The consort sat mute
Twiddling the view-finder's knobs
Of a dark sunset.
The pictures of a lost past
Were sorted but forgotten.

Twiddling her knobs,
he soon had her sighing, past
the worst of her sobs.

Thank you Belly.

M, very funny!

Thank you! Belly and Guy aren’t easy acts to follow.

Yesterday evening I had typed a response to Belly’s #4381, but I forgot to post it:

Belly, that’s so bleak it’s funny! (I realize it probably isn’t intended to be funny, and that I shouldn’t be cracking up, so I apologize. I’d better go and reload my cocktail.)

Yes, “spring picnic, winter blanket.” (Sorry about that.)

You guys are so awesome and funny, you make me forget the fairy tales in my head :)

Thank you, Leslie!

The very thing I wondered, but it was a question I was hesitant to ask.

No, I didn't mean it that way lol I've been watching too much of Disney's fairy tales that the stories and poems I thought of writing have something to do with them.

*blushing* Thanks, Al! :)

Belly, I suspect that it's not quita a tanka, but tank ya anyway! LOL.

And Leslie, please don't forget fairy tales! They are from an archetypal perspective, the foundation of psychological meaning, even when malformed by a corporatized Disney.

[Finally, at your request Leslie, a very slight grammatical correction. Again, your grammar is fine, but it is an English shibboleth: 'I've been watching too much of Disney's fairy tales' is not used. Instead, the usage (not grammar) goes '... too many of Disney's fairy tales.' I think it is because in your usage 'much' emphasizes 'fairy tales' and 'much fairy tales' doesn't work; whereas 'many fairy tales' does. To use much as the emphasis, write 'I've been watching too much Disney and the stories...' But you will see here, the emphasis shifts from the fairy tales of Disney, to the brand or product 'Disney'. And Leslie, please let me know when you've had enough of my grammatical interludes.]

No worries Guy :) I appreciate it. I don't mind being corrected.

P.S.

Yay, this one is embarrassing lol I have completely forgotten the use of much and many :D

If it’s any consolation, Leslie, in an informal setting like this one, I wouldn’t have noticed it. I didn’t have any problem taking it in a partitive sense, as with too much coffee.

Thank you, M :) The 'lectures' are helping me a lot :) Anyway, this morning, I had an encounter with an American guy asking for directions and I'm glad he understood me lol

Belly! Lol! I can't tell, I was looking at the paper he was trying to show me. Hmm, correct me if I'm wrong but Americans, Canadians, British seem to look alike :)(we, Asians look alike too) I'm trying to remember if he has an accent but then even if he has, I think, I still won't be able to tell.

P.S. I'm using this thread inappropriately :D

I’m still recovering from getting blown up yesterday.

I'm limping along from the shrapnel.

M, that is so funny, that anything will pale butting against it. So, call me paleface and send me the spray tan.

of knobs and men

He was once the knob
she splayed past her bedroom door
to feel her heart throb.
She'd asked him to twiddle more
than he could, with her, hobnob.

Guy, I haven’t been keeping up very well and I apologize for just jumping in here and there. “spring picnic, winter blanket” and “sort of twiddles” are good and deserved thoughtful commentary, which I’m miserably slow at coming up with.

We’re headed down an interesting road! The fireworks of wordplay in “of knobs and men” will be a challenge to follow.

M! No apology is necessary and you are keeping up perfectly, even exquisitely, well. I feel that I am struggling to keep up because work and life are keeping me from being as active in WSS as I would like.

(And I've come up with a rather crude edit of my 'knobs.')

Well, let’s see it!

It's up. I replaced the previous model.

Ah! Anything I try to follow with is going to seem tame.

I doubt there very much! Already smiling at your imagination's machinations.

Quivering, her lids;
trembling, her knees; her nozzles
hard as uncooked peas.

When I fine-tuned the
areola, she sang like
a wound Victrola.

Maybe I should take that one down. I don’t think it’s rated G.

Yes, PG-13 for me too. Very funny, M! Belly, likewise, so very funny!

Alex (Al) wrote: ":O BELLY! Guy, M! You two are horrible examples. I love you three. :]"

Al, everything I learned I learned it from you! LoL.

bight reality


His hair stood on end
when the dog's leash let go
and his teeth did not.

LoL! The dog's owner had the dog's teeth honed to a fine point, so very sharp indeed! LoL.

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. I confess that it did make me involuntarily smile.

Not at all! RotFL. Now I'm seeing the spring loaded mechanical teeth chattering away.

These started my morning with wild laughter! This will be a slow return that will barely clear the net.

A surgeon might have
sewed it back on and showed me
how to inflate it,

but for that drooling
hound kept by Yvonne, that bit
it off and ate it.

Thanks, Belly!

RoTFL! Nice.

Oh, goodness! Lol. Good one, M! :)

Soaking in bubbles,
I offer a toast: “Gone to
Glory’s mighty halls,

“a brave soldier, lo!
not cut off at the knees, but
bit off at the, uhm . . .!”

LOL!

Thanks, Guy and Belly!

Jar crossed lovers (The PUNisher)


oblongated spheres
seething through formaldehyde
cheaters phallus-y

The class gaped, speechless,
mortified by what lay in
the formaldehyde.

Zack, punishing, indeed.
M, also very funny.

LoL!

of bags and men


I, Frankenweiner,
Here claim the lost baubles
As my very own,
The low misapprehension
Of a Bobbitt wannabe.

I'm so tempted to write a popcorn here but decided not to since there's only one question in my mind..

What happened here?

Lol! These are all hilarious and obviously, you are all having fun :P no need for me to butt in, besides I'm still in shock :)