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Hey, everyone, I'm just gonna jump right in:
I'm 16, writing my second book called The Vaelith.
Fantasy, war, vampires, etc.
I'm 6 chapters in (number 6 not finished) and need some feedback for them. Pleaze read at your free will and let me know!
There is no: swearing, explicit scenes or violence, for anyone worried.
Here's the link:

editor.reedsy.com/s/ePnUDpe

It has potential but it absolutely isn't ready for the public yet. There's critique that could be made, but honestly I don't feel like I should. This very much feels like your first draft and it wouldn't be fair.

Simply put. It needs developmental work. Write what you can of this story. Let it sit and age a bit, and then go back and re-read, edit, and rewrite. Short of getting an editor to help with this process that's your best steps going forward.

Kai's, it's impressive that you're tackling a fantasy epic at 16 - the worldbuilding alone is a huge undertaking. Keiji's advice about letting the draft sit is solid; I've found that distance gives you fresh eyes on pacing and character arcs. What's been the most fun part of building your fantasy world so far?