That One Night (Jacksonville Rays, #0.5)

by Emily Rath

Plus, there’s just something about him. I wasn’t lying before, I’m a total zodiac girl, and I believe in signs. I also believe in energy. He’s a good person—kind and compassionate. He’s a giver.

Ffs 🙄 you don’t even know his name but you know he’s a good person and he’s a “giver”

“Were you afraid you’d lose me to a real man?” I murmur. “Not a chance, gorgeous,” he replies. “You’ve got all the man you need right here.” I smile. Fuck, that’s a good line. My pussy must agree because our girl is feeling ravenous. I’m ready to climb this man like a tree.

You and your pussy are delusional 😖

My pussy is screaming for some attention, and I press into him with my hips, feeling his hardness.

Screaming pussy and his “hardness” 😬

Dragon Rachel purrs inside her cage. This man is in so much trouble.

Dragon Rachel needs to go away 🫠 there’s a way to make a main character fierce and confident in their sexuality without making them ridiculous. Not sure Rath got the memo with Rachel

“You like slow and sweet? You like it rough? Tell me what you need to get there, baby, and I’ll be your new MVP.”

MVP? 🙄 do our MCs think they’re in a porno?

so now I’m standing before her in nothing but my black boxer briefs, the front tented by my desperate dick. I’m not embarrassed. She’s clearly gagging for it.

😑 yeah…he’s something else all right

She’s waxed bare. Her pussy lips open, and I’m graced with a perfect view of her glistening pink center.

This whole section is 🤢 “pink center” - she’s not a fucking candy. And “pussy lips open”? Makes me think of curtains fluttering in the breeze 🤣

But his beauty goes so much deeper. He has a beautiful soul.

Girl, you do not know his fucking name! This is supposed to be a one night stand, just physical, and you’re going philosophical over “signs” and coincidences 😑

“When these briefs come off, it’s all over. You don’t know the meaning of the word stamina until you’ve been with me. I will fuck you senseless and you’ll beg me for more.”

Ffs 🤦🏼‍♀️

“Wait—tell me again you want this,” he says, a hint of uncertainty in his voice. “Tell me you want…me.”

Oh come on 🤦🏼‍♀️

But now I want you here because you’re kind and funny. I want you here because I feel a connection to you.”

My eyes hurt from rolling this much 🙄😑

I reach for his hand too, placing it over my heart. I close my eyes, letting my heart beat under his palm. “Do you feel that?” I murmur. “Yeah.” “Do you feel the synchronicity? We’re beating in time. I feel locked in with you—” “I feel it too,” he says.

Jesus Christ 🤦🏼‍♀️ apparently the star is a line just right for these two to end up naked together

My gaze settles on his hard cock, and I’m reminded all over again that I am so deliciously straight. Fuck, I love cock.

Again there’s a way to write a strong and confident character that is in touch with their sexuality. You don’t need to just blatantly say it, and that’s what’s most annoying about this character to me. It’s all shoved in your face instead of shown

His scent alone is making me hornier. It’s warm and luxurious, woodsy, and so masculine. God, this scent is my catnip. My pussynip, comes the stupid thought.

Yeah, it’s a stupid thought alright 😑

“I’m fucking desperate,” I growl, snatching up my discarded briefs. “I mean…I’m clean if you are.”

Oh come on! 🤦🏼‍♀️

“You don’t need to worry about pregnancy. I have an IUD, and those are more effective than condoms anyway.” I blink. “Shit…really?” “Doctor, remember?”

A doctor and yet so stupid as to ignore protection for a pretty man 🤦🏼‍♀️ IUD won’t do shit against STDs Doc! 🙄😖

“I’ve always loved storms,” she murmurs, her hands resting on my forearms. “The complexity, the power. Its nature showing herself to us. We dare to cage her in, but storms are her way of showing us the truth. She is limitless.”

Sure 😑 let’s get pretentious…just what this thing was lacking

“Someone’s feeling cocky.” He laughs, grabbing my jaw and giving me a kiss that tastes like caramel sauce. “Yeah, you. Right now. You’re about to be so full of my cock. You’ll feel me everywhere. I want you just like this. Down on your elbows,”

😑

We’re locked together with more than just our bodies. I feel him everywhere.

…and I’m done - I’m throwing in the towel 🏳️