Every chapter of this book opens in italics, from the perspective of random, unrelated and irrelevant "characters". A cat named Johannes! A wishing well! A mountain. These parts are useless through and through as I finished the book while skipping them and understood everything still. These should've been cut in the second draft for fuck's sake.
The story was interesting at first, but it got old really fast. The main characters are looking for this boy, Trystan. They go somewhere, he's not there. They go somewhere else, he's not there either. They go elsewhere, and shocker! he's still not there. It wouldn't be so bad if the characters where enough to carry the story, but ehh not really.
Braden- his name is actually Thomas I don't understand why they're calling him Braden it's not his last name, it's the name of his land. Hello sir Oakwood!- is a church guard and he doesn't like magic... or does he? The book opens and he's already got a magician servant. This could work in the hands of an experienced writer, but this one wasn't able to translate the fine line of emotions and feelings Thomas is supposed to hold towards magic- he should've been servantless and adamant that magic = evil at the start imo. It would've made the change that much more noticeable and great at the end.
Anyway, Thomas is serious, strong, determined and open-minded. That's not bad, but you kinda need more than for the character to be interesting. Merryn Pendraven doesn't fare much better. I like that she's nice to people and doesn't bash dresses or her non-magical cousin and her female friends, but that's held back by the fact that she's incomplete as a character.
See, Merryn is a Whyccan or however they spell it. That means that, as a woman, she's a witch. Men are warlocks, and in Whyccan society, there are big differences between the two. Warlocks tend to go more towards mind magic while witches are more about physical stuff, I think. The thing with that is that mind magic doesn't work well on Earth, and things get out of control very quickly. But warlocks don't wanna stop using it, thus they are evil and want to use their children as batteries.
Yep, that's how Merryn thinks. Let me just remind you; warlocks are the men of the Whyccan people. They are brothers, sons, uncles, even fathers. And Merryn is all like "They're all bad except maybe one or two." This get even more egregious when you learn that not only was her father a warlock, her father who died trying to rescue his son, but she also had a brother who died when she was younger, and that she still mourns to this very day. And yet... she never realizes this until the end of the book. That half of her fucking family were warlocks and that she was basically pissing on their memory by being such a prejudiced bitch.
Their romance started ok for me but they get into kisses way too quickly for people from that era. And Merryn is like, offended that Thomas put his arm around her when another man that she despises was making passes at her? Like she says it's a male thing and they were fighting over her but... no. This guy, whom is responsible for the death of her family and also tried to marry her before that, is trying to get her guard down so he can win her back, and Thomas supported the woman he loves by reminding her that he was there with her and on her side, and also not a dude who killed her entire family. Like, why do I have to explain this? "Oh no my lover is being emotionally tormented by this man who is clearly not 100% good, let me try to comfort her." = men fighting over a woman. And then of course the church guard in like the 1800 has premarital sex after they almost died and a kid is still missing.
They aren't bad together, but the stages really needed more planning. There's the meeting phase, which was done well, then the reveal, which was also done well, and then the trust part. But once we get to the betrayal moment, there's like 3 of them and they never have a lasting impact? Ok so the reason betrayal acts happen in the romeo and juliet type of stories is because it's cute af when the characters realize their love is stronger than the barriers separating them. It leads to a stronger bond at the end, which is why it should only be used once in any romance- unless you're a writer who actually knows what they're doing, of course. But here it's like fight, make up, fight, make up, fight, make up to the point where a character said "oh so you made up? I'm glad" and I was like "were they even mad at each other? which scene is she talking about?"
There are twists, but I couldn't be fucked to care because there was no way to see them coming- that would require a second draft. They aren't especially good ones, either, so maybe that was for the best. The magic was ok, I guess. I would've liked to know Merryn's power level tho; she's the coven protectress, aka the witch that has to protect alll the witches in Britain, but she can't transform back into a human with clothes on.
Also if you like faeries don't read this book. They get fucked in the ass hard. One queen is ready to invite this random witch for a gown.