Royal Tea Service (Tea Princess Chronicles, #3)

by Casey Blair

Deniel reaches onto the top of cooler,

of the

you also to deserve to live

Omit first "to"

this is not so different from what I need, too. Which, I smile to myself, is not Talsion’s need to imperiously look down on his work from above but Yorani’s desire to build together with her friend.

Hoping this book manages to pull off Miyara working with others rather than bossing them about.

and this his hands are steering me

Omit "this"

“That you are uncomfortable having brought yourselves uninvited to my door is not my responsibility, your Highness.”

they see these as not as

Omit first "as"

who always seemed a perfect and untouchable

Omit "a"

“That you knowing everything but help no one

know

to take care in the differing ways of showing respecting,

respect

to her knew lodging,

new

Part of being tea master is lifting us all up to work together so our lives don’t hinge on one person, right?

in the long term.”

there won’t be a long-term,”

Standardize (on no hyphen, since it isn't an adjective).

borne out of bigotry

born

Even a police officer who earnestly wanted to help them would be steeped in bias and constrained by the oppressive system it is their job to uphold.

Obligatory 2020s US progressive orthodox doctrine recitation.

How my familiar, flew

No comma

Karisa, though, who for all her protestations of scorn, desperately needs it;

Omit "who"

to effect more of a guise of mystery,

affect?

that my willingness to allow it—and that my willingness matters—depends

Convoluted

she hates how obvious her antipathy makes her care.

Sentence loses its way

“Do you think I should I

Omit first "I"

commissioned from Gaellani craftsperson,”

from a

Despite living on the grounds, I don’t

having lived [she no longer lives there]

I am also the fourth youngest,

Fourth oldest, second youngest

even if I’m the fourth youngest,

She is not.

the revelations we have under the pressures and comforts of our daily lives are not just equally valid, but equally necessary.

Deniel’s parents house,

parents'

My faith in the elemental spirits is hardly knew,

new

We had arranged at Istalam’s expense for the Nakrabi delegation’s transportation upon disembarking after the Isle of Nakrab had proposed bringing their own.

Needs a comma after "disembarking", mainly for ease of parsing.

bowing gracefully—if only barely, belying her own apparent arrogance—

betraying

the Cataclysm, whose boundaries have held steady for generations, have

Cataclysm... has

“Honestly, it was luck.

Hopefully not.

we needed get out

to get

I was under the impression that defeat by graciousness was your primary mode of operating.”

No; it's berating people who then fold inexplicably.

when we start in on the meat of thing

things

I’ve dared to state intentions out loud what she’s never dared to think.

that

to devote resources on her

to her

a long-term strength even if the short-term is more complicated.

While "long-term," as an adjective, gets the hyphen, "short term" is not an adjective here (it's a noun), and should not be hyphenated. It's a subtlety.

too much outside the shop responsibilities,

too many

that this part of their plot.

this is

Do you think you could manage to make different mistakes than me? I really do have this one solidly locked down.”

or dragons on your sisters,

or dragons or

head tilted to once side

one

truly a thig to behold.

thing

I can’t recall of a time

Omit "of" - you think of a time, but you recall a time

Will she wished to be

wish

my own wrists, which, though in possession of bracelets, are distinctly different than the ones I used to wear.

Her wrists are different from the ones she used to wear?

They hang their midair,

there

I can’t see any meaning its shape,

in its

Risteri motions Iryasa and I closer

"Iryasa and me" is technically correct here.