Thanks for giving it a shot and for the honest review Peter. I always enjoy your input and the fact you give an indepth perpective with your reviews.
A lot of the confusion and instability in the opening was intentional. I wanted Shepard to feel more like a force already moving through Benjamin’s, kind of in the shadows and all, life rather than a traditionally introduced character. The early sections were written to reflect Benjamin’s unraveling state of mind and just touch on Shepard and then he's tossed in.
That said, I can definitely understand how that approach might not click for every reader. I still appreciate you taking the time to read it and write such a thoughtful review.
A lot of the confusion and instability in the opening was intentional. I wanted Shepard to feel more like a force already moving through Benjamin’s, kind of in the shadows and all, life rather than a traditionally introduced character. The early sections were written to reflect Benjamin’s unraveling state of mind and just touch on Shepard and then he's tossed in.
That said, I can definitely understand how that approach might not click for every reader. I still appreciate you taking the time to read it and write such a thoughtful review.