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Lessons in Villainy

Some guy doing some talking thing.

The Somerset Celebration of Literature finished last Friday, though I didn’t get home until Sunday after staying on the Gold Coast to visit family…and if you ever get the chance to check out the Gold Coast Hinterland, I highly recommend it!

I’ve been to writers’ festivals as an author before…well, once before…but this was the first time I’d had multiple sessions over multiple days. And the experienced was incredible. I learnt so much in so short a period of time, and I can’t wait to take all the knowledge I’ve gained and start applying it to my future events.

Something that I found especially interesting was how engaged and switched on all the kids were, with many of them showing a confidence I couldn’t have dreamed of when I was their age. When I asked if there were any writers in the audience, one girl raised her hand and said she was writing a verse novel. A verse novel! I wouldn’t have the guts to try that now, let alone when I was a teenager!

Spurred on by her calm self-assurance, I decided to take a chance and read out a poem I wrote a year or so ago and recently rediscovered in my notebook. Admittedly, I did it mostly to fill time, but the kids in the audience responded really well to it, so I may end up posting it here…in fact, I might even add it to the end of this blog post. Let’s see how I feel by the end…

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One question I was asked during my sessions was  ”What makes a good villain?”. I’m afraid I can’t remember the name of the guy who asked me that particular question, which is awful of me given that he came to my signing line after the talk and was very sweet. I felt at the time that I gave him a bit of wishy-washy answer, so I thought I’d take a moment to address that critical error.

What makes a good villain?

It’s something I ask myself a lot because, in writing adventure fiction, you want to create an antagonist that is memorable, that is intimidating, that is worthy of your hero, and who maybe even has some shades of sympathy to him/her. I think the best villains are the ones who are a little morally ambiguous – perhaps they have a tragic back story, or a legitimate reason for doing what they do, even if they’ve taken it too far.

But more than that, the best villains are the characters that shed light on your protagonist. In dealing with the quandary of this opponent, facets of your main character’s personality and history are revealed. Villains are dark mirror images of heroes, serving as a warning of what we can all become if we give into the weaker elements of ourselves.

I could write up a whole essay on this subject, but I think I’ll leave it at that for the time being. Don’t be surprised, however, if there ends up being a future blog post that digs down deep on this topic to an almost tedious level!

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In addition to Somerset, I’ve also made a trip in the past week to Channel 9 studios, where I filmed my second appearance for Kids’ WB. I’ll blog more about that in the future, but in the meantime enjoy this behind-the-scenes snapshot;

I’m the one in the middle. Thankfully not in costume.

The segment should be airing at the end of March, though that’s yet to be confirmed. Watch this space for updates!

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Okay, so we’re at the end of the post. Will I put up that poem? Hmmm.

You know what? Nothing ventured, nothing gained. So here’s the poem, but before you read it there’s a few things you should know;

1) I have no idea if it’s crap or not.

2) I’m not a poet. See point # 1.

3) It got a good response at the festival, but I think that had mostly to do with how I read it…and the demand I made for applause at the end.

4) It’s about writing and being a writer.

5) I studied poetry at uni but the best I got was a ‘C’.

6) I don’t have a title for it.

7) I’m stalling now.

8) Here’s the poem…

We are dream merchants. And magicians.

We are astronomers, charting the stars,

and astronauts, reaching up to touch them.

We work instruments made of mirrors,

weaving invisible threads.

We stitch together scraps of cloth collected across a lifetime,

to make flying carpets and coats of many colours.

We are explorers. And hermits.

We study the soul and bring it names.

We take names and make them ideas.

We sell inspiration. We sow fancy and bottle stray thoughts.

We do this with ink in our veins and with our hearts beating to the rhythm of a keyboard.

We do this because we have to.

We do this because we can’t imagine anything else.

And that’s it. Hate mail can be sent here.

‘Til next time.

Some Quick Thoughts from Somerset Writers’ Festival

You’ll recognise me as the least famous one in this photo.

I’m up in sunny, steamy Queensland at Somerset College’s Celebration of Literature and having a fantastic time talking to all the kids attending. I’ve only had two sessions so far, with a dinner and then a third session still to come, but I’m already picking up some trends that I thought I’d share with you;

- If you’re a children’s/YA author who doesn’t have an opinion on One Direction, I recommend sitting down and formulating some kind of response because you will be asked what you think of them, and no matter what you say half the room will erupt in protest.

