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Ten Things to Remember if You Want to Be a Published Author

By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Publishing is a crazy business, with both joys and sorrows at all levels. If you want to survive, it's important to keep things in perspective.

With computers, the physical exercise of writing has never been easier. You open a file, start typing and wham! You’re writing. Literally anyone can write and publish a book these days.

This can shine an unrealistic light on the whole process, and make writing a compelling novel look easy. Anyone who’s ever struggled over a stalled plot line or a character who didn't work can tell you writing isn't easy at all--or at least, writing a good novel isn't.

It takes work, craft, skill, and imagination. Most of all, it takes dedication and perseverance, and a faith that you will make it one day.

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The Science of Pacing: 3 Tips on Pacing Your Novel

By Rosaria Munda, @rosariamunda

Part of the How They Do It Series

JH: The right pace can mean the difference between a book that soars and one that falls flat. Rosaria Munda visits the lecture hall today to share her tips on the science behind finding the perfect pace for your novel.

Rosaria Munda grew up in rural North Carolina, where she climbed trees, read Harry Potter fanfiction, and taught herself Latin. She studied political theory at Princeton and lives in Chicago with her husband and cat. Her debut novel, Fireborne (Putnam, 2019) has received four starred reviews.

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Take it away Rosaria…
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How to Hook Your Reader in Every Scene

By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Everyone knows how important the first line of a novel is, but in truth, every opening line in the book matters.

As the saying goes, “Well begun is half done.” This is particularly true in writing, where we often get a single line to hook our readers and convince them to give our novels a try.

But it’s also true for the rest of the novel—not just that critical opening sentence.

Tension Starts with a Scene’s Opening Line
Every time we break a scene or end a chapter, that’s a chance for us to lose our reader’s attention. If we end at a low-tension moment, the odds of them putting the book down go way up.

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Sunday Writing Tip: Remove Unnecessary Dialogue from Your Scenes

By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Each week, I’ll offer a tip you can take and apply to your manuscript to help improve it. They’ll be easy to do and shouldn’t take long, so they’ll be tips you can do without taking up your Sunday. Though I do reserve the right to offer a good tip now and then that will take longer—but only because it would apply to the entire manuscript.

This week, look at the dialogue in your scenes and remove what’s not needed.
There’s often a lot of empty dialogue in scenes, especially the beginnings of them. Characters greet each other and make small talk before they get to the meat of their conversations. Most of the time, that small talk weakens the scene and hurts the pacing.

It’s also common to find characters saying too much in a scene and giving away all the mystery and/or tension. They’re too open about their feelings, or too self-aware about how they feel. They might also answer questions just because the plot needs them to, when being true to themselves and staying quiet makes for a stronger story.

As they say, less is more, and that’s particularly true with dialogue.

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Real Life Diagnostics: Finding the Right Problem for Your Opening Scene

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to Real Life Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: None

Please Note: As of today, RLD slots are open.

This week’s question:

Is this opening working?

Market/Genre: Romance

On to the diagnosis…

Original Text:

After ten hours on my feet, I would have loved to slip off my flip-flops, but I wasn’t willing to step on a spilled drink, or worse, a dropped hot dog smothered in mustard. Hosting an annual barbeque party outside our surf shop was a longheld family tradition and the November social event in our small California beach town. This close-knit crowd stayed the entire day, hanging out in the water, playing on the sand, and shopping in the store. Closing time hadn't come too soon.

Layne locked the door behind the last customer and we both released a loud yippee. She breezed behind the counter and joined me at the register. “That was our final sale of the month and the year. How’d we do, Sis?”

“Let’s hope running out of hot dogs equals big numbers.” I pressed the register buttons for the final tally of the day and hoped my sigh of relief was convincing. “Whoopee. We’ll be able to pay the overhead for several months and restock the inventory.” But not my salary.

She pulled off her SurfLover cap and fluffed up her hair. Even though we were both sun-kissed blondes, her waves were so much prettier than my straight, limp locks.

Opening the drawer under the register, she scooped out a bundle of envelopes. “Time to go through this stack."

"I'll never understand why you wait until the end of every month."

"What's the hurry?" She started leafing through the pile, tossing half the letters in the trash. “We bring in the cash, but the bills keep coming.”

