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“And if you really want to get on my good side,” I’m practically nibbling kissing the poor bastard’s cheek, I’m so close, “You put it at the beginning and the end. How’s that?”
“And if you really want to get on my good side,” I’m practically nibbling kissing the poor bastard’s cheek, I’m so close, “You put it at the beginning and the end. How’s that?”
Missing word, need to insert ‘and’ after ‘nibbling’.
“Meaning it’s largely in culture form, sir.”
“Meaning it’s largely in culture form, sir.”
Incorrect capitalization, need to change ‘sir’ to ‘Sir’.
Please note:
- There are multiple sentences that has this utilized correctly and incorrectly, so at minimum the text should be edited for consistency.
- I will only highlight and document this once, but a proper search needs to be completed and all the text updated.
When my parents died in shuttle accident, the deed passed on to the next eldest male relative, who happened to be my Uncle Daniel.
When my parents died in shuttle accident, the deed passed on to the next eldest male relative, who happened to be my Uncle Daniel.
Missing word, need to insert ‘a’ after ‘my parents died in’.
Being married to a man like him would be unspeakable boring, and then I’d have to let him touch me on our wedding night.
Being married to a man like him would be unspeakable boring, and then I’d have to let him touch me on our wedding night.
Incorrect word tense, need to change unspeakable boring’ to ‘unspeakably boring’.
It gets my dress streaked with dirt and green splotches, but I have a change of clothes waiting me in the saddle bags on my hover bike.
It gets my dress streaked with dirt and green splotches, but I have a change of clothes waiting me in the saddle bags on my hover bike.
Missing word, need to insert ‘for’ after ‘have a change of clothes waiting’.
For the first time I feel a pang of sympathy, but no so much I tell her to stop as she kneels next to the tub and places her hands on my back.
For the first time I feel a pang of sympathy, but no so much I tell her to stop as she kneels next to the tub and places her hands on my back.
Typo, or incorrect word choice, need to change ‘but no so much’ to ‘but NOT so much’.
I can’t resist fondling her quivering mass of love jelly, and Alundra doesn’t seem to mind.
I can’t resist fondling her quivering mass of love jelly, and Alundra doesn’t seem to mind.
“quivering mass of love jelly” … 🤣
Standing in front of the door to his—or should I say, our—home and waiting for his convenience gets old after immediately.
Standing in front of the door to his—or should I say, our—home and waiting for his convenience gets old after immediately.
Extra inserted word, need to remove ‘after’ before ‘immediately’.
Now that I have sufficient light, I can see that the walls are carved with bas reliefs of the octo-people apparently worshipping some large ovoid structure or being.
Now that I have sufficient light, I can see that the walls are carved with bas reliefs of the octo-people apparently worshipping some large ovoid structure or being.
Typo, or incorrect word choice, need to change ‘bas reliefs’ to ‘base reliefs’.
This is what I get for not insisting the perimeter was secure.
This is what I get for not insisting the perimeter was secure.
Incorrect as written, need to edit. Maybe change ‘was secure’ to ‘be secured’.
I know he took me in here because of noise concerns, but I’m afraid anyone in the camp knows exactly what we’re doing.
I know he took me in here because of noise concerns, but I’m afraid anyone in the camp knows exactly what we’re doing.
Incorrect word choice, need to change ‘anyone’ to ‘everyone’.
The light is produces isn’t glaring or painfully bright, but oddly soothing.
The light is produces isn’t glaring or painfully bright, but oddly soothing.
Incorrect word choice or typo, need to change ‘IS produces’ to ‘IT produces’.
But where I’ve likely done injury to my uncle Daniel is to his reputation.
But where I’ve likely done injury to my uncle Daniel is to his reputation.
Incorrect capitalization, need to change ‘uncle Daniel’ to ‘Uncle Daniel’.
Please note:
- There are multiple sentences that has this utilized correctly and incorrectly, so at minimum the text should be edited for consistency.
- I will only highlight and document this once, but a proper search needs to be completed and all the text updated.
Mostly likely my life is going to improve soon.
Mostly likely my life is going to improve soon.
Incorrect word form, need to change ‘Mostly’ to ‘Most’.
“I am Ku’an, judicial magistrate.
“I am Ku’an, judicial magistrate.
Incorrect capitalization, ‘judicial magistrate’ needs to capitalized as it is a title.
Please note:
- There are multiple sentences that has this utilized correctly and incorrectly, so at minimum the text should be edited for consistency.
- I will only highlight and document this once, but a proper search needs to be completed and all the text updated for all titles and not just ‘judicial magistrate’.
He’s probably laugh and say something like— “Yeah. It’s time to kick some ass.”
He’s probably laugh and say something like— “Yeah. It’s time to kick some ass.”
Incorrect word choice, need to change ‘He’s probably’ to ‘He’d probably’.
This is what you get for attacking us when we’re vulnerable. Not so high and mighty now, are you?
This is what you get for attacking us when we’re vulnerable. Not so high and mighty now, are you?
Incorrect punctuation, need to add missing quotation marks.
Damn it, I’m out of songs. Isn’t there some way you can understand me besides signing?”
Damn it, I’m out of songs. Isn’t there some way you can understand me besides signing?”
Typo, need to change ‘signing’ to ‘singing’.
Oh God, what if he was killed the assault?
Oh God, what if he was killed the assault?
Missing word, need to insert ‘in’ after ‘he was killed’.