- Also, Marvel versus DC tensions run deep.

- Daleks versus Cybermen is also strangely controversial.

- Kids be smart, man.

And that’s it, other than to say I’ve been having a great time. It’s amazing to see so many kids excited about and interested in books. The enthusiasm is overwhelming! But for now, I’m off to work out exactly how I feel about One Direction. Muttering “somethingsomethingsomething Harry’s one, right?” has NOT been cutting it!

 

3 Tips for a Successful Author Signing

In a couple of days I’ll be flying out to the Somerset Writers Festival to kick off the promotional tour for Vanguard Prime: Wild Card. There’s a variety of events you’re asked to do as a writer, and I have to admit that I find the Q&A-style events the easiest; after all, it’s pretty straightforward answering questions about yourself.

In promoting a book, however, you’ll sooner or later be asked to do one of the trickier style of events; the in-store appearance. Of course, if you’re a famous author you’ll more than likely find a clamouring crowd of fans waiting with bated breath on your arrival, and you can just sit down and start signing.

But when you’re starting out, the situation’s very different. You’ll arrive at the store to find a table set up with a chair and a pile of books, and you’ll take a seat and wait…and wait…and wait.

If you’re a new author heading out for their first in-store appearance, allow me to offer three pieces of advice that may make the experience a more successful one for you.

 1         Everyone loves a freebie

It can be hard getting people’s attention, and even harder finding a way to strike up a conversation. There’s a very simple solution to this; sugar.

If you take a big bowl of lollies with you, you’ll have something to offer people as they pass by/enter the store/do their best to avoid making eye contact with you. I recommend a variety pack of individually wrapped lollies; that way people can pick a flavour that appeals to them, and they know they haven’t been breathed all over.

I know one author who makes up goodie bags whenever they’re doing an in-store appearance, with a couple of lollies included in a netted bag with a postcard flier for their book.

If you feel guilty about the prospect of widening the spread of diabetes, however, you could look into getting promotional bookmarks made up with your book cover printed on it…but people will be less likely to take something like that than they are a free sugar hit.

 2         Don’t be afraid to come out from behind the table

One problem that keeps authors from having a successful in-store appearance is that they feel they should be anchored to the one spot, sitting in their chair behind their signing table waiting for people to come up to them.

You may feel shy, you may feel like you’re owed the public’s attention, but the simple fact is that no one’s going to come to you; you have to go to them.

So stand up, make eye contact, stand in front of the desk, or even on top of the desk if you have to. Smile, say hello…and then ask them if they want a lolly. You’ll have much more success with the public if you engage with them instead of sitting there thumbing your iPhone.

 3         Don’t go for the hard sell

People don’t like being aggressively marketed to; they prefer to make a connection with someone. You’d be surprised the kind of reaction you’ll get if you ask people what kind of books they read or what they’re looking for, rather than jumping straight to who you are and why you’re here today.

In fact, I had that very experience myself – people were much more likely to pick up my book and consider buying it if I’d chatted with them first, rather than falling all over myself to try and put the book in their hands. Be confident enough to take the slower path. Make a connection. In short, have fun.

 

At this stage, I don’t have any in-stores lined up for this tour, but should one arise I’ll be doing my best to keep my own advice in mind. After all, it’s easy to get overwhelmed when you’re in a situation like that…but if I were to add one more piece of advice, it would be to relax, breathe and remember; this is life as an author. Enjoy it!

The Ideas Shoppe: The Making of a Superhero (Part 3)

The wait is over! Vanguard Prime: Wild Card will be released tomorrow, 27th February, and to celebrate I thought I’d return to a series of posts that haven’t been featured here in a while; the Making of a Superhero. And given that Vanguard Prime: Wild Card heavily features the Knight of Wands, what better time than now to take a look at the team’s resident man of mystery?

So mysterious you may not know that’s him on the left…

Previously, I’ve discussed the process behind creating the two junior members of the team – Goldrush and Machina – but I knew that the senior members would be a challenge unto themselves.

I wanted to create characters that felt interesting and dynamic enough that they could very easily be the protagonist of their own book. The examples I had in mind of these stemmed from comic books, of course, where the Justice League and the Avengers were traditionally populated by characters that were already established in their own series.

This was in opposition to teams like the X-Men and the Fantastic Four, where the characters were created to be part of a team, and as interesting as they may be in their own right, they still work better as part of that team structure.

