Magic Study (Poison Study, #2)

by Maria V. Snyder

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brass knuckles,

Is this low or high fantasy ?

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A sudden intense desire for Valek was swept through my body.

Where did this come from? Passive writing galore.

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“I promised not to hurt you while we traveled to the Citadel. Once there, you’re mine.”

Why does every man in charge in this story want to get vIolent with a 20 year old girl who is only 5'4''? There has to be a better way to create tension in the story.

“No. I want time to play. I have all kinds of games planned for when I have you, my sweet.”

This dialog is SO terrible.