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ground
Floor not ground, not cooking outside!
My frown
Use frown, not My frowned
Miss. Sullivan.”
Dele period after Miss
Jenn, I don’t think you want to do this.”
Needs space between the I and Jenn.
Jenn, I...
leeched
Not leeched (a slimy sucking creature) but leached, to drain away or fade.
Isn’t bandicoot
bandicoot is a marsupial animal in Australia not a potato.
Didnt jenn say before she had the file only on thumb drives not phone or laptop?
If true then this should change, with Cletus surprised the hacker didnt find the film. Or maybe he deleted the residual memory bfrim deleted files. Whatever this lune is inconsistent.
Inconsistent
his dark hair.
First his hair was red now it is dark? Confusing details.
my pen pals.
Not pan pals but pen pals.
grilled chicken
Grilled or baked? Chicken is described as both and not correct.
“‘But sometimes,’ she’d
Remove single quotes, not part of the Grandma's quote.
car,
Here it is next page they are in the truck.
peeked her head out.
Use peeked out Or poked her head out.
frowned deepened
Wrong tense, not frowned, use frown.
ground
Not ground but porch or doorway
held his magnificent
Use his not is
Valley
What about ...and chin?
