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Have to ask about the no one knows why a forced peace isn't going so swell, though.
Thanks! Good things to look at! I didn't realize I used "now" three times in three sentences. Ugh.
Rachel wrote: "Thanks! Good things to look at! I didn't realize I used "now" three times in three sentences. Ugh."
Welcome! Don't know why I'm breaking it down to sentence level. You're quite capable of doing so. Oh well.
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Have to ask about the no one knows why a forced peace isn't going so swell, though.
Thanks! Good things to look at! I didn't realize I used "now" three times in three sentences. Ugh.
Rachel wrote: "Thanks! Good things to look at! I didn't realize I used "now" three times in three sentences. Ugh."Welcome! Don't know why I'm breaking it down to sentence level. You're quite capable of doing so. Oh well.
"Now" is the only thing you might want to shift your focus to. Maybe a period after "resolved", then cut "and now", start "Six years later" and cut another "Now", An "uneasy peace". Cut a "now", and "As three countries". Or something to that effect.