I wanted the “Big Three” of Vanguard Prime to be much like the Big Three of the Avengers and the Justice League. Just as Captain America, Thor & Iron Man and Superman, Batman & Wonder Woman all have their own supporting characters, antagonists and personal lives, I wanted to come up with characters that felt as established as that…without the benefit of 70 or so years of continuous publishing behind it.

I started in the place I was most comfortable with, drawing on the ‘Self-Made Man’/’Mortal Amongst Gods’ elements that Iron Man and Batman share, while also focusing on the ‘Dark Avenger’ archetype originated by characters like Zorro and the Shadow, their legacies continued to this day by the aforementioned Dark Knight Detective.

It wasn’t the first time I’d used the ‘Dark Avenger’ template to create a character; when I was 10, I came up with a spoof superhero called Penguin Man, who eventually mutated into “Nighthawk” when I was 12.

But with my new story, I didn’t want a Batman rip-off. I didn’t want to just transplant Nighthawk from my childhood into the present day (not least because there’s already more than one comic book character that’s taken that name).

So I looked back at the characters that intrigued me when I was younger; not the characters I loved, like Batman or Spider-Man, but the characters that seemed slightly goofy or “off”, but still stuck in the brain. Characters like Steve Ditko’s Blue Beetle and the Question, or Jack Kirby’s Mr Miracle. Strange, colourful characters that immediately capture your interest with how quirky they are.

I’ve spoken before of the need for a memorable superhero to have a strong thematic element; something that elevates them from the mundane to the iconographic. As an example; Batman and Spider-Man draw on the animal kingdom, with those two animals informing many of the elements that make those characters unique, such as Spider-Man’s web-slinging or Batman’s Batcave.

It’s hard these days, after so many thousands of superheroes have been introduced to the world, to come up with a unique theme for a new character. What I ended up drawing from was the memories I had of my mother practicing divination with her tarot card deck. I never put much stock in the fortune-telling side of it, but I always found the names and the illustrations of the cards themselves fascinating.

So bearing in mind the off-beat features of the Ditko and Kirby characters, I was immediately drawn to the “Knight of Wands” card, combining as it did aspects of the warrior and the magician under one, evocative name.

Storytelling is the art of posing questions and then answering them. The first question I posed to myself about a character called “the Knight of Wands” is why would he take that name? Especially when you consider that there are two decks in the tarot; the major arcana and the minor arcana, with the Knight of Wands belonging to the minor arcana. Out of all the cards in the deck, why would someone pick that one?

And that’s when it occurred to me; he’s named himself after a character from the minor arcana because there’s a villainous organisation called the Major Arcana that he’s working to bring down.

That’s where the next question comes into play; why? Why is he fighting this organisation? And it’s from there that I developed the Knight of Wands’ back story, fleshing out the Major Arcana as an organisation of superhumans that the Knight’s father founded but that has been overtaken and corrupted by his older brother.

This idea had a certain Shakespearean flavour to it that really appealed to me at the time; it’s only in retrospect that I also see the influences of films like Infernal Affairs and anime series like Cowboy Bebop as also having a fair amount of influence.

Using the tarot deck also provided me with ideas for the Knight of Wands’ paraphernalia, including his method of transport; his “Batmobile” wouldn’t be a car, it’d be a supersonic scramjet stolen from the Major Arcana, named after “the Chariot” card.

Originally, I had the Knight carrying a flaming sword, but that felt off given that he was meant to be a knight of wands. An off-hand comment someone made about Doctor Who’s sonic screwdriver being the Doctor’s “magic wand” gave me the idea of giving the Knight a similar high-tech wand, albeit as a collapsible quarterstaff, which is where his “laser-lance” comes from (though I called it a “photon rod” at first).

His real name – Ethan Knightley – came from two separate sources; Tom Cruise’s Ethan Hunt from the Mission: Impossible franchise (not that I’m a major fan, but it was always a name I thought was cool) and Mr Knightley from Jane Austen’s Emma. I imagined the Knight to have been a Scottish aristocrat, born and bred to continue on his family’s legacy, only to end up a beggar knight errant.

This would be a Batman with no fortune, forced to do things on a budget, and just as the Knight of Wands card represents improvisation, he’d work from his gut and off-the-cuff rather from than any grand plan or comprehensive system of preparation.

