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BirthRight #1
The Arrival
**alternate cover, kindle edition**
Four friends in the midst of a man drought cast a love spell on a whim. And land themselves on another planet. Oops.
On a foreign and often hostile world, love teeters on the horizon while the threat of civil war looms thanks to the girls' unexpected gifts.
Will the girls master these gifts in time to survive a war in which, not only are they the ultimate weapons, but also the ultimate prize.
Four friends in the midst of a man drought cast a love spell on a whim. And land themselves on another planet. Oops.
On a foreign and often hostile world, love teeters on the horizon while the threat of civil war looms thanks to the girls' unexpected gifts.
Will the girls master these gifts in time to survive a war in which, not only are they the ultimate weapons, but also the ultimate prize.
394 pages, Kindle Edition
First published December 22, 2010
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About the author
Nicole MacDonald
11 books168 followersNicole MacDonald is a thirty something year old Kiwi who loves to read and moonlights as a novelist. An avid reader from a young age, writing only occurred to her a few years ago after reading a book that didn’t quite hit the spot.
Daily scribbles eventuated into the BirthRight Trilogy, an Epic Fantasy Romance with women who know how to wield a sword, AND swing a punch. A literary journey that included six months of long sword training, as well as ju-jitsu lessons, and self defence lessons for Nicole.
When not writing Nicole loves to watch all manner of documentaries, escape to her family's cabin in the woods, and spend time with her other half and their fur critters.
You can keep up with her writing at www.nicolemacdonald-author.com or on the BirthRight Trilogy's facebook page.
Daily scribbles eventuated into the BirthRight Trilogy, an Epic Fantasy Romance with women who know how to wield a sword, AND swing a punch. A literary journey that included six months of long sword training, as well as ju-jitsu lessons, and self defence lessons for Nicole.
When not writing Nicole loves to watch all manner of documentaries, escape to her family's cabin in the woods, and spend time with her other half and their fur critters.
You can keep up with her writing at www.nicolemacdonald-author.com or on the BirthRight Trilogy's facebook page.
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April 17, 2016
Okay so I wrote it *grin* and I'm totally allowed to love it!! I survived 18months of creating this story and still love it so it bodes well - for me at least *lol*
July 6, 2011
Writing this review is difficult. In no way I want to offend the author, but I disagree with the high rating.
This book strongly needs a good editing, both for length and grammar and punctuation mistakes. (Real mistakes, not style choices.)
I had to read some paragraphs 3 or 4 times to understand (and often I had to skip.) [i.e. the world they came, from magic...]
To me the alternating POV (third person, first person) was confusing as hell. I know it's a willingly made choice (the author said so), it doesn't mean is for everyone. :)
There are 4 "heroines" (and heroes). But to tell them apart you use name/color/dresses. They are "told", non described in depth.
Moreover, an editor might have explained to the author the difference between an open ending, a cliffhanger and no ending at all. This book has NO ending. You are reading a "battle" scene and all of a sudden you read "to be continued." :)
Again, a personal choice by the author, but for me is difficult to accept. A cliffhanger makes me gasp for the character, not the plot. (Usually, the plot ends, but the story arch goes on. Here there's no ending to the plot.)
Go on and buy this book (0.99). Just let me know if you disagree :D
[June, 27. This review has been slightly modified in response to Alex's comment.]
This book strongly needs a good editing, both for length and grammar and punctuation mistakes. (Real mistakes, not style choices.)
I had to read some paragraphs 3 or 4 times to understand (and often I had to skip.) [i.e. the world they came, from magic...]
To me the alternating POV (third person, first person) was confusing as hell. I know it's a willingly made choice (the author said so), it doesn't mean is for everyone. :)
There are 4 "heroines" (and heroes). But to tell them apart you use name/color/dresses. They are "told", non described in depth.
Moreover, an editor might have explained to the author the difference between an open ending, a cliffhanger and no ending at all. This book has NO ending. You are reading a "battle" scene and all of a sudden you read "to be continued." :)
Again, a personal choice by the author, but for me is difficult to accept. A cliffhanger makes me gasp for the character, not the plot. (Usually, the plot ends, but the story arch goes on. Here there's no ending to the plot.)
Go on and buy this book (0.99). Just let me know if you disagree :D
[June, 27. This review has been slightly modified in response to Alex's comment.]
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September 13, 2011I found this book to be a bit of a tough read simply because it hit on my biggest pet peeve: bad editing. I struggled with multiple names of characters in addition to a nickname for nearly every one of them. Many of the characters expressed thoughts that were difficult to follow with the point of view shifting nearly every paragraph. Also difficult to process was the overuse of words (more specifically “and”) and misuse of verb tense (such as using has instead of had). The problem is that most of these issues manifested within the first chapter, making it difficult to proceed. Reading over a paragraph multiple times tends to interfere with the love affair created between reader and story. The introduction of 16 characters for a book 1 was a bit much. Hopefully with Book 2 each will prove necessary. I also appreciated that this was not a romance dripping in sexual encounters. Not to say that I don’t love such books, but it is nice to have a break as well as a book that can be recommended to the “faint of heart”.
Never one to leave anything unfinished (especially a book), I continued on. I am glad to say that I hung in there and did not give up on the book. It was at about Chapter 10 that I found myself getting into the story a bit more. I had been skeptical about a working plot, but was happy to discover that the author has a good basis to work with. MacDonald also threw us a doozey in ending the story in the middle of what is likely a pivotal fight between the “good” and “bad”. I would classify this story as sort of an Eragon meets Avatar: The Last Airbender with a little Charmed surrounding it all. Short of telling the story, those familiar with the given references will understand why. I really enjoyed the use of Griffins, having always been fascinated by the mythical creature.
In short, MacDonald has developed a promising story line that has potential. With a bit of polishing in the editing department and possibly making the story more focused on Alec and Cat, rather than the point of view of everyone, I would easily have been submersed within this book. If the girls are as close as they are supposed to be, Cat could easily convey how each one was feeling, rather than having each character express their own thoughts, unfortunately effectively pulling attention away from the story. I will be giving book 2 “Awakening” (due out in December 2011) a chance to see what develops for the characters.
Never one to leave anything unfinished (especially a book), I continued on. I am glad to say that I hung in there and did not give up on the book. It was at about Chapter 10 that I found myself getting into the story a bit more. I had been skeptical about a working plot, but was happy to discover that the author has a good basis to work with. MacDonald also threw us a doozey in ending the story in the middle of what is likely a pivotal fight between the “good” and “bad”. I would classify this story as sort of an Eragon meets Avatar: The Last Airbender with a little Charmed surrounding it all. Short of telling the story, those familiar with the given references will understand why. I really enjoyed the use of Griffins, having always been fascinated by the mythical creature.
