Brimstone (Fae & Alchemy, #2)

by Callie Hart

There doesn’t need to be an ellipsis here or and “either way”…TRIM THE FAT, CALLIE.

“Stop! No! Don’t! She’s sick! Please! Please, please, please, don’t take it. I can’t help her without it. I’ll do anything, please, I promise—” Carrion’s eyes went wide when I put my hand on his shoulder.

I’m going to be so sad when Carrion learns he had healing magic and just didn’t know it

glass flats,

Glass flats? Like Salt flats, but glass? why, was there a nuclear war or something? IS THIS POST APOCALYPTIC? Please say yes bs that will fix the whole cliffs notes thing…

caroming

His mind was billiards-ing out of control? I mean. It’s a word. Just not the right word. carom /ˈkerəm / ‹Billiards chiefly N. Amer.› I. noun 1. another term for billiard (sense 2). 2. (also carom billiards) — any of the billiard games played on a table without pockets. II. verb — [no obj.] 1. make a carom; strike and rebound. – origin late 18th cent.: abbreviation of carambole, from Spanish carambola, apparently from bola ‘ball.’

There were still things about me that Kingfisher of the Ajun Gate was yet to learn.

I should hope so, since you’ve known each other for like three weeks.

“Zilvaren,” I said breathlessly. “The city, fashioned after the shape of a wheel. The walls form the wards, but they aren’t spokes. The whole thing…” My head was spinning. “It’s a sigil. This entire time, Madra has been using the city itself to siphon the magic of its inhabitants. Zilvaren is the biggest piece of spellwork ever created.”

This information should have come much earlier in the story. She keeps doing these exposition breaks and it just demolishes the tension and cinematic resonance of these scenes

This should have been between Kingfisher and Danya in a Kingfisher POV And Saeris didn’t need to beat her up first. WHY is Callie so insistent on “knocking her down a peg” what is with this Pick Me shit?