Court of the Vampire Queen

by Katee Robert

I’ve

Typo: I'm is correct here.

her

Wrong pronoun here. Makes this 3rd person instead. Should be "me"

smell

Comma needed here. Two independant clauses.

She’s a white woman with long dark hair and an athletic build.

Why is this here? Repeated details we got last chapter. Unnecessary

than

Typo: Should be "that"

outdated,

Typo: new thoughts after ellipsis should have a space and capitalized first word.

found out relatively recently I’m half seraph by accidentally bonding with Wolf, Malachi,

So this was originally three separate stories that were combined. But there was no editing. We get repeated details we read one or two chapters before, that, when combined into one book, makes this obnoxiously redundant. When combining already written books, work needs to be done to make it flow better. We read the entirety of these scenes like, 20 minutes ago. These needed to be taken out by an editor along the way, but considering there are blatant typos throughout, I don't think anyone at Sourcebooks actually looked at this.

“He’s a one trick pony, is Azazel.

Typo: no need for "is" here. You already have it in "He's" so this second "is" becomes redundant

no

Typo: should be "not"

that

Typo: should be "than"

trying

Wrong tense: should be "tried"

much

Comma needed here because the sentence starts with an if clausd

armory and gym.

These two words should have quotation marks around them because they are using the words as descriptors for locations.

kill Cornelius.,

Typo: period not needed here