In short, MacDonald has developed a promising story line that has potential. With a bit of polishing in the editing department and possibly making the story more focused on Alec and Cat, rather than the point of view of everyone, I would easily have been submersed within this book. If the girls are as close as they are supposed to be, Cat could easily convey how each one was feeling, rather than having each character express their own thoughts, unfortunately effectively pulling attention away from the story. I will be giving book 2 “Awakening” (due out in December 2011) a chance to see what develops for the characters.
May 11, 2012
Cat, Kassie, Loi, Sian are the 4 main characters of this adventure. I feel that the author really wants the readers to feel that Cat is the #1 main character. I only feel this way because a lot of the story seems to be told through her & from Cat's POV. I like the relationship between the 4 girls & love what the spell does. I guess you need to watch that wording when casting a spell (note to self, LOL). Once the spell is cast the story really seems to take off. There is great action & adventure with a bit of romance thrown in. I am not big on the romance novels so I like that it seems to have a little of everything.
***SPOILER ALERT***
When the girls 1st arrive in this strange realm the Griffon Warriors are sent to rescue them. You instantly feel the connection with Cat & Alek. I love Loi in her obsession with the different creatures of the realm. Dragons, Griffons, Elementals oh my.
The exchange between Alek & Cat at the lake is priceless. I read it several times over. I gave me such a mental picture & I laughed out loud.
Book #1 follows the girls through the realization that they are Elementals & were sent here for more than the reasons they think (To find their soul mates). They find out they can not return to their home on Earth & have left everything & everyone they loved behind. They start training with their physical as well as mental abilities on a daily basis. They become stronger with each lesson. They also become closer with the men in the story.
They realize that they are meant to help guard this realm & stop an evil witch from killing them & stealing their powers which would also enable her to rule the realm.
This book leaves off in the middle of a major fight with all 4 girls fighting for their lives & the lives of the men they love, one being the prince. What a major cliff hanger that is.
Thank goodness book #2 was already out & available to purchase. I downloaded it 2 minutes after finishing Book #1. I had to know what happened next. And you will have to know too.
***SPOILER ALERT***
When the girls 1st arrive in this strange realm the Griffon Warriors are sent to rescue them. You instantly feel the connection with Cat & Alek. I love Loi in her obsession with the different creatures of the realm. Dragons, Griffons, Elementals oh my.
The exchange between Alek & Cat at the lake is priceless. I read it several times over. I gave me such a mental picture & I laughed out loud.
Book #1 follows the girls through the realization that they are Elementals & were sent here for more than the reasons they think (To find their soul mates). They find out they can not return to their home on Earth & have left everything & everyone they loved behind. They start training with their physical as well as mental abilities on a daily basis. They become stronger with each lesson. They also become closer with the men in the story.
They realize that they are meant to help guard this realm & stop an evil witch from killing them & stealing their powers which would also enable her to rule the realm.
This book leaves off in the middle of a major fight with all 4 girls fighting for their lives & the lives of the men they love, one being the prince. What a major cliff hanger that is.
Thank goodness book #2 was already out & available to purchase. I downloaded it 2 minutes after finishing Book #1. I had to know what happened next. And you will have to know too.
February 5, 2011
I'm little more than a strumpet when it comes to book covers, and this one had me rolling over and practically purring. It's not obvious but subtly engaging.
At first the numerous points of view annoyed the hell out of me because I wanted to crawl into one characters head and stay there, letting the rest of the story envelop me. But I have to humble myself and say by doing this I was able to glean a broad and comprehensive understanding of the story, of the characters in a way I don't think I have before. The p.o.v changes let you glimpse one person in so many different ways it's like you know them personally.
I won't ramble on about the storyline - hey, it's a book read it yourself - but what I will say is you'll find yourself swept into another world ... it takes a long time to get there, but it does happen. I love a pacy read and whilst at first I thought this wasn't going to cut it, it picks up momentum … like a rolling stone it gathered power toward the end. Oh, Lord above save me from cliff hanger endings! But I will be grabbing the sequel once it's out. The sudden missing edge had me diving off looking for the sequel rather than clinging on with my fingernails scowling into the abyss.
The storytelling style is a tad intrusive, and if you like figuring out emotions for yourself by action you may find yourself disgruntled at times, but I for one found the read refreshing, and an interesting take on the classic damsel in distress scenario.
This story reminded me not to become a slave to submissive romance. Rather than swooning at your lovers feet take up arms and kick ass like the ladies in this book. *deranged battle cry*
At first the numerous points of view annoyed the hell out of me because I wanted to crawl into one characters head and stay there, letting the rest of the story envelop me. But I have to humble myself and say by doing this I was able to glean a broad and comprehensive understanding of the story, of the characters in a way I don't think I have before. The p.o.v changes let you glimpse one person in so many different ways it's like you know them personally.
I won't ramble on about the storyline - hey, it's a book read it yourself - but what I will say is you'll find yourself swept into another world ... it takes a long time to get there, but it does happen. I love a pacy read and whilst at first I thought this wasn't going to cut it, it picks up momentum … like a rolling stone it gathered power toward the end. Oh, Lord above save me from cliff hanger endings! But I will be grabbing the sequel once it's out. The sudden missing edge had me diving off looking for the sequel rather than clinging on with my fingernails scowling into the abyss.
The storytelling style is a tad intrusive, and if you like figuring out emotions for yourself by action you may find yourself disgruntled at times, but I for one found the read refreshing, and an interesting take on the classic damsel in distress scenario.
This story reminded me not to become a slave to submissive romance. Rather than swooning at your lovers feet take up arms and kick ass like the ladies in this book. *deranged battle cry*
August 24, 2012
This is such a bumpy read to be considered a good read. I want to make it clear, though, that the plot is not bad, but there are aspects of the book that didn't help earn stars for this review. My major frustrations:
1: The different points of view-- this book by far has the most rapid shifting points of view I've ever encountered, so much so that it swings around to the next before I could even grasp whose thoughts I am into. The quick succession of POV shifts is literally confusing. A first person point of view does not work when the author wishes to cover all the inner dialogue of each character, and I swear there are many main characters here, not to mention the animals involved who have their own mental communication. It's a mess! A simple narration from a third person point of view would have done the trick, and would have made the reading experience smoother.