“That’s how it works.”

“I think we deserve to go out for a beer and save the cleaning for morning. Better yet, let's slip into our wetsuits and hit the water There's no wind. Six-foot swell. It'll be glassy and perfect.”

My heart lifted just thinking about surfing. The rolling waves and rhythm of the sea still had a hold on me, but I just couldn't bring myself to risk the ocean's brutality again. “You’re never going to give up trying to get me back out there, are you?”

“You used to love it, Nik. I know you miss it.”

“Everyday. But you know I'd freak if I got sucked into another double-up.” A shudder overtook me as I remembered the two waves meeting and spinning me inside the ultra-hollow, fighting the powerful energy. I'd clung to a piece of foam, unable to breathe and fought for my life. “I won’t make it out of a beast like that next time.”

My Thoughts in Blue:

After ten hours on my feet, I would have loved to slip off my flip-flops, but I wasn’t willing to step on a spilled drink, or worse, a dropped hot dog smothered in mustard. Hosting an annual barbeque party outside our surf shop was a [longheld family tradition] I’m unsure whose family this is. I thought hers at first, but I don’t think that’s true and the November social event in our small California beach town. This close-knit crowd stayed the entire day, hanging out in the water, playing on the sand, and shopping in the store. [Closing time hadn't come too soon.] I’m a little confused about this opening. The focus is on the barbeque, yet the narrator is actually in the surf shop, correct? Why aren’t they at this social event of the season?

Layne locked the door behind the last customer and we both released a loud yippee. She breezed behind the counter and joined me at the register. [“That was our final sale of the month and the year.] feels a bit infodumpy and not like natural dialogue How’d we do, Sis?”

“Let’s hope [running out of hot dogs] who ran out? Them? equals big numbers.” I pressed the register buttons for the final tally of the day and [hoped my sigh of relief was convincing.] Perhaps a little more that they’re worried about finances? “Whoopee. We’ll be able to pay the overhead for several months and restock the inventory.” But not my salary.

[She] Feels like you need the name here since you haven’t referred to her for a full paragraph pulled off her SurfLover cap and fluffed up her hair. Even though we were both sun-kissed blondes, her waves were so much prettier than my straight, limp locks.

Opening the drawer under the register, she scooped out a bundle of envelopes. “Time to go through [this stack."] Of what?

"I'll never understand why you wait until the end of every month." I wanted some internalization from her here to understand how she feels about this, and not getting paid, and the state of her and the shop

"What's the hurry?" She started leafing through the pile, tossing half the [letters in the trash.] So she doesn’t look at any of the mail for a month, or she’s tossing out bills? “We bring in the cash, but the bills keep coming.”

“That’s how it works.”

“I think we deserve to go out for a beer and save the cleaning for morning. Better yet, let's slip into our wetsuits and hit the water There's no wind. Six-foot swell. It'll be glassy and perfect.” Since they were on their feet for ten hours, I assume it’s late, so wouldn’t it be dark? Also, if Layne is so clear on what the waves are doing, it seems like that would be her focus and not the beer

My [heart lifted] she says this, yet she’s too scared to going into the water, so I don’t think this would be her first reaction. More likely a stab of fear just thinking about surfing. The rolling waves and rhythm of the sea still had a hold on me, but I just couldn't bring myself to risk the ocean's brutality again. [“You’re never going to give up trying to get me back out there, are you?”] Feels a bit too on the nose about her internal issues

“You used to love it, Nik. I know you miss it.”

“Everyday. [But you know I'd freak if I got sucked into another double-up.”] This also feels too “summed up” about her issue A shudder overtook me as I remembered the two waves meeting and spinning me inside the ultra-hollow, fighting the powerful energy. I'd clung to a piece of foam, unable to breathe and fought for my life. “I won’t make it out of a beast like that next time.” If this is how she feels, her reaction to a suggestion to go surfer would have been much stronger and more like this

The Question:

1. Is this opening working?

Not yet (readers chime in). There’s not quite enough to show me what the problem is or why I should care about these sisters and their surf shop. There are issues, but the lack of narrative focus makes it hard for me to know what I’m supposed to pay attention to and care about.

