“Mana storm!” a screaming voice woke Dale from his uneasy slumber as an alarm began to howl.
"'Mana storm!'
Dale, woken from his uneasy slumber by the sentry's yell, winced as a shrill alarm began to howl."
There, doesn't that sound better? You have a real tendency to try to cram too much into one "dialog + 'said phrase'". Break things up a liitle and it won't sound like you're running out of air and rushing to get everything out before that happens.
