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Zoë Richards on the Creative Differences Podcast

Zoë is the author of Garden of Her Heart, and host of the podcast, Write Damn It! An experienced coach with more than 35 years working on mindset, Zoë shares a ton of practical advice for writers including how to deal with self-doubt and rejection.

WE DISCUSS…

How stand up comedy helped Zoë’s writing

How to rethink your attitude to resilience

Great tips for writing a synopsis

Writers’ flow and getting started each day

Building characters using their childhood trauma

How to get people to show up at book events, and much more…

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How to Write Great Antagonists

Some top tips on how to write great baddies!

A couple of months ago I started a little forum for Writers called The Green Room. We meet twice a month over Zoom: writers send me questions in advance on the craft and business of being a writer and it’s all relaxed and fun and chatty and there’s a great mix of writers: some just starting out, others are published and experienced and it’s all recorded exclusively for folks who support me over on Ko-Fi.
Here’s a little taster from last week’s session with a great question on how to write believable and unpleasant antagonists…

I hope you found that that little taster helpful. The sessions are supposed to run for half an hour: they’ve all gone on for a good hour so far. I love chatting about this stuff with writers like you. If you’d like to try it out, pop over to my page on Ko-Fi and become a Green Room supporter. Untill then, happy writing!

JOIN THE GREEN ROOM NOWHere’s a sort of transcript of the video above…

How do you write a believable and unpleasant antagonist? I have tried looking at antagonists I like from other books, but I can’t put my finger on why some get under my skin and some don’t. Where do you begin?

Fantastic question! And I’m going to take my time with this one, because this is so important…

An antagonist is a person who actively opposes or is hostile to someone or something. This means your antagonist isn’t just a black hat villain who is evil for the sake of it. They have historical or psychological motivations for what they’re doing. And that’s a great place to start when creating a great antagonist.

Look at Ray Bradbury’s classic Fahrenheit 451, set in a world where books are banned and burned – the antagonist is Captain Beatty: he hates books for their contradictory facts and opinions and that they encourage dissent and unrest. But he’s also well-read, which makes him a hypocrite, but he has made a choice to destroy outlawed books that might encourage people to think. As far as Captain Beatty is concerned he’s providing a public service, and Montag — our hero who saves books — is a renegade who must be stopped.

Antagonists are often in a position of power: Captain Beatty, Uriah Heep in David Copperfield becomes secretary and business partner to Mr Wickfield, allowing him to deceive Mr Wickfield. Mob bosses, corrupt officials, powerful businessmen and women all make for great antagonists because of their position and the power they hold over others.

Antagonists are a dark shadow of the hero. Moriarty is a match for Sherlock Holmes’s wit and deduction, but he has chosen a life of crime. He is what Sherlock could become if he made the wrong choices. Same goes for Luke/Vader, Harry/Voldemort, Batman and the Joker etc.

Create the right Antagonist for your Protagonist

The antagonist’s role in the story is to force your protagonist to change. They will torment your hero so much that they have to rise up and overcome them or be defeated. If we think of our story as: thesis, antithesis and synthesis – the antagonist is the antithesis: they represent the opposite of what your hero believes to be true. That’s not to say that the antagonist is always wrong. A good baddie will have their own agenda that might even seem reasonable to others: 

Shere Khan in the Jungle Book: turns out he was spot on about men hunting tigers to extinction!

Nurse Ratched in One Flew Over the Cuckoo’s Nest: a care provider who maybe lets power go to her head.

Javert in Les Miserables has a slavish devotion to the law and righteousness which drives him to pursue Jean Valjean tirelessly.

Each of these represent the antithesis to our hero: Mowgli wants the freedom of the jungle, but with none of the responsibility. He will learn through his encounters with Shere Khan that freedom is hard won.

McMurphy challenges institutional power in the form of Nurse Ratched, but discovers that institutions can be more powerful than the individual.

Jean Valjean epitomises how a man who has done something that society sees as wrong can be a good man, but Javert refuses to show any leniency.

With all of these, the stories would have been much shorter and less satisfying if the villains had been just a little bit reasonable… Imagine if Shere Khan had accompanied Mowgli to the human village instead of trying to kill him, what if Nurse Ratched had acknowledged her own tyranny and relaxed some of her rules, what od Javert said, ‘Y’know what, it’s a loaf of bread and those kids were starving. I’m going to look the other way this time…’

But each of these villains refused to bend and why? Because they have power.