2: Too much attention on the wardrobe!!!!! Aaargh! Whenever the characters have a change of clothing (almost every new day, sometiimes twice a day) - expect a lengthy and detailed description of the outfits not just of 1 main character but of 4 female MCs, 4 male MCs, and other supporting characters. I have to read through that parade before the plot moves along. It is a test of patience, I tell you.
3: Too much giggling and teasing around that the characters appear to be juvenile. Though it is okay to show camaraderie among them through bantering, it just didn't achieve the right result for me. It ended up having the atmosphere of a group of teens having a "sleep-over", gossiping about their crushes.
There are actually too many characters fighting for attention in this. By no means a short novel, it still was not enough to develop the characters well. Instead of giving the focus to a few, the author seems to bring everyone to front stage. Because of all these issues, it was really hard for me to finish this book. But finish it I did. And the two stars are for the adorable pets moments, good action scenes, and an interesting concept: 4 friends were transported in another realm after casting a spell to find their soul mates. In this realm they come into their powers as elementals, and help protect the heir of the throne and keep peace. They have found romantic interests, but are they really the soul mates they are seeking?
1: The different points of view-- this book by far has the most rapid shifting points of view I've ever encountered, so much so that it swings around to the next before I could even grasp whose thoughts I am into. The quick succession of POV shifts is literally confusing. A first person point of view does not work when the author wishes to cover all the inner dialogue of each character, and I swear there are many main characters here, not to mention the animals involved who have their own mental communication. It's a mess! A simple narration from a third person point of view would have done the trick, and would have made the reading experience smoother.
2: Too much attention on the wardrobe!!!!! Aaargh! Whenever the characters have a change of clothing (almost every new day, sometiimes twice a day) - expect a lengthy and detailed description of the outfits not just of 1 main character but of 4 female MCs, 4 male MCs, and other supporting characters. I have to read through that parade before the plot moves along. It is a test of patience, I tell you.
3: Too much giggling and teasing around that the characters appear to be juvenile. Though it is okay to show camaraderie among them through bantering, it just didn't achieve the right result for me. It ended up having the atmosphere of a group of teens having a "sleep-over", gossiping about their crushes.
There are actually too many characters fighting for attention in this. By no means a short novel, it still was not enough to develop the characters well. Instead of giving the focus to a few, the author seems to bring everyone to front stage. Because of all these issues, it was really hard for me to finish this book. But finish it I did. And the two stars are for the adorable pets moments, good action scenes, and an interesting concept: 4 friends were transported in another realm after casting a spell to find their soul mates. In this realm they come into their powers as elementals, and help protect the heir of the throne and keep peace. They have found romantic interests, but are they really the soul mates they are seeking?
May 6, 2011
This book is an adventure and a half. It had me laughing and turning green with envy over Nicole's eye for detail. I love a good fantasy meets sci-fi novel. Think Lord of the Rings meets a really interesting and witty chick lit book. At first I was afraid I would be thrown off by the switching point of views. I knew she was going to do it, but I hadn't quite prepared myself for how it would work. But it did work out well. It is actually a very interesting way to read a book. You get to try on different characters and see their point of view.
I enjoyed the relationship between the four girls. Their absolute loyalty to one another really stuck out to me. Their interactions never seemed contrived and pretty steadfast to how I see my friends and I interacting. I loved all of the love interests for each of the girls. I felt that Nicole matched them all very well with someone who would challenge them and bring them out of their shells, but do it in a unique way.
My most favorite aspect of this book is Nicole's keen eye for detail. I felt like I could see it all unfold in my mind. Which to me, is a sign of a great novelist. I found myself wanting to see the Griffin take flight and their varying colors of feathers matched with their lion-like manes. Oh and what I wouldn't give to have an Ada in real life to make my wardrobe sing.
My only grievance was the ending!!! I wanted more, which just means I'll be picking up the second book the second she releases it. I sort of felt like she ended it on the climax. I needed that payoff. But other than that, which may or may not be a good thing to others, I loved the book.
Nicole my hat is off to you on your first novel out the gate.
I enjoyed the relationship between the four girls. Their absolute loyalty to one another really stuck out to me. Their interactions never seemed contrived and pretty steadfast to how I see my friends and I interacting. I loved all of the love interests for each of the girls. I felt that Nicole matched them all very well with someone who would challenge them and bring them out of their shells, but do it in a unique way.
My most favorite aspect of this book is Nicole's keen eye for detail. I felt like I could see it all unfold in my mind. Which to me, is a sign of a great novelist. I found myself wanting to see the Griffin take flight and their varying colors of feathers matched with their lion-like manes. Oh and what I wouldn't give to have an Ada in real life to make my wardrobe sing.
My only grievance was the ending!!! I wanted more, which just means I'll be picking up the second book the second she releases it. I sort of felt like she ended it on the climax. I needed that payoff. But other than that, which may or may not be a good thing to others, I loved the book.
Nicole my hat is off to you on your first novel out the gate.
May 6, 2017
I have never read a book that didn't have a grammatical error. A misspelt word here or a comma instead of a fullstop there. A good book will take you beyond that to another world or time, and this book does that. Thank you Nicole, for taking me to a different dimension for a few days. I can't wait to see what happens next.
July 9, 2019
No problems regarding the plot. The story itself was good. The changing of the POV's though, OMG!! I have never read a book like this one. I usually have no issues when the author chooses to use multiple POV's but this one, had WAY TOO MANY! I had to keep rereading parts where I have no clue who was even talking/thinking. It was really confusing. I'd like to say that it got easier throughout the story, but not really. After the 4 ladies meet with the Griffin guys (5 total) and then their 5 griffins....all talking/thinking. Wow! I just don't get how the author thought this was a good way to write a book, the verbal and mental speaking? I'm baffled.
Needless to say, I managed to finish the story, it took a long time though. The Elementals, all in their 20's (mid to late), where all way too immature for their ages. It got annoying reading about all the nose wrinkling, giggling, commenting about the clothing, the guys, having their hair touched, blah. They seemed more like teenagers than adults. Always making a big deal when someone was caught hugging, kissing, looking dreamily into the other’s eyes, so annoying. They just acted too stupid for my taste.
A few little inconsistencies I have:
...At the beginning, the girls go out shopping for a party costume. Sian says how sometimes she needs to wear child-sized clothing, YET she then comments on how she wears a size 6. That doesn't make sense. If she were having to wear child clothing, then you'd expect her to be wearing somewhere around a size 0. I know because my youngest sister has the same problem, wearing a child size 12, adult 0.
...How do the girls have time for all their activities? Karate, archery, running, college, etc.