The story is a romance, but there’s nothing that suggest romance is on the horizon, or that Nik wants it. That’s not necessarily bad, as there’s time to get to that, but so many other potential problems are slipped in that it seems like this story is about other things.

(Here's more on And Pretty Words All in a Row: Tightening Your Narrative Focus)

At first, it starts with the barbeque and Nik being tired, and quick notes about a longheld family tradition, so I assume the narrator is part of the family and it’s their party. But by the end, she’s in the store and I don’t know how the store relates to the barbeque or whose family is having the party. I don’t think the party relates to the shop or the sisters, aside from it being a source of revenue. So I wonder why this is the first thing I see as a reader. Why do I need to know about this barbeque and Nik’s tired feet before anything else?

The focus then shifts to the sales, and I can see they didn’t make enough this month to pay everything, especially Nik’s salary. So I think maybe this is about a store with money troubles trying to survive, and that’s how the love interest will appear. But that’s not really embraced or discussed, and Layne doesn’t seem concerned at all and just wants to have fun.

Which could indicate one reason why the store has issues, but since Nik never thinks anything along those lines, it doesn’t feel like the problem of the scene or the story, even though it’s mentioned.

Then it’s shifts again to surfing and Nik’s backstory about nearly drowning, which makes me wonder if this is about her overcoming her fear to get back into the water, and the love interest will come from there. This seems like the best spot for it, as surfing again is clearly an internal issue and something to build a character arc around. Meeting a guy who gets Nik back into the water and in love is a solid romance + character arc.

But if so, how does that connect to the store or their financial troubles? Or the barbeque? 
Although there are several story questions here with potential, none of them stand out as the conflict of the scene and the problem driving the story so far. It feels like setup, not story, and I don’t think I’ve gotten to the real meat of the tale yet. I suspect it’s the surfing and the surfer boy who will steal her heart, but that’s just a guess.
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I’m also not connecting with Nik as a narrator, because I don’t “feel” her in the story. She’s there, but I’m not really in her head or hearing her thoughts, and I don’t know how she feels about things. She also has conflicting emotional reactions to her accident. Id imagine if you almost died surfing and were too scared to go back into the water, your heart probably wouldn’t lift thinking about it.
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I get some emotion from her about nearly drowning, but it doesn’t truly feel relevant to the scene, even though Layne wants her to go surfing. It’s more like a way to slip in backstory than something driving the story forward. Nik shudders, but that’s all, even though her words describe something far more horrific and obviously life-changing if she’s stopped doing something she loves. 
(Here's more on What “Setup” in a Novel Actually Means)

I suspect this is starting in the wrong place, and the barbeque, store, and general beach setting are merely setup before the main story starts. I’d suggest looking farther into the story and finding a scene or moment where the conflict starts.

Or, you might rethink this general opening and finding the conflict here to play with. Maybe Nik is cleaning up while her sister goes surfing, and not only does she feel annoyed that she does all the work she her sister plays (if that fits of course), but she’s conflicted over wanting to hit the waves and her fear of doing so.
(Here's more on The Line Forms Where? Knowing Where to Start Your Novel)

Since this is a romance, I’ll also leave you with this question: What problem or situation is going to force the two love interests to work together or interact? Odds are whatever this is, is right about where your opening is. Whatever gets Nik and the love interest to have to interact is probably the issue that will launch the story. If it’s not that, it’s likely right before that.
(Here's more on Why Conflict Is so Hard to Create in Romance)

Overall, I think this is still searching for the right opening scene, though it looks like there are several issues in the story itself to provide conflict around the romance. I don’t think it’ll be too hard to find the right problem to start this story with.

Thanks to our brave volunteer for submitting this for me to play with. I hope they–and others–find it helpful. I don’t do a full critique on these, (just as it pertains to the questions) and I encourage you to comment and make suggestions of your own. Just remember that these pieces are works in progress (many by new writers), not polished drafts, so be nice and offer constructive feedback.
About the Critiquer

Janice Hardy is the award-winning author of the teen fantasy trilogy The Healing Wars, including The Shifter, Blue Fire, and Darkfall from Balzer+Bray/Harper Collins. The Shifter, was chosen for the 2014 list of "Ten Books All Young Georgians Should Read" from the Georgia Center for the Book. It was also shortlisted for the Waterstones Children's Book Prize (2011), and The Truman Award (2011). She also writes the Grace Harper urban fantasy series for adults under the name, J.T. Hardy.