Think about their POWER

If a villain is too easily overcome, then it will be unsatisfying for the reader. If they’re overpowered (and this happens a lot in SF&F) then you might find yourself reaching for some deus ex machina solution at the end.

NOT ALL VILLAINS ARE CREATED EQUALLY… and do you even need one?

So far we’ve discussed the traditional kind of antagonist: the dark shadow of your hero that must be overcome, but not every baddie needs to be Darth Vader. Here are some other examples…

A Force of Nature

Yes, it doesn’t even need to be a person. Your hero could be trapped in a storm, or tormented by a shark, Robinson Crusoe was surrounded by an unforgiving sea. The world around your hero could represent the antithesis of who they are.

A Rival/Opponent

Rather than an out and out evil bad guy, your antagonist could be more of an irritant. The kind of antagonist we’ll meet in real life: the annoying boss or co-worker, the strict parent 

They’re simply someone whose goals are in direct conflict with the protagonist’s.

A Many-Headed Hydra

The antagonist doesn’t need to be just one person. In Mean Girls you have the alpha females

Most villains have henchmen who in some way embody an aspect of their ethos and as the hero overcomes them they will learn something essential about the villain that will help them overcome them.

The Protagonist Themselves

Ever been told you’re your own worst enemy? A character’s own failings and doubts can stop them from reaching their goal. Holden Caufield in The Catcher in the Rye, the narrator in Fight Club, Willy Loman in Death of a Salesman is delusional, insecure and volatile  

Describing villains…

Uriah Heep, for example, in David Copperfield:

When we first meet him, he is described as a “cadaverous” man, “who had hardly any eyebrows, and no eyelashes, and eyes of a red-brown, so unsheltered and unshaded, that I remember wondering how he went to sleep. He was high-shouldered and bony; dressed in decent black, with a white wisp of a neckcloth; buttoned up to the throat; and had a long, lank, skeleton hand.”

‘As I came back, I saw Uriah Heep shutting up the office; and feeling friendly towards everybody, went in and spoke to him, and at parting, gave him my hand. But oh, what a clammy hand his was! As ghostly to the touch as to the sight! I rubbed mine afterwards, to warm it, and to rub his off.’

David Copperfield, by Charles Dickens

Annie Wilkes in Misery (she gets a long description, essentially one of only two characters in the book). Here’s an excerpt from p8 of my paperback edition…

Most of all she gave him a disturbing sense of solidity, as if she might not have any blood vessels or even internal organs; as if she might be only solid Annie Wilkes from side to side and top to bottom. He felt more and more convinced that her eyes, which appeared to move, were actually just painted on, and they moved no more than the eyes of portraits which appear to follow you to wherever you move in the room where they hang. It seemed to him that if he made the first two fingers of his hand into a V and attempted to poke them up her nostrils, they might go less than an eighth of an inch before encountering a solid (if slightly yielding) obstruction.

Misery by Stephen King

A lot of this initial description de-humanises Annie. It’s broad and derogatory, and as the novel goes on Paul Sheldon and the reader discover more and more about Annie and her motivations. I won’t give too much away, but it’s a masterclass in writing a psychopath.

And here’s how Holmes describes Moriarty in The Final Problem:

“His career has been an extraordinary one. He is a man of good birth and excellent education, endowed by nature with a phenomenal mathematical faculty. At the age of twenty-one he wrote a treatise upon the Binomial Theorem, which has had a European vogue. On the strength of it he won the Mathematical Chair at one of our smaller universities, and had, to all appearance, a most brilliant career before him. But the man had hereditary tendencies of the most diabolical kind. A criminal strain ran in his blood, which, instead of being modified, was increased and rendered infinitely more dangerous by his extraordinary mental powers. Dark rumours gathered round him in the university town, and eventually he was compelled to resign his chair and to come down to London, where he set up as an army coach. So much is known to the world, but what I am telling you now is what I have myself discovered.”

The Final Problem by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle

No mention of his physicality at all.

Here’s how Watson describes him in the same book:

He was extremely tall and thin, his forehead domed out in a white curve, and his two eyes were deeply sunken in his head. He was clean-shaven, pale, and ascetic-looking, retaining something of the professor in his features. His shoulders were rounded from much study, and his face protrudes forward, and was for ever slowly oscillating from side to side in a curiously reptilian fashion.

The Final Problem by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle

Hannibal Lecter, ch7 of Red Dragon: he’s mentioned 29 times before we meet him, and he never leaves his cell, doesn’t kill anyone for the duration of the narrative, and yet he is Will Graham’s antagonist.

