It was almost as though—and I might be projecting here, but I don't think so—she had listened to me and understood.
Understood what? That you want to work for a magazine? Like the words you used in a language she happens to speak? Is this a necessary sentence? Or are you trying to say that it seemed like she understood the desire and drive to be a writer? Because that was not conveyed in any of the four words she used as a response, and writing this insipid inner dialogue doesn't make ot so.