Unlike the other characters I created for Vanguard Prime, the Knight’s creation came quickly. By the time I was done, I had a character that I was very fond of and just as interested in exploring, which is why I decided to make Book 2 his spotlight story after keeping him in the background of Book 1.

That affection has also led this post to being much longer than I intended it to be, but I wanted to give you a sense of everything that goes into creating a superhero character…especially as it seems to be one of the things that people Google that brings them to my website!

And if all this rambling has somehow intrigued you about the Knight of Wands, this is where I remind you that you can read all about him and the Major Arcana in Wild Card, Book 2 in the Vanguard Prime series. You’ll recognise it on the shelf; it’ll be the only one where a hooded figure is wielding a flaming laser-lance…

Note: Do not attempt this at home.

‘Til next time.

An Ode to Handwriting

Ever since I was a kid, the simple practice of handwriting has proven a real challenge for me. I distinctly remember being seven years old and completely confounded by what the teacher was saying about how to hold your pencil “properly”. You were supposed to grip your pencil just so, because if you didn’t then terrible things would happen.

It turned out that the terrible thing was that you’d develop a nub, which is what happened to me in high school after years of holding my pens and pencils incorrectly. Worse, the nub would get red and sore when I spent too long writing. Give that this was before kids were working off laptops in the classroom, I was writing by hand a lot, and my nub would often be aching by the end of the day.

My handwriting was always messy and it never got better. My cursive consisted of scrambled letters joined together like sloppy spaghetti, and it was with great frustration that I struggled to write as fast as my brain was working – mentally, I’d be a sentence or three ahead of what my hand was up to writing.

When I started uni, I switched back to writing in all caps, much as I did in primary school before we were indoctrinated into exclusively using “running writing”. This meant my penmanship was clearer to read and looked less like mad scribbles, but it also looked less adult.

I envied the mature, artful, confident handwriting of my parents, who had undergone penmanship lessons in their formative years on par with military drills. The method used to teach them cursive seems awfully draconian in this day and age…but it got results; their handwriting had a mechanical reliability to its form. They could write for hours and it would still look as precise and beautiful as it did when they started.

My handwriting has stayed much the same in the years since graduating from uni, and I still feel self-conscious about it. Now, you might argue I’m worrying over nothing. After all, we’re living in the 21st century and everyone speaks of handwriting as a dying art form. But then there’s this;

I received my advanced copies of Vanguard Prime: Wild Card today (!). It’s the second time I’ve been sent copies of a book with my name on it, and it was just as thrilling as the first. I’m also happy to say that it looks great. But the reason I bring up the issue of handwriting is because I’ll be heading out soon to promote the book’s release, and with that comes the fact that I’ll be inscribing and signing many, many copies (well…hopefully that’s what I’ll be doing).

I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again; if you want to be a writer some day, practice your penmanship! (Well, penpersonship). Not only is it handy for signing books, it also means you’re not beholden to a keyboard when it comes time to write. I remember taking a trip a couple of years ago and during the long flights I discovered…or rediscovered…the simple joy and satisfaction in writing by hand.

In fact, writing my first draft by hand proved a distinct advantage. When it comes time to transcribe the handwritten notes, it gives you the opportunity to do some simultaneous rewriting. You get a second draft just by doing something as simply as typing out your story.

And in case you were wondering, Vanguard Prime: Wild Card will be released on 27th February. In the meantime, I’ll be in my office practicing my handwriting. I hope I don’t hurt my nub too bad.

From the Back of a Cow Paddock

Life without a reliable Internet connection sucks. There’s no other way to put it. I’m currently living on Information Superhighway rations; tiny little nuggets of wuh-wuh-wuhdotcom. The reason for this, and forgive me if I’m repeating myself because I can’t go and check what I have and haven’t already written about, is that we’ve recently moved house.

We were originally told that we’d be Internet ready from the moment we unpacked. Then we were told that we’d have to wait for the National Broadband Network to be rolled out in our area which, up until recently, was nothing more than a cow paddock (our area, that is, not the NBN). The thing is, “our area” technically already has the NBN. In fact, if we were leaving on the corner of our street, we’d already have it.

But because we live in the middle of our street, we’re a different stage of estate development. This meant that the NBN wouldn’t be supplied to us until February. Then it became March. At this stage, God only knows when it’s going to happen.

