Jeremy McLeod

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toward his direction.
Jeremy McLeod
"…in his direction", "…towards him", or "…his way." Not "towards his direction." That's one too many layers of abstraction. I'd also merge the next sentence with this one: "…in his direction, then returned my attention…". As it is you've got too many simple "I" sentences in a row. Got to switch up your phrasing.
Dungeon Calamity (The Divine Dungeon, #3)
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