Dr Hannibal Lecter lay on his cot asleep, his head propped on a pillow against the wall. Alexandre Dumas’ Le Grand Dictionnaire de Cuisine was open on his chest.

Graham had stared through the bars for about five seconds when Lecter opened his eyes and said, ‘That’s the same atrocious aftershave you wore in court.’

‘I keep getting it for Christmas.’

Dr Lecter’s eyes are maroon and they reflect the light redly in tiny points. Graham felt each hair bristle on his nape. He put his hand on the back of his neck.

‘Christmas, yes,’ Lecter said. ‘Did you get my card?’

‘I got it. Thank you.’

Dr Lecter’s Christmas card had been forwarded to Graham from the FBI crime laboratory in Washington. He took it into the backyard, burned it, and washed his hands before touching Molly.

Lecter rose and walked over to his table. He is a small, lithe man. Very neat. 

Red Dragon by Thomas Harris

There’s more in the subsequent chapter, a drip-drip of little details that send a chill down your spine. It’s brilliant and Harris basically repeats it for The Silence of the Lambs…

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Nautilus is #1 on Amazon Prime in the UK

A few years ago I came up with NAUTILUS, an idea for a TV show about a young Captain Nemo. I put together a pitch deck, series outline and treatment and sold it in my first meeting. I didn’t get to write on it (boo!) It was developed by Disney (yay!), made by Disney (yay!), dropped by Disney (boo!), but the producers rallied and sold it again all over the world. In the UK it’s been number one on Amazon Prime all week (hurrah!).

I only mention this as I have books and scripts out on submission at the moment and it seems that every now and then I come up with a good idea and there’s more where that came from! Anyway, check out NAUTILUS: it’s great fun!

Join me LIVE on the Creative Differences podcast tonight!

Join me live at 8pm GMT TONIGHT when I chat to Zoë Richards, author of Garden of Her Heart, and host of the Write, Damn It! Podcast.

We’ll be discussing resilience, writing synopses, and getting people to come to book events and much more!

I’m on the Worm Hole podcast

I was delighted to be a guest on The Worm Hole podcast! This is in-depth stuff that I’ve not discussed before. Do check out the brilliant website for more details and a transcript (I love it when podcasters make all this effort!). Click on the image below for more…

The Corn Bride Cover Reveal

I’m delighted to be able to reveal Harry Goldhawk’s magnificent cover art for the fifth Witches of Woodville novel The Corn Bride…

This is darker and, frankly, more terrifying than any of the previous covers. A reflection of the contents? Well, the only way you’re going to find out is by pre-ordering the book. The Corn Bride is published in the UK on 13th March, 2025.

PRE-ORDER THE CORN BRIDE

And if you want a signed and dedicated paperback, you can pre-order that here…

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American Kindle readers: there will be a Kindle edition going up for pre-order asap!

What do you think of the cover? Leave your comments below…

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Join me LIVE with Zoë Richards, author of Garden of Her Heart

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Garden of Her Heart has been …

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In Conversation with Ben Aaronovitch and other Dates for your Diary…

MCM COMIC CON, LONDON, 25-27TH OCTOBER

I’ll be at the MCM Comic Con in London for all three days, selling and signing my books and 

Aside from me, there’s a ton of amazing authors to see over the weekend!

GET YOUR MCM TICKETS HERE IN CONVERSATION WITH FMA DIXON01 Nov 2024, 18:30 – 20:00The Pier Ceylon, 163 Station Rd, Herne Bay CT6 5NE, UK

I’ll be chatting with Herne Bay author FMA Dixon about his sequel to The House on Everywhere Street (which I loved!).

GET YOUR TICKETS HERE IN CONVERSATION WITH BEN AARONOVITCHTUESDAY 26TH NOVEMBER, 6.30-8PMOXTED LIBRARY

I’ll be chatting to the legend that is Ben Aaronovitch about his latest Rivers of London novel, and there will be books for sale and to be signed!

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A Short Film for Spooky Season

Here’s the short film that my son George made for his final year dissertation (he got a first for this!). My daughter Emily and her fella Kai worked on the film, and my old school friend Dom did the music. I know I’m biased, but it’s bloody good (and better than the short films I made at his age) and a great film for this spooky time of year.

Here’s the logline: Dejection follows the human embodiment of death as he comes to the realisation and acceptance of his role, taking those to the afterlife.