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All around me,
Written in first person. :-/
All around me,
Repeated phrase
After all, there was a war on—and I intended to be a part of it.
Not a huge fan of this beginning.
What he didn’t know was that I was also only about four weeks old—at least in this world.
OK so it is an isekai. The beginning had me confused. Using a flashback for this type of story seems like a dubious choice. I’m not checked out yet, but I am wondering how the author is going to make this work.
“Simply inconceivable,”
OK, are we doing the princess bride now?
“Goblin raids are not something new to us. Usually, you press the horde
My last few comments have been negative but I am enjoying how the story is progressing.
They’ll kill you for
Interesting twist on the system. 👍🏻
I’d come to associate with someone reading my stats.
Oh wait, so everyone can see stats and stuff? I thought the author implied that talking about the status window would get the protagonist killed? Maybe he was just referring to quests?
Under the pretense of combing my hand through my wet hair, I brought up the flashing quest window on my HUD and opened it.
The author has not explained this well. This is another example where he is showing that having a system in her face is not normal, otherwise why would the protagonist be trying to hide it? Yet other characters have commented on his level so they definitely have the system as well… Confusing.
Quest Started: Deliver the Missive to the Count of Basset
Although I’m enjoying this book, the lack of background information on the protagonist is frustrating. Maybe the author will give that information via flashbacks later, but it already feels like it’s been too long not knowing about the protagonist’s background.
“I don’t like the sound of the border being left open, especially with things being the way they are.”
Why does he care? He’s not even from this world.
It was a dark blue gray and smelled slightly musty, but I was glad for the extra protection.
Musty? It smells like dust? I think the author meant musky — smells like animal.
If only there were incentives for finishing quests.
This is an interesting take on quests. Why no rewards? What will the twist be?
She blinked back at us reproachfully.
lol
Four of her six eyes had been gouged,
Why does that matter? She’s blind.
I was beginning to wonder if it might not have been deliberate.
Confusing. What is he basing this on?
Is there anything you could sell me at a premium?”
Discount, not premium.
Item: Iron Fang. Rare. Has a chance to inflict cursed damage on an opponent.
Couldn’t anyone, including the inquisition, use identify on the dagger while he’s wearing it and see that it’s cursed? Why is he not worried about that?
the eyes of a creature of the occult.
Not having any information on this guy’s backstory is really dragging down the book. How does he know what creatures of the occult look like? How is he so good at fighting? Things like this add up to be frustrating for the reader. I even went back to the summary page just to make sure I didn’t start reading book 2 by mistake, because it feels like I’ve missed quite a bit of information. This has me scratching my head, because overall the book is really well written.
“Oh, most definitely. That’s the one thing I am sure of.” One of the
Good example of my frustration. What background does he have that he’s confidently able to assert this?
It was a formality to make the sign of the saint upon meeting an inquisitor, but I kept pointedly
Argh! How does this dude from earth know this?!
It was accessible in mass,
En masse, not in mass.
“A fiend?” I feigned ignorance.
I fiened ignorance. Har har.
Like the Godking promised too in all the stories.”
To, not too.
“I’ve heard of it,” I
Heard of it from where? He’s from earth. Frustrating that we’re more than halfway through the book and the author still hasn’t illuminated us with the protagonists background. How long has he even been there? How is he so knowledgeable about things on this planet?
Although a generally enjoyable read, not having the author expand upon the world has really simplified the story. Feels somewhat flat and lifeless. Early on in the story I assumed the author would flush it out eventually, but now it feels like this is pretty much it as far as complexity of story goes.
I stood on a rocky hillock
Weird that he just found out about an otherworlder and then it skips ahead in the story.
Then he turned, and he and his household guards were faded down the steps.
Garbled sentence
Skills were invaluable, and if they could stack, or at least complement each other, then I would see a steady increase of power of time.
Garbled sentence
They wanted us to let our guard down. Every eye was on the Khan’s son.”
This doesn’t make sense. Every single person on the wall missed seeing hundreds of orcs moving to the base of the wall? Very poor world building.
“The Inquisition has been poking around recently, asking questions to the men. It seems like they are looking for someone, though they won’t say who.”
Isn’t the inquisition always looking for people? That is literally their entire raison d’etre.
“What do they call you, little man?”
Better response – “After today they will call me Orcslayer”
I drew my now-shieldless gauntlet across my body, raising my sword in a guard.
Uh… why is he not using his new and shiny custom-made cursed dagger that he paid so much for?
There might be a day when I would come to regret my decision here. But there was no time to dwell on it.
It feels like the writing style has changed a little bit. More juvenile.
an arrow whipped past and buried itself in the eye of the soldier.
If he could hit the soldiers eye, couldn’t he hit the orc’s eyes?
An ork magus is a powerful foe, and not one common soldiers are equipped to handle.”
This guy from earth sure does know a lot about magical warfare. It would be nice if the reader knew why.
The bodies of dead orks were lifted and heaved over the walls, tumbling fifty feet to the ground below.
The ladders being pushed down is bothering me. We now know the height of the wall is 50 feet and a ladder can’t sit vertically without falling over so it had to be at some sort of angle. 15° seems to be the minimum safe angle to prevent the ladder from tipping over. Given that, the tipping point of the ladder would be something like 14 feet away from the wall. In other words the ladder would have to be pushed 14 feet out before it would start falling in the other direction.
Hade cast hastily around on the ground until he found the crude iron spear on ork. He
Although probably means cast his gaze or cast is site or cast his eyes.
and the awakening old beasts…”
Garbled. The awakening of old beasts.
Men will betray men, and those whole rules will fall to corruption.
Garbled
Forgive me, Lord, but isn’t that something the academies claim isn’t possible?”
I know I’m beating a dead horse, but how does a guy from Earth know what the magical academies taught or didn’t teach?
“You feast bastard,”
Garbled.
could feel the stimulant burning its way through my veins—a pain like any other.
Unlike, not like.
We were striking a counterattack, now while the iron is hot.
Are not were.