...After the girls do the soul mate spell, they awake in another world. Prior to them seeing the pretty jewel-like bird, they thought they were on another planet due to the clothes that they wore. How? Tunics and pants = a different planet?
...Why were the girls apprehensive about telling the guys about where they're from, Earth? Or when Cat gets upset after telling Alek the planet they come from is called Earth, he then makes fun of the name since it means dirt. She gets all upset, why?
...I find it too coincidental that the 4 main girls end up having powers, when it started off with only Sian being into the witchy stuff. I also remember a part when Kassie comments "Oh goddess." Which again doesn't make sense.
...Why did Kassie find blue hair so weird? I mean, hello she's from Earth where stuff like that is common.
...When Alek finds out about the soul mate thing, he distances himself from Cat. They later end up going for a run together, neither really talking. But any attention he shows her, she gets excited about. At the end he goes in for a kiss. You would think she'd be happy about the kiss yet ends up punching Alek and majorly overreacting, which I don't get at all.
...When they go to meet all the guards and people at the castle, one of the girls comments on how there looked to be like a thousand people in the room, and how that wouldn't be enough. First, how could anyone tell how many people there were unless they were on a stage of some kind, which we know none were. Second, what was she even talking about, with a thousand not being enough? Enough for what? I was lost there.
...The animals. What was with the animals. The fire dragon Nnelg, the griffins..they all talked intellectually, like a person, but then acted like an animal. I didn't understand that. It just wasn't meshing for me. Especially with Nnelg and Audrey, they're always playing together and then Nnelg goes to talk and sounds all smart and human-like.
Lastly, I'd like to comment about the ending. I'm sure anyone can guess what I'm referring too. The ending sucked! Plain and simple. To me there wasn't really anything going on in the story. Everything was perfect for everyone. Girls met their soul mates, all the people they meet are extra friendly, great food, great clothes.... It was too predictable to me. The story might have ended strangely, with the battle occurring and not knowing what happens...but again I can guess. Everyone lived happily ever after. The bad lady dies and everyone is happy and life goes on. So there's no need to go to the second book. I probably couldn't even handle reading another book like this one.
Needless to say, I managed to finish the story, it took a long time though. The Elementals, all in their 20's (mid to late), where all way too immature for their ages. It got annoying reading about all the nose wrinkling, giggling, commenting about the clothing, the guys, having their hair touched, blah. They seemed more like teenagers than adults. Always making a big deal when someone was caught hugging, kissing, looking dreamily into the other’s eyes, so annoying. They just acted too stupid for my taste.
A few little inconsistencies I have:
...At the beginning, the girls go out shopping for a party costume. Sian says how sometimes she needs to wear child-sized clothing, YET she then comments on how she wears a size 6. That doesn't make sense. If she were having to wear child clothing, then you'd expect her to be wearing somewhere around a size 0. I know because my youngest sister has the same problem, wearing a child size 12, adult 0.
...How do the girls have time for all their activities? Karate, archery, running, college, etc.
...After the girls do the soul mate spell, they awake in another world. Prior to them seeing the pretty jewel-like bird, they thought they were on another planet due to the clothes that they wore. How? Tunics and pants = a different planet?
...Why were the girls apprehensive about telling the guys about where they're from, Earth? Or when Cat gets upset after telling Alek the planet they come from is called Earth, he then makes fun of the name since it means dirt. She gets all upset, why?
...I find it too coincidental that the 4 main girls end up having powers, when it started off with only Sian being into the witchy stuff. I also remember a part when Kassie comments "Oh goddess." Which again doesn't make sense.
...Why did Kassie find blue hair so weird? I mean, hello she's from Earth where stuff like that is common.
...When Alek finds out about the soul mate thing, he distances himself from Cat. They later end up going for a run together, neither really talking. But any attention he shows her, she gets excited about. At the end he goes in for a kiss. You would think she'd be happy about the kiss yet ends up punching Alek and majorly overreacting, which I don't get at all.
...When they go to meet all the guards and people at the castle, one of the girls comments on how there looked to be like a thousand people in the room, and how that wouldn't be enough. First, how could anyone tell how many people there were unless they were on a stage of some kind, which we know none were. Second, what was she even talking about, with a thousand not being enough? Enough for what? I was lost there.
...The animals. What was with the animals. The fire dragon Nnelg, the griffins..they all talked intellectually, like a person, but then acted like an animal. I didn't understand that. It just wasn't meshing for me. Especially with Nnelg and Audrey, they're always playing together and then Nnelg goes to talk and sounds all smart and human-like.
Lastly, I'd like to comment about the ending. I'm sure anyone can guess what I'm referring too. The ending sucked! Plain and simple. To me there wasn't really anything going on in the story. Everything was perfect for everyone. Girls met their soul mates, all the people they meet are extra friendly, great food, great clothes.... It was too predictable to me. The story might have ended strangely, with the battle occurring and not knowing what happens...but again I can guess. Everyone lived happily ever after. The bad lady dies and everyone is happy and life goes on. So there's no need to go to the second book. I probably couldn't even handle reading another book like this one.
May 28, 2013
Two Stars: BECAUSE IF IT WAS FORMATTED PROPERLY IT WOULD HAVE BEEN REALLY GOOD!
I'm going to be honest here and state: I have a BA in English Literature with a minor in Creative Writing. I also plan on attending an MFA program in Creative Writing -- particularly specializing in young adult. So, please keep this in mind as you read my review.
First off: DO NOT RE-INVENT THE WHEEL. The author has put warnings all over her book (which I found out later) due to the fact that she was getting poor reviews. I'm going to explain the poor reviews:
Pick a style and stick with it. Changing POV should be done in CHAPTER changes. Not within the same chapter and not within the same paragraphs. Double spaces indicate a time jump. Also, you should always use double quotation marks for dialogue. It makes it easier to read. -- That may be American formatting. I'm not quite sure, but it is the most common.
This book was painful for me to get through. I actually didn't finish the book because of how painful it was. I think the author had an AMAZING idea. If she had an editor that knew their stuff and really taught her the rules of story writing and that you cannot just take those rules and chuck them out the window...well you would have had an amazing book.
It was very difficult to connect to any single main character and there were four of them. The book jumped around too much and the single quotation marks drove me nuts. Especially when the slang came in 'cause you need that single quotation mark ya kno'? When you use the single quotation mark for your dialogue, as the reader, it is hard to know when that dialogue ends. I see that mark and I go okay dialogue has stopped --but, it hasn't. This greatly annoyed me. I picked this book up and put it down several times before deciding I'm going to stop and this isn't for me.
