WARNING, if you are a fan of this book, you aren't going to like what I have to say.
Let's start with the beginning shall we?
This book is about people who live underground (The Hunger Games) who are controlled by a murderous tyrannical freak (The Hunger Games) who have survived the end of the world and the Great Famine (The Hunger Games) and have to worry about cannibalistic human beings who roam outside their little colony...One of the few things original about this book, I assure you.
Georgie got on my nerves. She came off as a self righteous brat who threw temper tantrums whenever someone didn't tell her what she wanted to hear. If I talked to my parents the way that she talked to hers...I would have been back handed. Not only is Georgie completely self absorbed, but she has a stupid crush on a teenage murderous man slut. That's right girls...go find yourself a serial killer man slut and see how far you get, cause if you aren't tough like Georgie (who isn't tough at all) then you probably won't live to see the next day. This girl has been at deaths door two or three times in this book and every single time she just GAVE UP!!!! Not something that teenage girls want to read about. They want a strong heroine, someone who fights for what the want and need. Not someone who takes what they have for granted (like Georgie). It also doesn't help when the author, who I'm guessing realized that she has a weak female lead, has to put a dialogue into the story between two men saying just how "tough and cunning" Georgie really is. If you have to insert that into your book you really should go back and figure out what you did wrong. Not only did Georgie
NOT
come off as TOUGH or CUNNING, but I felt that the character lacked extreme depth. She was shallow, and a big fat whiner. JUST BECAUSE YOU MAKE THE GIRL OUT TO BE A BITCH DOESN'T MEAN SHE'S EFFING TOUGH, SMART, OR PARTICULARLY FUNNY.
And Collin, the murderous man slut...first of all, being a man slut should have sent red flags to Georgie, who is not a slut at all. Any girl with a half a brain knows that most eye candy can not be trusted. Duh...But apparently Georgie doesn't have half a brain, because she gets cornered by Collin, not once, but twice. And what does Collin do? He man-handles her, and what does Georgie do? She does nothing, she lets this boy put his hands all over her, because she's got a stupid crush. This is NOT ok young ladies. Even if you have a crush on a boy, if he is forcing you into a situation you do not want to be in, you better haul off and smack the shit outta that kid! Not only does Collin put his hands on Georgie, but he also leaves her to die at the hands of cannibals, and then comes skulking back later with an apology. Yea fucking right.
Onward people onward! Let's talk about the writing style of the book. What did the author do? Did she text the entire book to herself, email it to her home computer, print out the pages and then fax them to a blind publisher? WHO IN THE HELL EDITED THIS BOOK!
SUGGESTION: If your editor is less than adequate, go back through your freaking book and reread it. The grammatical errors in this book were absolutely ABYSMAL! AND THIS, IS NOT, HOW, YOU USE, COMMAS!
THE DIALOGUE: As I mentioned before, we had to have it EXPLAINED to us that Georgie is smart and cunning. I guess because we didn't see much of it in the book, we had to be told. The dialogue was force and seriously cheesey, and Georgie kept talking out loud to herself. Honestly, I thought the girl was mental, not cunning... you don't need to have a character talk to herself just for the sake of someone speaking.
There was no detail in this book. I couldn't picture anything that the author wrote about. So I went through this entire book feeling confused. Let me ask you something. If the end of the world came, and EVERYTHING (it is made clear in the book that EVERYTHING was wiped out) how in the hell do they have electricity? Generators. And what do generators need to run? Gasoline....whoops, guess we didn't think that one through now did we. Not only that, but these people are feeding off food that is pretty hard to believe. Vegetables that are grown by artificial lighting, chickens...you see where I'm going. Where do they get the water to hydrate those vegetables and chickens? And for that matter themselves? Your guess is as good as mine.
This book could have been a great book. The concept was there, the execution was terrible. My advice, go back through and fix the things you screwed up on, put a little bit more depth into this book, and then get it republished.
That is all.