She's the founder of Fiction University and has written multiple books on writing, including Understanding Show, Don't Tell (And Really Getting It), Plotting Your Novel: Ideas and Structure, and the Revising Your Novel: First Draft to Finished Draft series. Website | Facebook | Twitter | Pinterest | Goodreads | Amazon | Barnes & Noble | iTunes | Indie BoundWritten by Janice Hardy. Fiction-University.com

The Best Advice on Plotting I've Ever Heard: Two Tips That Make Plotting Your Novel Way Easier

By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

A good story is more than a series of things that happen. It's all about the cause and effect.

Way back in 2012, I read a few pieces of plotting advice that are just as good today as they were then. They're nothing new, nothing ground-breaking, and things countless writers have said before (including me), but the way they're said is sheer genius. They're probably the most applicable and easiest plotting tips I've ever heard.

The advice refers to full scenes, but I quickly realized it was just as effective on diagnosing the action in an individual scene as well as the big picture of the novel's plot. It's an incredibly useful tool for pinpointing problems in a scene you know has issues, but can't figure out what they are.

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Writers: How to Ditch Distraction and Focus

By Rochelle Melander, @WriteNowCoach

Part of The Writer’s Life Series

JH: “Get more done” is a goal for pretty much every writer I know. There’s so much on our plates that sometimes it feels as though we’ll never see the finish line of anything. Rochelle Melander is back in the lecture hall today to share tips on avoiding distractions and keeping focused.

Rochelle Melander is a certified professional coach, experienced book strategist, and the author of eleven books, including, Level Up: Quests to Master Mindset, Overcome Procrastination and Increase Productivity . She provides solutions for people who feel stuck, overwhelmed or confused by the writing and publishing process. She is the founder of Dream Keepers, a writing workshop that supports children and teens in finding their voice and sharing their stories.

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Take it away Rochelle…
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Five Ways to Create Likable Characters

By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

We've been looking at plot a lot this month for NaNo, so let's shift over and focus on creating likable characters.

Unless you're creating a character you want your readers to hate, odds are you want readers to like the people in your novel. You  probably want characters who inspire, who readers love or want to be, who can sweep the story up and whisk readers away in wonder.

And sometimes, this need to make them awesome can also make them too perfect to be real, because you want them to be the perfect people you see in your imagination. We've all read (and likely written, if we're honest) those Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters who do everything right and have no flaws at all. It's hard to like a character like that. They're just not someone readers can relate to.

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Scaredy-Pants! 4 Breeches-er- BREACHES That Elicit Fear in Your Characters

By Bonnie Randall

Part of the How They Do It Series

JH: Fear is a powerful tool for writers and helps us create stronger stories. Bonnie Randall takes her month place at the podium today to share tips on how to scare the pants off our characters. And if you're in the mood for some good old fashion scares for Halloween...checkout her short story No Vacancy . It's creepy and scary in all the right ways.

Take it away Bonnie...
When something happens that shouldn’t happen OR when something that should happen doesn’t, the results range from feeling mildly jarred to all-out terrified. Breaches to different cognitive constructs are the underpinnings of fear.

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NaNoWriMo Prep: Planning Your Novel’s Ending

By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

We now come to the final installment of the annual NaNo prep articles. Hope everyone going for the 50,000 words in November are just about ready to go!
Getting to “The End” of a novel is pretty satisfying, both as a reader and a writer, but there’s a lot more pressure to get there for the writer. There are many things that need to happen--plots and subplots to wrap up, and those pesky character arcs to fulfill. And then there’s the whole “satisfying resolution” to worry about.

The ending is the last 25% of the novel, so for the NaNo folks, to meet your 50,000-word goal, that's another 12,500 words. At least one of those final chapters is going to be your wrap up, though that can be a much smaller chapter. There’s a good chance that you won’t know all the specifics about your ending in the planning stage, so don’t worry. Ideas and situations will develop over the course of the novel that will help you flesh the ending out. Even if you do know exactly how the ending will unfold, you might find deeper meanings or ways to make it resonate more once that first draft is written.
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