I honestly think the writer could have a great story if she, possibly, took a few writing sessions or checked out classes or groups. I constantly tell new authors this. I'm an editor. I freelance constantly (no this is not a plug) and I am always telling my authors that I do not make up this rules for fiction. However, there are times to break the rules and times not to. I also tell my authors that I don't edit my own stuff. I do the first few rounds but it is very hard for me to edit my own writing. Some people can and some people can't. It takes another person to read your manuscript and tell you "what the hell are you thinking?" or "what does this mean? I'm so confused!"
Moby Dick "Call me Ishmael" --- as the opening line, was during it's time: a rule breaker. Why? Because it hadn't been done before. But, I've gotten submissions that had play formatting for dialogue and all sorts of crazy things. You need to decide what it is you are writing and stick with it. If you change POV change it through chapters. Your readers will thank you for it.
For everyone who can get through this book, well, I applaud you. However, with my background it was exceptionally hard for me. I find myself making editors notes throughout the entire book. (I do this on all books) But, when it is several on every page I know it is time for me to stop.
Rating: DNF
I'm going to be honest here and state: I have a BA in English Literature with a minor in Creative Writing. I also plan on attending an MFA program in Creative Writing -- particularly specializing in young adult. So, please keep this in mind as you read my review.
First off: DO NOT RE-INVENT THE WHEEL. The author has put warnings all over her book (which I found out later) due to the fact that she was getting poor reviews. I'm going to explain the poor reviews:
Pick a style and stick with it. Changing POV should be done in CHAPTER changes. Not within the same chapter and not within the same paragraphs. Double spaces indicate a time jump. Also, you should always use double quotation marks for dialogue. It makes it easier to read. -- That may be American formatting. I'm not quite sure, but it is the most common.
This book was painful for me to get through. I actually didn't finish the book because of how painful it was. I think the author had an AMAZING idea. If she had an editor that knew their stuff and really taught her the rules of story writing and that you cannot just take those rules and chuck them out the window...well you would have had an amazing book.
It was very difficult to connect to any single main character and there were four of them. The book jumped around too much and the single quotation marks drove me nuts. Especially when the slang came in 'cause you need that single quotation mark ya kno'? When you use the single quotation mark for your dialogue, as the reader, it is hard to know when that dialogue ends. I see that mark and I go okay dialogue has stopped --but, it hasn't. This greatly annoyed me. I picked this book up and put it down several times before deciding I'm going to stop and this isn't for me.
I honestly think the writer could have a great story if she, possibly, took a few writing sessions or checked out classes or groups. I constantly tell new authors this. I'm an editor. I freelance constantly (no this is not a plug) and I am always telling my authors that I do not make up this rules for fiction. However, there are times to break the rules and times not to. I also tell my authors that I don't edit my own stuff. I do the first few rounds but it is very hard for me to edit my own writing. Some people can and some people can't. It takes another person to read your manuscript and tell you "what the hell are you thinking?" or "what does this mean? I'm so confused!"
Moby Dick "Call me Ishmael" --- as the opening line, was during it's time: a rule breaker. Why? Because it hadn't been done before. But, I've gotten submissions that had play formatting for dialogue and all sorts of crazy things. You need to decide what it is you are writing and stick with it. If you change POV change it through chapters. Your readers will thank you for it.
For everyone who can get through this book, well, I applaud you. However, with my background it was exceptionally hard for me. I find myself making editors notes throughout the entire book. (I do this on all books) But, when it is several on every page I know it is time for me to stop.
Rating: DNF
July 1, 2011
I don't think it is difficult for anyone to imagine the frustrations accompanied by searching for your soul mate. In The Arrival, by Nicole MacDonald, her four protagonist are in just such a frame of mind. After a night out in New Zealand they gather to cast a love spell and end up along with their pet dog and cat in a different world. Here, magic is real and fantastical creatures abound. The girls have their hands full from the start but are delighted to discover clothes and weapons along with a small supply of food waiting for them, as if someone, or some thing, knew they were coming.
MacDonald soon has her characters in a battle for their lives against a formidable foe. Just as exhaustion has them close to their end, four griffins arrive with four fabulous men. Did the love spell work? But this question is far from the minds of the characters at first, but it won't be far from your minds.
MacDonald combines 1st person along with 3rd person to tell the story and has multiple POV shifts which you may find distracting. Because of this I give it 3-stars, but MacDonald is an important new voice to fantasy and I will be delighted to continue to read her work and watch her grow.
N. R. Williams, fantasy author
MacDonald soon has her characters in a battle for their lives against a formidable foe. Just as exhaustion has them close to their end, four griffins arrive with four fabulous men. Did the love spell work? But this question is far from the minds of the characters at first, but it won't be far from your minds.
MacDonald combines 1st person along with 3rd person to tell the story and has multiple POV shifts which you may find distracting. Because of this I give it 3-stars, but MacDonald is an important new voice to fantasy and I will be delighted to continue to read her work and watch her grow.
N. R. Williams, fantasy author
December 20, 2016
Hello super kick ass quartet of Women!!!
Alright so I love a kickass heroine...add in some fantasy and wit and I'm hooked. I loved this. At first I was a little confused by they changing viewpoints but I quickly adapted and realized each character had their own voice... While I understand that's not everyone's cup of tea, I had no issue with it.
Sue me I'm fangirling here!!!
Because it takes a lot to but four different women who not only are strong but unique in their own way and Ms. MacDonald did it. I loved watching them adapt to their new surrounding and develop relationships in their new world. I especially loved that they complimented each other but still had their differences. I liked seeing all the creatures that Ms. MacDonald created. I can not wait to see where this goes and I have a feeling I will love it as well.
Besides who doesn't love a man in armor that gets caught unawares by an equally strong woman who while doesn't need him to rescue her still appreciates it! The male counterparts were equally strong and empathetic as well as unique. I liked that they didn't overpower the females as characters, or each other.
Alright so I love a kickass heroine...add in some fantasy and wit and I'm hooked. I loved this. At first I was a little confused by they changing viewpoints but I quickly adapted and realized each character had their own voice... While I understand that's not everyone's cup of tea, I had no issue with it.
Sue me I'm fangirling here!!!
Because it takes a lot to but four different women who not only are strong but unique in their own way and Ms. MacDonald did it. I loved watching them adapt to their new surrounding and develop relationships in their new world. I especially loved that they complimented each other but still had their differences. I liked seeing all the creatures that Ms. MacDonald created. I can not wait to see where this goes and I have a feeling I will love it as well.
