You & I, Rewritten

by Chip Pons

We’re driving off in our own car in NYC? Weird.

“It wasn’t physical or anything like that, but almost as quickly as he had come into my life, he changed. Or I should say, he showed me who he really

We are on page 19. This seems ….like too much.

I look up to find Graham back to speed-texting which momentarily silences the ever-present ping of whatever matter keeps pulling his attention. I swallow hard, furious at myself for letting his lack of professional decorum

He’s basically ceo, answering emails and messages during a workday ice breaker. What lack of decorum?

ok but he’s a coworker who cares

She and I agree on most things, but while I’m a total lost cause for brooding love interests and impossible storylines, Klair likes her romance to have a bit more substance and logic.

I hate this line so much. What a way to bash romance novels while also trying to write one

“You do realize people around here think you’re a dick, right?”

He’s saying this to his supervisor??? What is happening?

“I’m sorry!” I groan. “I’ve been pitched cheesy rom-com after cheesy rom-com

stop 👏🏼 berating 👏🏼 romance 👏🏼 novels 👏🏼 what a weird way to be a romance fan while writing a romance

She slams the pages she’s been trying to focus on down on the table and bolts up from her chair. Clearly, we both woke up and wanted to cause a scene in the office today.

I would quit if I worked with these two morons I cannot stand these characters omg

the use of exclamation points in this book is excessive

“Besides, it’ll balance out all this lighthearted, wannabe Hallmark-level romance I have to get through,”

Please stop editing romance novels if this is your attitude I am begging you

This whole scene made me twitchy

Someone needs to proofread this book 😅

any better. Lana’s phone appears to be off and the last thing I need is to be seen at a work function somewhere between publicly intoxicated and belligerent.

Your first work function no less 🥴

“What, you’re not a fan of everyone orbiting around you with endless compliments and bright ideas, just dying to please you? That doesn’t seem fun to you, Teddy Graham?”

ISNT THIS MAN YOUR SUPERVISOR

“Or maybe the fact that I’m relieved it didn’t take you too much longer to figure out a clever and convenient way to get me alone.”

This is so uncomfortable omg and why is this written so weird? The grammar in this book is alarming.

That confession was a lot deeper than I intended to go with a man I just confidently assumed would be making out with me by now.

I truly hate being in Will’s head oh my god make it stop

There is no shame in being in-tune with our emotional and mental health needs.”

I’m all for mental health rep but this is feeling forced

I am cringing so hard omg

For being so Type-A, he’s sure got a lot of stuff!

They’re not mutually exclusive but ok

I could practically hear her wheels turning.

…she’s not this oblivious, right?

“Wait…our Graham?” Klair asks after literally picking her jaw up off the office floor.

Did she forget what happened a chapter ago? Who proofread this?

The thought of Graham alone sends me spiraling into the depths of lust

what

I ignore the clear worry in Klair’s voice as I beeline toward Graham’s office door, forcing it open, and slamming it shut behind me. Hard.

How has this man not been fired?

I risk another glance in Graham’s direction. His tall and muscular body appears slumped as he leans into his office’s door frame. Our eyes meet for the briefest of moments, his face scrunched with confusion,

Normally you have to like, tell your boss you’re leaving for the day but sure just walk out ok

Closing the door on the hope of us.

Will is way too dramatic for my liking everything is so extreme and it is exhausting

He’s soaking wet and completely disheveled, a look I’ve never seen on him before, but he’s as beautiful as ever.

This feels a little Heartstopper to me

Even if his name’s on the building, I’ll still kick his ass.”

ok but he didn’t do anything wrong?

My insecurities skyrocket, my self-doubt explodes, and I’m left questioning anything and everything.”

but even the most anxious of individuals don’t barge into their boss’s office to scream at them when they’re insecure………….

When I reach for the note, he quickly scoops it up and sticks out his tongue like a cocky schoolboy on the playground.

Is this the same character?! Graham would never

“This most certainly is a date, and at the risk of being forward, you’re a little too overdressed for my liking.” He leans back in his chair and cocks an eyebrow, smirking even more as he grabs his menu. Well shit… I’m hard.

I'm embarrassed for these characters

I’m the self-appointed President of the Taylor Swift Fan Club.”

This book is making me embarrassed to be a swiftie

I cover my face with my hands to avoid whatever expression his face is making. Probably disgust.

um i am offended swifties are a proud people wtf we dont cower in shame

but I’m a big thriller and romance guy.

stop bashing romance novels then damn

“I’d like to ask one more question.” “Shoot.” “Can you please say something else in Spanish?” I ask, doing my best to appear charming and endearing rather than undeniably desperate and thirsty.

POC are not trained seals???? What is this???

“Somehow, I know exactly what you mean, stud,”

no

the thin, gray fabric doing nothing to hide his drool-worthy bulge.

shocking we chose grey

exhale, releasing the tension he must have been carrying all day. “Hi, handsome…I hate how little I got to see you today.” “I…I thought maybe you had—.” I glance down,

jfc

I’’ve learned to mask the complicated parts of who I am.

who proofread this

intricately drawn tattoo covering his shoulder with my fingertips, a beautiful dream catcher with earth toned feathers,

no

Graham is leaning against his parked SUV

you live in nyc why do you own an suv

“There is absolutely nothing for you to apologize for,” he interrupts, his tone soft as he meets my gaze. “I’m the sorry one, Will. It was never, ever my intention to bring up anything that causes you pain or harm.”

This book is doing too much

We signed a few forms and confirmed that on paper, Graham wasn’t my supervisor in any way and went about our business.

but he is???? what? do we have a new boss?

“Graham, I adore you…you’re the best editor and colleague I’ve ever worked with, but do you do anything for fun?”

Why is this a question? These fools have been hanging out for months i feel like we'd know this info what have they been doing

“Thank you so much…floor 21, please.” I detect a beautiful and alluring accent in her voice. Italian? Is it weird that she’s spoken a handful of words and I desperately want to just sit and listen to her talk all day? I’m obnoxious.

Please stop

“Um…so do you, stud.

Am I in a production of Grease?

“What else, Will?” I can also smell the tuna fish sandwich she’d had for lunch but I don’t see any reason to bring that up now.

We are having a panic attack but can make that mental joke? Weird but ok

Teddy Graham…this

We were doing so well forgetting this nickname existed

He places my camera into my hands,

....his polaroid? k

Zooming out, Graham’s

Ok not the polaroid but maybe someone could have said earlier we own multiple cameras because i am just laughing at this man taking polaroids of jellyfish

It’s like being seen for the first ever…like I am free of the man I thought I needed to be and

One of the most highlighted lines in the book and it's missing a word