Colony One Mars (Colony Mars #1)
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injection trajectory.
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nonetheless.
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But be careful, though.
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“Cannabis.
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so to speak.
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“She’ll be out for a few hours.”
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“She’ll be out for a few hours.
David P. Duffy
Needless repetition; just stated exactky the same, a paragraph back.
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Still,
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so to speak.
David P. Duffy
Again author uses hack phrases.
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of course,
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Nevertheless,
David P. Duffy
Huh? Why "…Nevertheless...?" Senseless.
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but
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Now t...
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They arrayed themselves around Peter VanHoff’s field of vision like dead relatives in a Victorian séance.
David P. Duffy
Is this from the author's personal experience or his personal belief?
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before woke up again.
David P. Duffy
Proofreading miss…"…[he] woke up again…."
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But his injuries paled in comparison to the torment that afflicted Decker, so Jann had no qualms about relocating him to the floor, while Decker took up residence in his stead.
David P. Duffy
Huh? Things were pretty silly, actually dumb prior to this. Now, a seriously injured crewmate, a MEDICAL DOCTOR, is relegated to the floor, so an infected, raging, homicidal crewmate can use the sole bed in medlab?
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If you want to stay over there and play mommy, that’s your problem.
David P. Duffy
Some honorable mission commander.
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malaise
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This choice by the author, continuing to label the vector as "…the malaise…," shows how lost he is.
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Of course,
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of course.”
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Decker’s safe enough here for now.
David P. Duffy
Really?
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“Fancy a toke?”
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Stoners on Mars.
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of course,
David P. Duffy
Hobbyist level writing skill set.
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Jann wasn’t sure if he was thinking or had simply stopped talking.
David P. Duffy
Maybe STONED?
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Decker is a vegetable.
David P. Duffy
He's a known threat, currently sedated and restrained. Still a severe hazard to lives and survival.
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This is major and we need to get this information back to COM.”
David P. Duffy
Freudian Slip?
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No doubt, the two mugs of colony cider and the smoke had a lot to do with it.
David P. Duffy
A compound fracture, broken ribs and collar bone, blood loss, and being heavily medicated, all within one (1) day, doesn't contribute to "…fatigue…?"
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Nevertheless,
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Hack.
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Hack.
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contamination
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“Indeed,
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“Nonetheless,
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Suffice to say,
David P. Duffy
Who talks like this? Author apparently is a fan of stilted, Edwardian dialogue.
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this coffee is simply ambrosial.”
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David P. Duffy
Hack writing.
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He smiled and at that moment Jann found herself quite attracted to this enigmatic soul.
David P. Duffy
Insane premise given the circumstances. Maybe in a few months, sure, but after a few days of this horror show, no.
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“You know I can’t promise that. I’m a doctor. My duty is to save life,
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BS.
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of course.
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Suffice to say,
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Nevertheless,
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