Besides who doesn't love a man in armor that gets caught unawares by an equally strong woman who while doesn't need him to rescue her still appreciates it! The male counterparts were equally strong and empathetic as well as unique. I liked that they didn't overpower the females as characters, or each other.
February 4, 2015
To be honest, I didn't make it very far. I may come back to it someday, but it's doubtful. The POV's are atrocious, probably the worst I've ever seen in a published book. They switch every paragraph or so, and three are in third person while one is in first person for some reason. What annoys me the most about them is that they serve literally no purpose. The girls are always together so far in what I've read, and it's like reading the same scene four times over, just from someone else's point of view. It's not necessary at all. The author needs to take a writing course of some kind, or at the very least find someone who can explain to her the basics of writing. Another thing that annoyed me was the over abundance of nicknames. Each girl has like two different nicknames, and it's really annoying. They came across as annoying teenage girls and not grown women well into their twenties. The dialogue isn't formatted properly, and there is nothing to differentiate descriptive parts from inner thoughts. This book is a mess.
June 27, 2011
I wasn't sure what to expect with this book - some of the reviews nearly put me off it but MAN am I glad I tried it. I'm a guy, normally I avoid chick lit but this was so far from what I'd expected. And written in such a cool way. I really don't get some of the reviewers comments about it being hard to read or make sense of. It was straight forward - seriously if you have issues with making it out maybe you should be reading a lower grade. Multiple POV makes this story fast paced and on the ball and the creatures and world the authors created is outstanding. It reads like watching a movie, the first book I've read that does this for me. So for anyone out there wanting a decent fantasy read give this a shot. You'll be impressed. Have to say the six months til the release for the next one is going to be a long six months. Kudos to the author.
June 29, 2011
An Amazon freebie, I wasn't certain what to expect. While I enjoyed the storyline, the cliffhanger end drove me crazy.
As others have mentioned, it's rather disjointed in that the POV changes. Constantly. Without warning. Sometimes within a single paragraph.
It's a bit like being in the mind of a schizophrenic.
Despite this, the overall story is enjoyable. It's a fun read if you don't get too caught up in trying to separate the various POVs as you're reading. I lowered the the rating to reflect that.
As others have mentioned, it's rather disjointed in that the POV changes. Constantly. Without warning. Sometimes within a single paragraph.
It's a bit like being in the mind of a schizophrenic.
Despite this, the overall story is enjoyable. It's a fun read if you don't get too caught up in trying to separate the various POVs as you're reading. I lowered the the rating to reflect that.
June 21, 2018
Confusing narrative
This book has a lot of 5 star reviews. The way the narrative switched from all of the different characters and then from first to third was extremely confusing. Get a sample before paying for this to see if you can cope with it. I've read a copious amount of books and have never experienced this to this degree. Add nicknames in and it's beyond confusing. DNF.
This book has a lot of 5 star reviews. The way the narrative switched from all of the different characters and then from first to third was extremely confusing. Get a sample before paying for this to see if you can cope with it. I've read a copious amount of books and have never experienced this to this degree. Add nicknames in and it's beyond confusing. DNF.
September 5, 2016
What a way to dive back into the female POV! The challenge of jumping between so many different voices was one I struggled with initially like many others, but once I pushed through, I got into it! I love the combination of weaponry, magic, fight scenes, fantasy, romance, plants, creatures, landscapes, fashion, and kick-ass Kiwi women. Go Nicole!
May 12, 2019
This was actually a good young adult book. The one star is due to the nature of the ending. All cliff hanger endings get ONE STAR from me
May 11, 2020
This book was just incredibly boring. I was trying to finish the first chapter to give it a "fair chance" but I got to 5% completion in my Kindle app and gave up. I really do not care what happens to any of these people. I do not like them. I do not find them cute or charming or interesting or engaging in the slightest.
As many others have stated, the shifting pov was a huge detriment to the narrative. I did not find it confusing so much as just really, really annoying. Alternating povs *can* work but it's tricky and I would not recommend using more than two. I think if the writer had stuck with just Cat's pov (the one who's inexplicably in first person while the other three are in 3rd), the story would have been much better for it. The story was much smoother during the time Cat was at work and on her lunch break and we somehow miraculously got at least a whole page of uninterrupted Cat pov. If the whole book had been like that, I'm sure it would have been a far less painful read. Maybe I could have figured out which of the three was the redhead and who was the tall one. As it stands, I have no idea and as I stated above I decided that I really do not care.
As many others have stated, the shifting pov was a huge detriment to the narrative. I did not find it confusing so much as just really, really annoying. Alternating povs *can* work but it's tricky and I would not recommend using more than two. I think if the writer had stuck with just Cat's pov (the one who's inexplicably in first person while the other three are in 3rd), the story would have been much better for it. The story was much smoother during the time Cat was at work and on her lunch break and we somehow miraculously got at least a whole page of uninterrupted Cat pov. If the whole book had been like that, I'm sure it would have been a far less painful read. Maybe I could have figured out which of the three was the redhead and who was the tall one. As it stands, I have no idea and as I stated above I decided that I really do not care.
November 30, 2020
This was a fun book to read and I flew through it. I enjoy all the character development although the changing of the points of view threw me off from time to time. The character I probably relate to most was Cat so I liked the fact that she was mostly the main character. I loved the griffons and thought their telepathy was so cool. In all, I really enjoyed this book and would recommend it.
October 5, 2020
I love the idea of these four kick-ass modern women who want to meet their soulmates. A spell gone awry lands them in another world entirely. I love all the creatures, especially the griffins and dragons. I loved this book. It was full of fantastic creatures and adventure. I loved the elemental twist to the story. The ending was climatic and I can't wait to see what happens in book 2.
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June 19, 2017I read this book at the end of March (2017). I mean to review it much earlier, but life kind of got in the way. This book reached out and grabbed me and I found I didn't want to put it down
January 9, 2019
Great read, kept me wanting more from the first page to the last page, would definitely recommend.
May 9, 2020
DNF. I just couldn't get past all the jumping around in POV and I had no idea what was happening. I only made it to page 19.
March 16, 2011
When Catherine “Cat”, Sian, Laura “Loi” and Kassandra “Kassie” from New Zealand cast a love spell one night to find their soul mates, they couldn’t imagine that this will transport them to another world, where magic, other creatures and evil are normal.
Waking up outside in the woods, along with Lucky the cat and Audrey the dog, they discover that all they have are the clothes they are wearing, some food, weapons and strange money. They realize that they are not on Earth anymore and know that they have to adapt to the life there and hope to find this sorceress Elena, who will be powerful enough to hopefully transport them back home to Earth.
