Jeremy McLeod

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His voice was becoming smoother, and other small characteristics were becoming noticeable. His skin was perfectly clear, all signs of scarring vanished, and his hair was slowly turning a silvery-blond.
Jeremy McLeod
The "other small characteristics" phrase is totally unnecessary since you immediately go on to list them. It comes off as padding.
Dungeon Calamity (The Divine Dungeon, #3)
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