Thank you for the constructive criticism! You're very astute and spotted it was my very first attempt at writing. The editing left a lot to be desired, exactly as you mentioned. I will take on board all of your critique and use it as advice when/if I re-write. Honestly without snarky or nasty comments is easier to take and use, and I appreciate your review.
Honestly without snarky or nasty comments is easier to take and use, and I appreciate your review.