Then one night during a battle against evil, the four friends hold their grounds against them and are about to meet their other half, when they faces the Griffon Guards.
The arrival by Nicole MacDonald is the first novel in her BirthRight Trilogy and also her debut. When the author approach me through my Blog and ask if I was interested in reviewing her novel, I couldn’t refuse especially when I read the blurb she send me. Boy, what a surprise it was, the story is well build and kept my attention all the way through the book.
I love all the characters, especially the women. On Earth all four women are practicing a form of martial art and with the battles they having on this new planet, its definitely a bonus. Although the book is written from several points of views, it was clear to me that Cat has a bigger part in this whole thing; her attraction to the leader of the Griffon Guards has a purpose. The switching between characters bothered me in the beginning, but after reading a couple chapters I realize that it was needed to tell the whole story.
The interactions and the growing relationships between the four women and the Griffon Guards are fabulous. Even though the women just met them, you can see the growing affection and trusts towards them, telling us they might be their soul mates they were looking for.
The only downside of this book is the huge cliffhanger at the end, leaving the reader desperate to get his or her hands on the next book, including me. So lets hope that the wait for the second book won’t be long.
If you are looking for a fabulous book with some strong kick-ass heroines, mixed with their gorgeous soul mates, magic and other beings, then I truly recommend this novel.
I’m definitely going to keep my eyes on this author and sees what she has in store for us next.
Waking up outside in the woods, along with Lucky the cat and Audrey the dog, they discover that all they have are the clothes they are wearing, some food, weapons and strange money. They realize that they are not on Earth anymore and know that they have to adapt to the life there and hope to find this sorceress Elena, who will be powerful enough to hopefully transport them back home to Earth.
Then one night during a battle against evil, the four friends hold their grounds against them and are about to meet their other half, when they faces the Griffon Guards.
The arrival by Nicole MacDonald is the first novel in her BirthRight Trilogy and also her debut. When the author approach me through my Blog and ask if I was interested in reviewing her novel, I couldn’t refuse especially when I read the blurb she send me. Boy, what a surprise it was, the story is well build and kept my attention all the way through the book.
I love all the characters, especially the women. On Earth all four women are practicing a form of martial art and with the battles they having on this new planet, its definitely a bonus. Although the book is written from several points of views, it was clear to me that Cat has a bigger part in this whole thing; her attraction to the leader of the Griffon Guards has a purpose. The switching between characters bothered me in the beginning, but after reading a couple chapters I realize that it was needed to tell the whole story.
The interactions and the growing relationships between the four women and the Griffon Guards are fabulous. Even though the women just met them, you can see the growing affection and trusts towards them, telling us they might be their soul mates they were looking for.
The only downside of this book is the huge cliffhanger at the end, leaving the reader desperate to get his or her hands on the next book, including me. So lets hope that the wait for the second book won’t be long.
If you are looking for a fabulous book with some strong kick-ass heroines, mixed with their gorgeous soul mates, magic and other beings, then I truly recommend this novel.
I’m definitely going to keep my eyes on this author and sees what she has in store for us next.
January 14, 2013
The Arrival is an exciting book with a clever premise and likable characters. The four heroines really define the word girl-power and stick together through any adversity. After being transported to a mythical land after casting a spell to find their true loves they gamely adjust to the changes and work diligently to refine the mystical powers bestowed on them to save this new world they've entered. Each heroine has unique talents and distinct personalities that set each apart and I admired their feistiness. The four heroes of this story are chivalric and possess strength and charm and work hard to gain the affections of the women they immediately connect with. While we spend some time with the boys, this is clearly a story about the heroines, with the heroes definitely in the secondary category.
The world created is visually stimulating with amazing mythical creatures. The heroes and heroines are truly heroic and have to unleash some potent powers to save the kingdom. The action sequences are thrilling and lead to an exciting conclusion for the moment.
There's a lot to like in this story but I did have some minor issues. There are a lot of main characters who the author makes sure get equal time and attention through constant head-hopping. It was difficult at times figuring out who was talking since the perspective would shift suddenly. The flow of the story was jarring because of this and there was a frantic feel as well. Those not fond of cliffhangers best be prepared to pull your hair out as this story ends right in the middle of a heartpounding action scene. This left me screaming but excited for the next book.
The Arrival was an entertaining story with well-written characters, a colorful world, and exciting action scenes that lay the groundwork for what promises to be a satisfying series. This was my first book by Ms MacDonald but I'm intrigued enough by this work to try more from her.
The world created is visually stimulating with amazing mythical creatures. The heroes and heroines are truly heroic and have to unleash some potent powers to save the kingdom. The action sequences are thrilling and lead to an exciting conclusion for the moment.
There's a lot to like in this story but I did have some minor issues. There are a lot of main characters who the author makes sure get equal time and attention through constant head-hopping. It was difficult at times figuring out who was talking since the perspective would shift suddenly. The flow of the story was jarring because of this and there was a frantic feel as well. Those not fond of cliffhangers best be prepared to pull your hair out as this story ends right in the middle of a heartpounding action scene. This left me screaming but excited for the next book.
The Arrival was an entertaining story with well-written characters, a colorful world, and exciting action scenes that lay the groundwork for what promises to be a satisfying series. This was my first book by Ms MacDonald but I'm intrigued enough by this work to try more from her.
April 25, 2011
The Arrival is the first book in the Birthright Trilogy by Nicole MacDonald. I must say when I first started to read The Arrival, I had my doubts. The main characters Cat, Kassie, Sian and Loi seemed very one dimensional and lacked depth. But as the book progressed, I realized this was a result from the author's writing style. From the very first page the author jumps around from different points of view,which makes for a very confusing read. This distraction took away from the lure of the characters and left me frustrated.
As I continued to read, I was surprised to find myself caught up in the second half of the book. Once I got used to the different POVs it gave a bit more insight into the interactions between characters and added depth to both the characters and the story. One of the things that I loved most about this story was Nicole MacDonald's descriptions of the fantasy creatures. Through her words the Griffon came to life within this story in such a vivid way.
This book lays the groundwork for the next two in the trilogy. For this tale builds slowly as you watch the characters develop and the plot starts to take shape. This story comes to a head in the most unexpected way that leaves you wanting to have the next book in hand.
The Arrival brings nothing new to the Fantasy Genre, but it is an entertaining love story with a magical twist, and damsels in dirty dresses save the day. So if you are in the mood for an easy and fun read then this book is for you.