All of this is to say I’ve been a bad blogger (and Tweeter) and I’m sorry, but it may be like this for a while.

Which is a shame, because there’s been lots going on – like, for example, the fact that my wife and I went and saw Neil Gaiman at the Athenaeum Theatre in Melbourne last week. It’s always great getting the chance to hear him speak, as he’s an incredibly inspiring figure, but I have to say I still preferred the first time I saw him, which was at the Children’s Book Council of Australia conference in 2008.

His key note speech there would be a hard one to top, admittedly. He spoke of the link between innovation and imagination; the fact that everything that is or was or will be had to be dreamed of first, and that it’s in stories that dreams are seeded. Powerful words to tell people who’ve spent more of their lives being told to get their heads out of the clouds, I’m sure you’ll agree!

My fondness for his CBCA appearance has also probably been augmented by the fact that, this week, I ran across a review of Vanguard Prime: Goldrush that appeared in the November edition of  their official magazine, Reading Time. My publicist at Penguin supplied me with a scan of the review, but given that it’s in PDF format, is relatively large, and I don’t have the best connection for uploading at the moment, I may have to point you instead to the text version that’s available online here.

I have no way of expressing just how exciting it is to get such a great review from the CBCA. When I was a kid, I would always use their gold and silver cover stamps as a guide to what books I should read; to have popped up on their radar is such a thrill. To have them write such kind words about my book is a personal milestone.

The warm-and-fuzzies don’t stop there, though. I wrote previously about the event I had at Brunswick North Primary school and the fact that their teacher, Travis Berketa, had set up a reading library full of comics. Well, during the course of moving house I packed up a few of my old comics and sent them through to Travis’s class, and lo and behold if they didn’t send through the sweetest ‘Thank you’ card!

I’d hoped to be able to provide a photo of it, but once again the crummy Internet connection keeps me from doing that, so instead I’ll simply say thanks to the kids of Brunswick North Primary, and point you in the direction of Travis’s book Jack Majors: Superhero. If you enjoyed Vanguard Prime, I’m sure you’ll enjoy this too! Thanks, Travis!

So that’s just about everything I had to catch you all up on, other than to say that Vanguard Prime: Wild Card will be getting released at the end of February. I can’t wait until you all get the chance to read it. When you do, let me know what you think of it!

In the meantime, I’ll be here…in the cow paddock…waiting for the Internet to be switched on…

A Final Farewell to 2012

2012 was a big year.

It was the year my first book was published. It was the year my fiancé and I moved into the first home that either of us had ever owned. And, on December 30, on our fifth anniversary, it was the year we got married.



Given that we’re both involved in publishing, our wedding had some bookish touches. Paperlovebuds provided bouquets and boutonnieres made from the pages of Pride & Prejudice…



…while our cake topper was called “Love in the Library” and featured a title that readers of this website may be familiar with.

Yes, those books are made of cake.

@philipsainsbury captured a familiar title amongst the pile of books.

People don’t lie when they tell you how quickly your wedding day rushes by. It feels like it only happened yesterday but it was already over a week ago. And so far, this marriage thing is going swimmingly.

We’re planning to take a proper honeymoon later in the year, but in the meantime we settled for a week off, with a couple of nights spent in a hotel in South Yarra.

The summer heat lent itself well to seeing a few movies, which included The Hobbit: An Unexpected Journey, Argo, and the documentary Wonder Women! The Untold Story of American Superheroines, which proved to be a fascinating, emotional and inspiring look at the depiction of superheroines across pop culture, with a particular emphasis on Wonder Woman (of course). It’s been playing at ACMI here in Melbourne, but where ever you are I highly recommend checking it out.

And to add to my comic book geekery, I’ve also been reading Sean Howe’s Marvel Comics: The Untold Story, an engrossing and comprehensive history of the House of Ideas. If anyone out there knows a book that takes as detailed (and honest) a look at the story behind DC Comics, make sure to let me know!

So that’s it. 2012 is over. But there’s a lot to look forward to in 2013…including the release of Vanguard Prime: Wild Card in March! I can’t wait to get out and do some more events, as well as reveal more of the Knight of Wands’ history.

I’m also looking forward to finally getting a reliable Internet connection. But let’s not get too far ahead of ourselves…

Happy New Year, everyone!

