The Trench (Meg #2)

by Steve Alten

Jonas felt his temper flaring.

This exact line is repeated twice within 2 or 3 pages. Also, it is telling, not showing, something Steve seems to like to do. It is fine here and there, but more showing would give the books more depth. (Hehe see what I did there?)

Jonas felt his temper flaring.

anger flashing

So much flashing. Anger flashing, flashing a smile. Flash this, flash that. Telling, not showing.

flashed anger.

flashed

flash

flashed