“If you are what you eat, I am an innocent man!
Ok, so now the corrupt clerk is a friggin' PSYCHOTIC CANNIBAL!? WAY too over-the-top, and further demonstrates Frank's bad judgment. Regardless, this is so abrupt that it kills my immersion. It sounds like you came up with a line you liked and just shoehorned it in wherever you could. This is the kind of thing you need to lay a little groundwork for beforehand. Maybe have some unexplained murders or disappearances happen before this.