Of (Un)Packing, Quantum Physics & Pooms

After months of preparation and packing, we finally moved into our new house last week. I had hoped to have an Internet connection set up by now, but we’ve built in a new area where we have to wait for the National Broadband Network to be rolled out. That won’t be happening until February, so that’ll unfortunately mean that I’ll be blogging less until then. That being the case, this post’s going to be a special extended edition…or some such.

As it turned out, the only day we had free to move was the same day that we had tickets to see Russell Brand performing at Rod Laver Arena. Now, Russell’s material is pretty adult (so I don’t expect any kids reading this to be familiar with it) and his persona is a divisive one (I thought he was a bit of an idiot until I actually watched his material) but something he discussed in his show touched on something that’s been of interest to me.

He talked about human sight being stuck between the ultraviolet and infrared spectrums, of our sense of reality being limited to what our five senses can perceive, and to imagine what it’d be like to have the antenna that would allow us insight into other, previously imperceptible dimensions of reality.

It’s the kind of thing I’ve read about in everything from the comics of Grant Morrison to the writings of Michio Kaku, and it’s the exact kind of thing I hope to include in Vanguard Prime one day. Will I get there? Hopefully. Will it be any good? No idea. But it’s an exciting idea nevertheless, and a strange one to encounter at a comedy show.

From one self-indulgent topic to another; I wrote a lot of poetry when I was a teenager. Correction – I wrote a lot of bad poetry when I was teenager. I did it without humour or irony. I did it to bare my soul. Until recently, I had forgotten what had prompted me to take up the quill and the inkpot to pontificate on my emotional suffering.

But in going through my book collection as part of the move, I stumbled across my copy of The Dead of the Night by John Marsden, part of his seminal Tomorrow series. Flipping through it, I was reminded of the character who had a predilection for poetry, with one of his poems serving as the book’s final lines. And that’s when I remembered…this is what inspired me. This is why I had started writing poetry.

To be fair, my poems were more like song lyrics. Super-earnest song lyrics about my sense of alienation and doomed romanticism. Basically, it was a coping mechanism, a therapeutic activity to deal with all the emotional feedback that comes with adolescence. My poetry-writing faded as I got older, finally killed by a university assignment where we had to write a poem and, in doing so, I was graded with the equivalent of a C minus. Ouch.

With that C minus came a self-consciousness, and I became aware of how ridiculous you can come across when you write a poem – a bad poem – and very humorlessly and pompously offer it as if you’re sharing some great insight to the world.

Case in point; Madonna.

I remember seeing this clip as part of a concert documentary she released a few years ago, and it characterised everything I found embarrassing about my own past with poetry, from the rhyming couplets to the ‘I’ve written a poom’ declaration that prefaces it. It made the whole practice feel ridiculous and ripe for mockery.

But then a few years later I saw Neil Gaiman giving an author talk, and he very unashamedly, very matter-of-factly recited some of his own poetry. From there, I’ve come to feel that poetry isn’t its own weird sub-category of writing, but another colour in a writer’s palette.

Poetry frees you from the rules of fiction and story, challenging your brain to move in directions it otherwise might not. As a result, I’ve once again started dabbling in poetry, looking to stretch my descriptive and tonal muscles, playing with words to make a song of them.

I’m a long way off from sharing any of it publicly, though. It’s strange how much more intimate poetry feels, and how much more vulnerable you feel as a writer when giving it to people to read. And that’s perhaps poetry’s greatest strength; it cuts away the artifice, leaving only pure meaning.

Wow…that got earnest. In any case, I recommend any young readers out there to give poetry a go. You may look back on it with embarrassment one day. But it’s worth it.

The Pitfalls of Repetition. Repetition. Repetition.

If you write for long enough, you’ll find that certain turns of phrase show up in your work with disturbing regularity. You might not notice it yourself. Not at first. It’ll sneak up on you like the Predator, all clicks and grrrs and shimmering photosensitive camouflage, with the neon green blood and the shoulder-mounted laser and…

I’m getting a little off-topic here.

In any case, it may take someone else pointing it out for you to become aware of it, or you’ll go over an old piece of work and find certain phrasings cropping up over and over again.

There was one book I read where the writer was constantly comparing things to bullets. It happened almost every other chapter (at least, I remember it happening every other chapter. It was probably more like four or five references across an entire book).

One or two bullet comparisons would have been fine but when it kept cropping up it became distracting, and you started to wonder how closely the editor had been paying attention (which is itself an unfair sentiment; the editor may well have pointed it out and the writer may have rejected any suggested changes).