Nicole MacDonald is a self published author from New Zealand.
3.5 Stars! Reviewd for DarkissReads www.darkissreads.com
As I continued to read, I was surprised to find myself caught up in the second half of the book. Once I got used to the different POVs it gave a bit more insight into the interactions between characters and added depth to both the characters and the story. One of the things that I loved most about this story was Nicole MacDonald's descriptions of the fantasy creatures. Through her words the Griffon came to life within this story in such a vivid way.
This book lays the groundwork for the next two in the trilogy. For this tale builds slowly as you watch the characters develop and the plot starts to take shape. This story comes to a head in the most unexpected way that leaves you wanting to have the next book in hand.
The Arrival brings nothing new to the Fantasy Genre, but it is an entertaining love story with a magical twist, and damsels in dirty dresses save the day. So if you are in the mood for an easy and fun read then this book is for you.
Nicole MacDonald is a self published author from New Zealand.
3.5 Stars! Reviewd for DarkissReads www.darkissreads.com
March 25, 2013
This is an original review from http://bookedandloaded.com
It was bound to happen, right?!?! This is my first formal 1 bullet review. My 1 Bullet means = I did not finish this book. I tried. Honestly, I tried SO hard! This is one of my favorite genre’s EVER – Fantasy/Sci-fi Romance. First off I am normally VERY lenient on grammatical issues in books. First, because my grammar royally blows a big one. Second, because I read a lot of ARC’s that are not completely finished with editing, so I have become accustomed to overlooking many editorial things. However, The Arrival had some editing issues that even I could not overlook. The POV issue was also an ongoing problem. With the point of view changing through many different characters and it just left like I was in a damn Round-Up ride at the fair. Sometimes it moved onto new beings that you were unaware could communicate. We go round and round and round. I have never felt quite like this about the POV changes. Stereotypes – Oh my. I also felt like some real stereotypical issues existed in The Arrival. I am a women and I care about how I look, but while fighting for my life I am pretty sure even if Thor himself arrived the last thing I would think about would be about how my hair looked. It just placed too many potential great scenes into *facepalm* territory. I really liked the idea of this story line, but for me it just felt like a mess wrapped in another mess. I do want to say that I made it almost to 50% of the book and I feel that was an honest effort with no hope of redemption.
It was bound to happen, right?!?! This is my first formal 1 bullet review. My 1 Bullet means = I did not finish this book. I tried. Honestly, I tried SO hard! This is one of my favorite genre’s EVER – Fantasy/Sci-fi Romance. First off I am normally VERY lenient on grammatical issues in books. First, because my grammar royally blows a big one. Second, because I read a lot of ARC’s that are not completely finished with editing, so I have become accustomed to overlooking many editorial things. However, The Arrival had some editing issues that even I could not overlook. The POV issue was also an ongoing problem. With the point of view changing through many different characters and it just left like I was in a damn Round-Up ride at the fair. Sometimes it moved onto new beings that you were unaware could communicate. We go round and round and round. I have never felt quite like this about the POV changes. Stereotypes – Oh my. I also felt like some real stereotypical issues existed in The Arrival. I am a women and I care about how I look, but while fighting for my life I am pretty sure even if Thor himself arrived the last thing I would think about would be about how my hair looked. It just placed too many potential great scenes into *facepalm* territory. I really liked the idea of this story line, but for me it just felt like a mess wrapped in another mess. I do want to say that I made it almost to 50% of the book and I feel that was an honest effort with no hope of redemption.
April 4, 2012
I loved this book, it would just sit next to me on my iPad and be like "Read me....Read me....you know you want to." Eventually i would cave and read it. Hence the reason its finished....i tried to stretch the amount of time it took me, but it didnt last as long as i hoped.
The only downfall was the ending, i like where the story was going but it left me disapointed because i didnt know what was going to happen with Alek and Cat + the other Griffin Guard and Elementals.
I found it really easy to keep up with the story line even though each paragraph was from a new P.O.V. I thought that i really connected with the character Cat, and her love for Alek. **swoon** Alek like every other main male character was very romantic, and because of the time period it was set in he was also very chivalrous. The griffin guard, the typical royal guard/friends/family...i think not they were also very chivalrous, they were very out of the ordinary.
It was very paranormal in the sense of how they came to this realm and how they became Elementals, and everything about the Griffin guard. Even the creatures were out of the ordinary.
All in all this was an amazing book and i cant wait to read the other 2. Congrats to self publisher and author Nicole MacDonald, you have done a wonderful job.
The only downfall was the ending, i like where the story was going but it left me disapointed because i didnt know what was going to happen with Alek and Cat + the other Griffin Guard and Elementals.
I found it really easy to keep up with the story line even though each paragraph was from a new P.O.V. I thought that i really connected with the character Cat, and her love for Alek. **swoon** Alek like every other main male character was very romantic, and because of the time period it was set in he was also very chivalrous. The griffin guard, the typical royal guard/friends/family...i think not they were also very chivalrous, they were very out of the ordinary.
It was very paranormal in the sense of how they came to this realm and how they became Elementals, and everything about the Griffin guard. Even the creatures were out of the ordinary.
All in all this was an amazing book and i cant wait to read the other 2. Congrats to self publisher and author Nicole MacDonald, you have done a wonderful job.
February 14, 2011
Four young women from New Zealand cast a "love spell" to find their soul mates and are transported to another world - so starts this cracking book, the first in the Birthright series.
The Arrival has good world-building and history. The characters come up with a decent explanation as to why they can speak with and understand the natives. The interraction and relationship developments between the Girls and the Griffon guards is not too cloying and girly. The blurb may lead people to think this book is one aimed more at the female readers but trust me - it isn't.
The magic system (elemental) is clever and works well and not too much time is spent on the girls mastering their abilities.
The only thing that bothered me at first was the constant switching between mutiple viewpoints but once I got used to it and into the story I hardly noticed and if anything it probably added to it.
The ending was a massive cliffhanger and I really cannot wait for part 2.
The Arrival has good world-building and history. The characters come up with a decent explanation as to why they can speak with and understand the natives. The interraction and relationship developments between the Girls and the Griffon guards is not too cloying and girly. The blurb may lead people to think this book is one aimed more at the female readers but trust me - it isn't.
The magic system (elemental) is clever and works well and not too much time is spent on the girls mastering their abilities.
The only thing that bothered me at first was the constant switching between mutiple viewpoints but once I got used to it and into the story I hardly noticed and if anything it probably added to it.
The ending was a massive cliffhanger and I really cannot wait for part 2.
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