Birthmarked by Caragh M. O’Brien was an extremely disappointing and disorganized novel. The book introduces the protagonist, Gaia Stone, and incorporates a gripping idea of a dystopia in which the wealthy have all come down with a disease called hemophilia, which prevents them from giving birth to healthy babies. Gaia is a midwife and helps deliver the healthy babies to the “Enclave”, which is the higher society. But after Gaia’s parents are arrested, Gaia goes on an extremely unthrilling, unclimactic and predictable journey.
Gaia is one of the only characters that are prominent in the book, and O’Brien failed to develop her character. Therefore readers were unable to analyze and understand her. Gaia is a very weak protagonist, and is also very rash. Her actions are never fully explained, nor do they play a big part in the direction or flow of the book. And as O’Brien never fully includes secondary characters, Gaia fails to play the heroine and is too weak to carry the entire book.
The book is especially disorganized and unfocused as the text tries to hard to relate back to the overall theme, which is a dystopian world. The storyline bounces between background stories, and Gaia’s full mission is never really carried out or explained. O’Brien also fails to use her literary devices to her advantage when she starts to explain why she used the particular device like:
“…Gaia had the impression the Bastion had two distinct functions: the beautiful, gracious home that Genevieve and the children inhabited, and the no-nonsense part that she was entering as a bound prisoner. In a way, it's only a more extreme version of the society I already live in, Gaia thought, another division, like the one that separates those who live inside and outside the wall. She had just seen where the worlds collided.” –Pg. 237
O’Brien’s writing is also hard to follow as her language is repetitive and she uses random and excessive amounts of literary devices in order to “color her writing”. It also feels as though O’Brien uses to many words that are just not suitable for the context of the writing, and her random vocabulary makes it seems like she is trying to make her writing more complex, but to no avail:
“The air had a putrid stink of garbage and urine, much like the cattle in the fields, but as she hurried behind the man, she could see a warm, yellow light ahead of her, that reminded her of the fires her father used for his dyes. He pulled her through another wide door and closed it tightly, sliding a thick wooden bolt across it. Gaia had never beet so happy and euphoric in her life. Before her, warm and exponentially massive, stood the broad hearth of the much-used, black-ovened bakery.” –Pg. 207
Therefore in the end, my poor rating and review of this book is due to O’Brien’s use of messy language and literary devices, her disorganized and unfocused writing, her poor pacing of her story lines, and her failure of introducing more supportive characters and making her weak protagonist carry the whole book. If O’Brien had revised her book more, I believe that the book would have played out much better. In the end, this idea was excellent, but the development was disappointing.