can you give some examples of the poor writing ? I found it delightfully humorous . her's an example that made me smile : Jacob is carrying bella to the mountain to the camp site . Jacob : Is Edward the best kisser you’ve ever kissed ? Bella : I really cant say Jacob because Edward is the only person Ive ever kissed Jacob : Besides Me Bella : I don’t think of that as a kiss Jacob . I think of it more as and assault . Jacob: Ouch ! That’s cold ! Bella: (I shrugged I wasn’t going to take it back ) Jacob : I did apologize for that Bella : You did and I forgave you for it ….mostly Jacob : I still think its irresponsible . In your whole life you’ve only kissed one person . Who isn’t even a person and your calling it quits ? How do you know that’s what you want ? Shouldn’t you play the field alittle ? Bella: ( I kept my voice cool) I know exactly what I want Jacob : Then it couldn’t hurt to double check . Maybe you should try kissing someone else . Just for comparison sake . Since what happened the other day doesn’t count . You could kiss me for example.I don’t mind if you want to use MEEE to experiment . Bella: ( he pulled me tighter against his chest so that my face was closer to his. He was smiling at his joke but I did not want to take any chances ) Don’t mess with me Jake! I swear I wont stop him if he wants to break your jaw “ The panicky edge to my voice made him smile wider . Jacob : If you ask me to kiss you he have any reason to get upset . He said THAT was fine . Bella : Don’t hold your breathe Jake . No wait –I change my mind go right ahead and hold your breath until I ask you to kiss me . Jacob : You’re in a bad mood today Bella : I wonder why Jacob : Sometimes I think you like me more as a wolf Bella : Sometimes I do . Probably has something to do with the way you CANT TALK .
her's an example that made me smile :
Jacob is carrying bella to the mountain to the camp site .
Jacob : Is Edward the best kisser you’ve ever kissed ?
Bella : I really cant say Jacob because Edward is the only person Ive ever kissed
Jacob : Besides Me
Bella : I don’t think of that as a kiss Jacob . I think of it more as and assault .
Jacob: Ouch ! That’s cold !
Bella: (I shrugged I wasn’t going to take it back )
Jacob : I did apologize for that
Bella : You did and I forgave you for it ….mostly
Jacob : I still think its irresponsible . In your whole life you’ve only kissed one person . Who isn’t even a person and your calling it quits ? How do you know that’s what you want ? Shouldn’t you play the field alittle ?
Bella: ( I kept my voice cool) I know exactly what I want
Jacob : Then it couldn’t hurt to double check . Maybe you should try kissing someone else . Just for comparison sake . Since what happened the other day doesn’t count . You could kiss me for example.I don’t mind if you want to use MEEE to experiment .
Bella: ( he pulled me tighter against his chest so that my face was closer to his. He was smiling at his joke but I did not want to take any chances ) Don’t mess with me Jake! I swear I wont stop him if he wants to break your jaw “ The panicky edge to my voice made him smile wider .
Jacob : If you ask me to kiss you he have any reason to get upset . He said THAT was fine .
Bella : Don’t hold your breathe Jake . No wait –I change my mind go right ahead and hold your breath until I ask you to kiss me .
Jacob : You’re in a bad mood today
Bella : I wonder why
Jacob : Sometimes I think you like me more as a wolf
Bella : Sometimes I do . Probably has something to do with the way you CANT TALK .