The Queens of England series is Jean Plaidy's retelling of novels she's already written. The difference being the earlier novels are in the third person; TQOE books are in first person.
“In the Shadow of the Crown” is about Mary I. Or at least it’s supposed to be. Like the other books in the series, this one features many events that the narrator has no direct involvement in, so the story has many dry second-hand reports. This, to me, makes the point of rewriting a third-person narrative as a first-person one pointless.
The story opens with Mary’s birth, which she naturally has no memory of, so we get what she’s learned of the famous Cloth of Gold incident between her father Henry VIII and Francois I of France. This has no place in a first-person novel about Mary I. It bears no relevance on her personal history. You could argue it’s written by an author unfamiliar with the writing term, ‘murder your darlings.’
Dry accounts of historic events that don’t feature Mary pop up often in this driest, and possibly worst, book I’ve read by Jean Plaidy.
When Mary is involved in a scene, we often get blatant telling and reported speech:
‘I received a call from Chancellor Rich, who informed me that the Act of Uniformity must be obeyed by all, and there could be no exceptions. I told him that I would worship in my own way, and I knew from his response that he would be afraid to take drastic action against me.’
While we get lengthy and dry second-hand accounts about Henry VIII’s wives, scenes that feature Mary are rushed over. Her meeting with Philip of Bavaira, with whom marriage was on the cards, is not dramatized at all. This is the sort of thing that should’ve been developed to bring Mary’s personal experiences to life but this is one of several that’s treated like a footnote.
A lack of revision is evident with sentences like, ‘“Who is it who will be our new stepmother?” asked Elizabeth impatiently,’ and, ‘He told me how great was his pleasure in beholding me, and I replied that I was glad I pleased him.’ This is first draft material.
After much reporting on Anne of Cleeves, Mary states, ‘I did hear that, when he left her, he gave vent to his anger. There were plenty who heard it and were ready to report it.’
Sadly, the author was ‘ready to report’ far too much.
Following lengthy reports of Buckingham, including his resentment of Wolsey, Mary states, ‘I should not have known anything of this at the time, as I was only five years old,’ which again highlights the lack of significance regarding Mary’s personal story.
More lengthy reporting follows on events Mary hasn’t witnessed:
‘I imagined the pageants, the speeches of welcome, the plays performed for the Emperor's enjoyment. I wished that I could see them: the wonderful tableaux which sprang to life as the Emperor approached, representing the two rulers embracing. There was one, I heard, representing England.’
Reporting on Katherine Parr, Mary states, ‘I only know what I heard later of that interview,’
and: ‘There were several to witness this scene, so I had an accurate report of what happened.’
Some paragraphs, like the one below, read like a textbook:
‘On the 22nd of June Bishop Fisher went out to Tower Hill and was beheaded. On the 6th of July Sir Thomas followed him. A silent sullen crowd looked on. This was the King's answer. No matter who disobeyed him, they should die. The execution of Sir Thomas More sent a shiver through the country and waves of indignation abroad.’
Flowery language makes the lack of drama even more tedious: ‘I would be thirteen years old in the February of the following year.’ I would’ve preferred the more concise, ‘I’d be thirteen next February.’
I skipped over many paragraphs in this novel the moment I realised another over-long description of one Henry’s wives was underway, in which Mary has no direct involvement.
From the other books I’ve read by this author set during this period, it’s clear that Ms Plaidy was fascinated by Anne Boleyn. Nothing wrong with that, of course, but she can’t last long without mentioning Anne, either by name or suggestion, and it’s irritating. She does so in this and every other book set during Henry VIII’s reign. As mentioned, this author wouldn’t ‘murder her darlings’ for the good of the story.
Anyone who’s unfamiliar with this period in history might find the facts and info included of interest. If, like me, you want to read a gripping story, filled with tension and drama, that brings the main character to life, then you’ll be disappointed.
Something about Jean Plaidy’s books keep me coming back for more. Perhaps it’s her obvious love for English and French history, which I share, that draws me back. I wish she’d focused less on turning out as greater quantity of novels as possible and concentrated more on quality writing. A novel like this one should be revised about 20 times, yet this at best feels like a second draft. This was badly put together. Endless second-hand reports, most of which have no relevance to Mary I, ruin what could've been a great novel.