This time, as you read, watch for anything that momentarily makes you see words on the page and takes you out of experiencing the story. You are aiming for the reader’s total immersion. You should be able to spot these flaws after you have made the kind of changes I’ve suggested. If all this checking seems excessive, ask yourself would you fly in a plane in which the experienced pilot felt so cocksure that he didn’t actually perform the checklist that makes flying safer for all of us?
