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Jun 12, 2013 01:22PM
Nice haiku's guys :D
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A person who would tell you never to use shoulds and oughts is a finger-wagging person telling you never to wag your finger.
gents-dominated Haiku thread :D
very nice, captain :)
Lol, M!
Belly, your '575' and '99 horrible things!' are amazing. I agree with Ryan, I'm picking up some inspirations between laughter :)
very nice, captain :)
Lol, M!
Belly, your '575' and '99 horrible things!' are amazing. I agree with Ryan, I'm picking up some inspirations between laughter :)
Now, I'm curious lol I want to read those too :P
M wrote: "A person who would tell you never to use shoulds and oughts is a finger-wagging person telling you never to wag your finger."Really? I don't think I have ever told anyone not to wag their dog. Interesting.
Belly, I'm laughing even knowing laughter is an inappropriate response to this. It is so clever and sad and funny at the same time.
Thank you for writing such awesome haiku!
The Rain of FreedomThe splatter of blood
left by the people person
rained over his hands.
It seems clear, as thingsworsen, there’s a worm more smooth,
more effectual,
less sincere than a
people person: a fawning
intellectual.
Thank you, Guy and Belly! I'm in an SUV on a bumpy highway, and am typing on an iPad. This computer is nothing like a PC. Perhaps an old dog can indeed learn new tricks.
connected to lifeBored by the smooth road
inured to the highway's drone
iPad touches me.
Like, like, like M, Belly and Guy :)
Not even close to
a computer, the bumpy
road left me no choice.
Not even close to
a computer, the bumpy
road left me no choice.
the choicest byteWhat was I to choose
that was not the mere remnant
Of roads not taken?
pondering lost roadsfate's dark highways and byways
he noticed shadows
pouring single-malt courage
he flicked on the zombie box
Excellent, Ryan! This is the best I can do to follow it on a first cup of coffee.My throat was parched, my
eyes bleary. I’d not studied
color theory, nor
could describe the bottle. So
I wrote this bloodless twaddle.
My throat is actually parched and irritated :)
You call that a twaddle? A bit unfair :P
Of course, I still couldn't think of anything to follow the awesome haikus of the gents.
You call that a twaddle? A bit unfair :P
Of course, I still couldn't think of anything to follow the awesome haikus of the gents.
I couldn’t easily follow Ryan’s image-per-line example (which is harder to write but more effective), so I just threw something out there. As young people used to say, “Go for it!” I hope you find something to soothe your throat.
Thanks, M! This is my throat's way of 'de-stressing' :)
This is in response to Ryan's. M, yours was not twaddle, and very funny, but Ryan's has been moiling around in me and created this dirge.what was I thinking?
The ponderosa
was lost to asphalt thoughts,
a straight-edged river
without shadows and stillborn
built by a moribund drunk.
I like the play on the word rare. (Which was rare, to have dinner there, or the steak that was served?)
Thanks, M! Great continuation, too. Sorry for moiling, Guy! 4719 is razor sharp.
Belly, just brilliant...again!
Thank you gents, you have all helped make the 4am bottle a very enjoyable event!
father was so proud
Daisy was crowned - Miss Steak '10
the judge said well done
I was watching, andeager to join. “Give me some
of that tenderloin!”
Understandably, my muse is never happy with me when I let her walk through a mudhole. After the last thing I posted, she’s having a time cleaning her boots.
Ryan, M, Belly, so good, so funny! (Thank you Ryan.) M, your muse is waiting for you to do the rubbing away of the mud. (Don't be late - an unclean muse will be only so patient!)Now back to the kitchen - I'm on KP duty right now.
Haha! Nice one, M. Very funny start to my morning :)
raw meetingHer loin was willing
but mine stayed all too tender
and sadly uncooked.
Very very funny Ryan, M and Guy!
Welcome, welcome :)
Hi Ryan, belated happy father's day!
Cooked to perfection,
She left nothing but crumbs of
desire and despair.
Hi Ryan, belated happy father's day!
Cooked to perfection,
She left nothing but crumbs of
desire and despair.
yay, thank you! I'm not even sure if I made sense lol
The night malingersin smoky notes, the playful
look of her crossed legs.
The dawn fingers a
torn matchbook cover and skegs
of old fishing boats.
Excellent, Leslie! It made perfect sense, and wasn't in any way crumby. M, the imagery in this is gorgeous! Great start to my day. Thank you!
And I would have been happy with just an eyeroll but get the even more desirable plank toss. Oh frabjous day, callooh callay! Thank you!
Yay! It's their fault, I'm just a mere follower :D
Just kidding, they are so great that I sometimes can't resist to follow (it's still their fault lol)
Good morning captain :)
Just kidding, they are so great that I sometimes can't resist to follow (it's still their fault lol)
Good morning captain :)
It is, very much :) You are all nice and amazing, it's an inspiration. I'm glad to be on board and I hope not to be thrown off :D
illuminated
by the moon, her eyes shimmer-
shades of brown and gold
by the moon, her eyes shimmer-
shades of brown and gold
Belly, you’ve sharpened that verse to a razor edge!With her eye liner
she drew the slanting shadows
of a lost evening.
Her carefully carvedmask starts to slip further off
her self damaged life.
Nice, Kat!The pale wreck of her
that lay beneath struck the gods
speechless with desire.
*speechless*
But her teeth will show
no mercy. The gods shiver
at her Cheshire grin.
But her teeth will show
no mercy. The gods shiver
at her Cheshire grin.
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