Some of the worst writing I've read recently. Truly, I barely managed to keep picking it up over the months and haven't been able to finish it because it's that bad. Today, a few hundred pages in, I have to throw in the towel and put this miserable book down for once and for all
Let's go over the major failures of the book so far
1)The plot is conceived in the StUPidEst most random, sudden way. I honestly have to laugh the way Deveraux introduces the conflict. Which goes like this:
An aging single mother, Eden, who's had a hard hard life ;((( *boohooo* inherits an old mansion from an elderly coot who left it for her in her will. Eden's name becomes linked to a BAD man and she gets investigated. The town lawyer and FBI man fight over her (YAY im so desirable and relevant!) but im going to solve the mystery first all by myself (bc im smahrt 2)!
This is how the book starts off, at the FBI bureau
"Remember that agent we found out had been a spy for the last fifteen years?
...a few months ago theyd found out he'd been feeding information to his mother country"
This unknown, no-name, who we found out later is simply 'Applegate' AKA
"[guy] who has been spying on the US for umpteen years" (4) swallowed Eden's written name...
They then send Jared on his mission (wine n dine her for info). May i just say, HOW FVCKNG VAGUE this whole thing was introduced ??? Lol, we know NOTHINg about Applegate, his motivations, really just a flat flimsy excuse to orchestrate the whole problem into motion. His name is tossed in here in there to half-heartedly give a sense of purpose to all of the lame events, to no real avail
2) RepetitiveRepetitiveRepetitive *YAWNNNN*
pgs.68-70
"Jared listened but his temper didnt abate"
"He listened
"Jared stopped talking and listened
"Jared took a breath to listen
"Jared listened to Bill
The above was only sampled from a span of 3 pages! Obviously, the author is unable to keep unnecessary details ("he/she said; Jared did _this_") out of her writing or even make the call to delete or simply abbreviate doldrum dialogue. Moreover the lack of diversity in style and word choice really makes me want to hit myself. Sometimes it feels like im reading the same thing over again, so i skip large chunks because life is too short to waste upon this dumb novel
Moreover, major repetition is evident within larger description of sequences. To the point where you just want to bang your head each time Deveraux feels the need to needlessly wheedle in poor Eden's sob story, especially concerning her experience as a survivor of sexual assault in her teens. The real event is seldom delved into (save for one brief account) which the author conveniently skirts around bc it is too 'painful' for Eden to recall. She only brings it up to recount her material suffering (leading to meeting Farrington), justify beating up Jared McBride, whine about being a young single mother, or get sympathy for her life circumstances. Not to define her trauma as an experience of growth, or stimulate a real discussion about rape, which is mostly well covered up and glossed over. "She'd been leaped on by a man, thrown down, and ... She'd never been able to remember what happened after that."
3) Bad, confusing writing.
Had to re-read sections many times, just awkward choices here and there. Read for yourself.
4) Protagonist created by author for ego reasons, probably.
We like reflections of ourselves, Jude deveraux a little too much if i had to guess. They seem annoyingly similiar in terms of phsyical descriptions, (petite, blond, annoying looking). But guess
what? the main character's occupation is editing. Hmmmm.
In her free time she sifts through manuscripts and writes. Hmmm
The character is honestly not very relatable at all in general (hobbies, experiences, personality). & I have the unshakable conviction the author's inspirations were probably herself (?), which just doesn't go well with me
5) Research + incorporation is so CRINGEY
God it honestly was integrated/formatted like a 5th grader's report. This is for all the info researched about victorian/period architecture and 1800s gardening. WTF. Not only is it soooo fvcknh LAme that you have to read pages of irrelevant blegh on that stuff (Eden's obscure knowledge and INFATUATION of a forgotten gardening style), but also have to re-read the same shitty little phrases and nuggets of information. the phrase 'eighteenth century gardens' came up at least 7 trillion times in league with obscure terms, structural plans, and flower species names NO ONE CARES ABOUT! (*I garden, and personally enjoy Botany, however most people DONT FRKNG care. Especially not when you drone on for pages. Helllooooo, eden makes no attempt to be an interesting relatable character here)
6) The audience is targeted to obviously thirsty old middle aged women
The romance sub plot is meant to compensate for how screwed up the actual story line is! The mystery is quite sloppy and many events feel forced or just orchestrated to happen that way. But we females can brush that fact under the rug if Deveraux presents us swoon worthy love interests, righttttt guyssss?
No. The romance is dumb too: Eden always needs to feel angry at one of the boys in the love triangle, bc they are hitting on her, or she must suddenly feel scared and OBJECT because it is moving along too soon. Its so unreasonable when she's suddenly mad over the dumbest things, when its out of her character in the first place to get angry (think of her interactions with her daughter + stuart). Its extremelly clear the author flings in as MANY meaningless petty little fights as possible so Eden and Jared/Brad can makeup again and keep the romantic tension/possibilities going. Honestly just useless minor conflicts.
alsooooo they are both like middle aged divorcee men, who make a single, old, graying mother like Eden feel young beautiful and again. Im sure this hits the spot for some of ya lil nasties out there (no judgement), and appeals to you as the target audience-- giving you a reason to read on. But for me, absolutley not. Therefore i can look past the pitiful attempt at romance to the real crumblings of this bad bad novel
that is all
The prosecution rests your honor.