When I wrote my first manuscript, I noticed certain words repeating themselves enough times that I cobbled together a phrase that used them all; “slowly spiralling towards an ocean of stars”. I used this phrase as a reminder that I shouldn’t lean on these words and pieces of imagery too much. And this breaking of bad habits continues to this day; my editor and I are currently going through Vanguard Prime: Wild Card, and it was pointed out to me that I had to watch my use of the word “however”.

But in addition to that, I also noticed my overuse of the word “cannon” – not just in this book, but across all the Vanguard Prime books I’ve written so far. And that’s where the real challenge lies. Avoiding repetition in a single book is relatively easy, if you pay close enough attention. Avoiding repetition across a series of books? Across an entire body of work? It’s a daunting prospect that can almost paralyse you. You become so anxious about avoiding not only established cliches but your own cliches, while also not straying into purple prose, that you risk your writing becoming little more than the records of a court stenographer.

These are the things that are on my mind as I put the edit for Wild Card to bed and start to focus again on writing Book 4. It’s the kind of neurotic writer nonsense that’s generally better off left to midnight fever dreams and stress binging…but what’s a blog for but to provide cheap therapy?

The Importance of Being Edited

Today’s my last day as Inside a Dog’s Resident Author. You can read my final post here. It’s been a lot of fun waffling on about storytelling and any topic that crosses my mind, and has convinced me that I need to write a few more posts here about the world of publishing.

There were a few times over the past month that posting a new entry proved to be a challenge, mostly because I’ve also been in the process of editing Vanguard Prime: Wild Card.

The process starts like this; Katrina, my editor, reads through the manuscript and makes notes as she goes, using Track Changes to suggest changes, ask questions, and point out any potential plot holes or inconsistencies.

When she’s finished, she emails me the marked-up Word document. I then go through, accepting or rejecting her suggestions, answering her questions and posing any of my own. By the time it’s done, the Track Changes document is a multi-coloured mass of deleted text, added text, and comment boxes.

The coloured boxes on the right are the notes between the editor and me.

I email the marked-up manuscript back to Katrina. She goes through, making the changes that I’ve approved and editing any new text that’s been added between drafts. This is incredibly helpful as my syntax can be unfocused and couched in far too many qualifiers. Katrina takes a machette to my puffed-up narration, cutting to the core of the idea I’m getting at. If there are any self-publishers reading this, I strongly recommend paying for a top-notch editorial service. It won’t be cheap, but publishing a book without an editor’s input is like walking outside with your fly undone and spinach in your teeth.

The manuscript is emailed back to me once again, looking far more tidy than it did the first time. I read through the whole thing a second time (well, I skim through it at this stage), making sure I’m happy with all the changes, and when I’m done I email it back to Katrina. At this point, the designer steps in to put together the page layout, adding fonts and dinkuses (dinkae? What’s the plural of dinkus?) and making sure everything fits and looks neat.

Katrina prints the pages off on A3 paper, with two book pages to every printed page, and posts it to me. We both read it through, as does a proofreader, and this is my last chance to make any changes. Generally these changes are about sentence structure, as things are too advanced at this stage to focus on structural issues (though if you spot a plothole that needs a line of dialogue added to address it, that’s still fine).

I use a highlighter and a red pen to mark down problem sentences and changes I want to make, marking every page where a change has been noted with a red X at the top right, so I know what pages to jump to when it comes time to email Katrina again.

As we’re now working off hardcopy, I type up an email where I outline each of the changes I’d like to make, a sample of which reads like this;

Page 4.
Original line: He’s been playing the cello ever since he was a kid
Change to: He’s been playing the cello all his life

Every step of the process has a two-week turnaround time, so the deadlines can get tight. I’m currently writing up the email with all the changes to make, which is due Monday (thankfully, I’m on target to get it in on time). After that, my publisher might also make suggestions about any possible changes to make, but otherwise this is the final text, which is put together by the designer and sent off to the printer to be published as a book.

So that’s what I’ve been doing at the same time as my Inside a Dog residency.

But in addition to that, my fiance and I are set to move house on Friday, which is always a much more involved process than you remember it being. Oh, and we’re getting married at the end of December, so we’ve had a few things to do on that front as well. And I also work full-time.

…….Just typing all that makes me feel exhausted!