1.5 (generous, if you ask me)
hilariously my copy of book has, for some unknown reason, cut off most of the author’s acknowledgments so all I have is half a page! because of this error, I didn’t realise the book had ended and I was wondering why the nightmare phantom was thanking his publisher
originally, I was going to give this book a three as, while it was not amazing, it at least was somewhat entertaining. but the more I read, the worse it got which was REALLY disappointing considering this was labelled as having more action and being more interesting than the first book. uhm, where? 80% of the time I was bored or irritated by ness’s obnoxious behaviour and the other 20% was spent wondering how the author was going to wrap this shitstorm up
I’m trying to think of something good about this book but there’s just… nothing. It wasn’t offensively bad, which is why it’s not rated one star, but there’s still nothing I can really say about it that was particularly good. which is kind of sad, really. hm, I guess there’s at least two things that were good
1. the reveal of the pterodactyl’s identity + Priya & Ness freeing and riding on the pterodactyl. surprisingly an interesting reveal that tied neatly into cindy’s side plot and freeing the pterodactyl from the asshole mayor was very satisfying
2. both cindy and the director were a step up from their characters in CoN. I thought the director was really sassy and even made me chuckle a little and cindy’s no-bullshit/ serving cxnt attitude had me wishing she was the main character instead of little miss pick-me Ness
aaaand, that’s it. yup. before I dissect this book I want to talk about WHY I think this book’s pacing, plot, structure was so bad. and by bad I mean all over the place and so full of filler, the main plot felt like a side plot
it’s something I like to call book 1 1/2 syndrome.
book 1 1/2 syndrome occurs when an author writes too much content for one book but not enough for two, so the second book ends up feeling long and stretched thin. another 70 or so pages could’ve easily tied up the loose ends of CoN, but instead, the author chose to do a sequel and it was painfully clear though that she did NOT have enough material to make it engaging for the full story. and this is why I think the pacing felt so weird. it felt more like a bunch of directionless events tangled awkwardly together rather than a coherent story.
okay now i’m going to go through everything wrong with Cage of Dreams. spoiler alert: everything.
1. I despise ness. I wanted to get this point out of the way since ness and her character assassination is what irked me the most. I say irked but, really, I mean enraged. ness was a coward in CoN. she lost her sister and the memory continued to haunt her—picking her apart until she was nothing but bone. she became afraid of almost everything and became severely distrustful. but her whole arc in CoN was her learning how to trust again and finally heal. at the end of CoN, it seemed she was slowly leaving her trauma behind her. especially after learning her sister became the spider on purpose to kill their evil father.
so why did the author think regressing ness was a good idea? she was not only a coward again but she didn’t even have her witty humour.
I think the thing that pissed me off the most was her treatment towards cy. throughout the book, there are a number of instances where she is shown to be doubting cy’s kindness towards her and worried he will somehow ending up having power over her and hurt her. the worse instance was when cy was opening up to ness about how abusive his father was and how he ultimately killed his mother. cy spoke about his guilt and how he wished, even as a child, he could’ve saved her.
and what does ness think about in her internal monologue?
Right now, I’m almost as reliant on cy as his mother was on his father. And I’d like to make sure my sanctuary doesn’t become a gilded cage.” pg 234
dial it back, ness!! so cy is pouring his heart out to you and all you’re worried about is cy somehow turning on you despite him never laying a finger on you or giving you any reason to suggest he’d ever do this?
I get her fears are irrational but this made my stomach turn. another moment was when ness finally voiced her fear to cy.
I’m afraid that I’ll start feeling pressured to offer you blood for rent, even if I don’t want to.” pg 320
she did go on to explain that she knew he would never make her do this, but I don’t think it excused her mistrust towards him. also I saw a few reviewers complain ness and cy didn’t get together and I don’t understand why. hetero? how about hete-no. people can be good friends and care deeply for one another without it having to be romantic. plus, ness was an ungrateful little bxtch who didn’t deserve cy!
2. the writing was still juvenile but, now, it’s also painfully repetitive and there are even a few instances where the writer repeats nearly the exact same sentence!
Finally, I stop hesitating and do what cy was trying to get me to do all along. I run. pg 251
I do exactly what cy tried to tell me to do. I run. pg 252
I cannot believe those sentences are but a mere page out and no one spotted this obvious blunder. even if the author was writing those pages on two hours of sleep, how did her editor not notice? or even a beta reader?
there were more repeated/near-repeated sentences I noticed but I’m too lazy to find them.
the repetition wasn’t just on words but themes and ideas too. majority of ness’s internal monologue consisted of the following things:
a. the friends of the restful soul deceived her and she’ll never be safe again.
b. ness calling herself a ‘newham girl’ or saying ‘newhamite’
c. ness reminding the reader 24/7 that newham is filled with dangerous gangs, human traffickers and an insanely corrupt police force who regularly cover up crimes and are often bribed by local gangs or by those in power.
d. priya is strong & brave and ness is not. even though ness already knows that priya too has her own weaknesses
e. she’s scared of everything and will not hesitate to remind you of the fact every couple of pages.
this made the prose feel repetitive and a slog to get through.
3. the plot, what plot? there was no plot. CoN ended with ness freeing the nightmare phantom so I expected him to play a significant role in cage of dreams. while he was present, he ended up being pretty lame and uninteresting. the main plot consisted of the nightmare phantom and, by extension ness, teaming up to defeat the mayor who for some reason had become the main villain. the nightmare phantom directed ness to try destroy the mayor with a sentient killer napkin but it obviously failed and she ended up hitting the director instead. then later on, they tried again but failed and the nightmare phantom ended up back in the dream world. and that’s the main plot covered. we also had a multitude of side plots such as ness getting a new job as this stuck-up, elite restaurant for the wealthy, ness helping cy avenge his mother’s death by turning his father to mush using silver nitrate and turning him into a turtle, cindy trying to find the missing heiress and ness trying to find the director’s lair and find the kidnapped victims.
you’d think at least one of these plots would be sort of interesting but they just weren’t. though cy’s revenge was the best of the bunch since he deserved respite for what he went through.
4. cy was just there. priya too. I already complained about cy’s lack of presence or personality in my CoN review, but here he was even worse. I don’t think the author knew what to do with his character because he spent most of the book being a shoulder for little miss pick-me to cry on. sometimes he’d get involved in the plot such as when they sought out the director’s supposed ‘lair’ but that’s pretty much it. priya was the same character as she was in the first book. that’s not necessarily a bad thing, but I think if the author gave priya a conflict of her own to overcome, it would’ve deepened her character and allowed for some interesting exchanges between herself and ness.
5. everything was resolved way too easily. I was really excited to find out the truth behind why the director was involved in some human trafficking ring, but the reveal was lackluster and ness broke out all the victims in like one night anyway. if the author wasn’t trying to juggle 593268417 different plots it would’ve allowed for a smoother execution of the rescue. it didn’t help that the stakes never felt very high. I never felt worried something would go awry because none of the characters ever were shown to hit their breaking point. I think the closest ness was to hitting rock bottom was when cy and priya were spirited away and she realised she was alone, but even then, it didn’t feel like this visceral devastation tearing through her limbs but a thing she wallowed on for two seconds before picking herself back up
I’ve already spent a good hour writing this review so let’s end this already. cage of dreams is a boring, lacklustre sequel that fails to capture the essence of the first book. it had a juvenile, painfully bland prose that felt like a first draft the author wrote while heavily sedated, the characters were either dumbed down or made incredibly annoying or jarring (cough, ness) and there was no real main plot.
this book was the equivalent of elevator music. and I am just going to forget it exists.