Diary ng Panget

Diary ng Panget #1

by HaveYouSeenThisGirL, Jan Irene Villar (Illustrator)

Mahirap at panget si Girl tapos magnet siya ng mga poging mayayaman na boys? YES! Cliché? YES! So what makes this book special? This story has made a lot of people online laugh, as in hagalpak talaga with matching headbang pa! This is Eya's diary, a girl who believes she's ugly and will meet Cross Sandford, the most annoying nilalang ever. Samahan natin si Eya sa nakakaloka niyang adventure sa Willford Academy! A Cinderella story with a twist katatawanan! A story na pwedeng-pwede sa mga kabataan at pati na rin sa lagpas kabataan, para sa kababaihan, kalalakihan, binabae, o pusong lalaki. A very funny and kakilig story.

Genres: Diary, Romance, Young Adult, Humor, Love, Comedy, Contemporary

128 pages, Mass Market Paperback

First published May 1, 2013

About the author

I just turned 19 last February.

When I was 14, my goal was to have readers who will appreciate my story, goal accomplished.

When I was 18 my goal was to publish a book, now I have a published book - goal accomplished.

NOW, my goal is to write and publish something I can call a masterpiece before I turn 30.

I still have 11 years to go, I can do this. I just have to use the same formula:
PASSION + DEDICATION x PATIENCE

Reviews

[K.D. Absolutely · Rating 3 out of 5]

Andaming tumutuligsa sa librong ito dito sa GR, pero marami namang nagbasa. Di ko alam kung bakit. Magpakatotoo kayo noh. Bibili. Magbabasa. Matutuwa. Tatawa. Tapos pag gagawa ng review, sisiraan. Eh Tagalog ito. Sariling atin. Kumpara naman sa binabasa ninyong mga foreign romance novels, may kalidad na itong sinulat ni Denny (yong author, yan ang totoo nyang pangalan). Romance ito. Hindi naman ito serious literature gaya ng Noli Me Tangere. Hindi naman sinulat ito ni Denny para magaklas ang mga obrero laban sa mga gobyerno. Kaya itigil na yang kasasabi ng "I can't believe I read this" (dahil binasa mo na nga e at wala namang pumilit sa yo) o "It's a total waste of time" (kasi andyan ka na, wag ka na lang uulit).

Romance so definitely the intent is to play around with young (or young at heart) girl's fantasies. Ulila't mahirap si Eya tapos inaapi ng kumupkop sa kanyang tiyahin. Tapos na-meet nya si Chad na mahilig syang pag-tripan. Tapos naging personal maid sya ni Cross. Parehong guwapo at mayaman ang dalawa. Kaya nga playing with young girl's fantasies. Then pasok si Lory kasi kailangan ng twist sa story at para rin di nagiisa ang bidang si Eya. Ibig kong sabihin, ganyan talaga ang structure ng romance. Tsk tsk.

Kung iisipin mo, pareho lang ito ng structure ng Twilight o Hunger Games. May isang babae tapos dalawang guwapong lalaki na magkaka-interes sa kanya. Eh tayong mga Pilipino, malakas pa rin ang colonial mentality. Gustong gusto yang dalawang yan (mapalibro o mapa-pelikula). Pero pagkatapos magbasa o manood ng sine, sasabihin garbage at ibibida sa mga kaibigan na pangit daw. Pero wag ka bago magbasa o manood eh halos di humihinga sa excitement. Nagpapaka-intellectual pa kayo eh the fact na binili ninyo at binasa ang librong ito, bakya rin ang taste ninyo. Aminin. Madali kayang basahin ito at kahit akong lalaki at may edad na, natawa ako doon sa huling tagpo sa party.

Kaya naman 3 stars sa akin itong librong ito. 3 stars sa GR, ibig sabihin nagustuhan ko. Hindi naman nagkawatak-watak ang libro habang binabasa ko. Anoba, paano ka ba magbasa ng libro eh easy read ito at hindi mo naman kailangang seryosohin o kailangang i-highlight ng Stabilo ang mga dialogues. Omaygad. Nagpapaka-intellectual ka ba.

Wala rin akong problema sa language na ginamit. Ganyan ang gusto ni Denny na pagsasalita ng character nyang si Eya. Character nya yon eh. So ano ang problema mo.

Pero bakit di ito 5 or 4 stars:

(1) Kailangan ni Denny ng editor sa English. Denny, my friend, ang apartment ay hindi double "p." Parang consistent yong gamit mo ng "appartment" kaya yon yata ang alam mong spelling. Tapos, yong "jewelries" dapat "jewelry" lang. Mapa-singular o plural, "jewelry" lang. Parang "luggage" (walang "luggages").

(2) Natuwa kamo si Eya kasi may 6th month at 13th month. Denny, anak, ang tawag sa 6th month ay midyear bonus o 14th month na ibinibigay sa midyear. Ang 13th month ay mandated ng batas kaya dapat talagang may ganyan si Eya. Pero pag December yon binibigay kahit 12th month pa lang ang December at 12 months lang meron tayo.

(3) Yong mayayamang characters, medyo lagyan mo ng English ang pagsasalita. Minsan, pareho na sila ni Eya so hindi distinct ang voices nila. Noong nagulat si British Girl Lory, biglang sabi: "Ha, sino ka?" eh British yon, dapat "Hey, who are you?"

Yon lang. Otherwise, well done, Denny. Sulat ka lang ng sulat. Inggit lang silang mga tumutuligsa sa librong ito.

Pero may pahabol lang ako: panget ba talaga si Eya o niloloko mo lang kami? Hehe

[Mitchii · Rating 2 out of 5]

In the words of the characters of this book, paksheeeeet lang! Itong librong ito ay isang malaking riot. Parang pinaghabi-habi mga shoujo manga and Asian drama series. Cliché? Totally. Enjoyable? Infairness, oo. Sa sobrang pagkacurious ko talagang hinanap ko online ang susunod na mga kabanata. At nagatagumpay ako sabi ko na nga nga ba hindi ako bibiguin ni Mr. Google. Friends kami non. (sorry author, libre naman siya dati, e.)

Simula tayo sa pinakasimula. Wala akong balak basahin ito, hindi sa hindi ako nagbabasa ng librong Filipino. Mahilig kaya ako sa pocketbooks. Oo, alam ko hindi siya madugong lathalaing Filipino pero at least Filipino books siya. O siya, dahil sa bagkabagot, inip ko at banas at hindi umaabot sa loob ang wifi ng sm, napagdiskitahan ko tuloy ito. Pero in fairness uli nakakaaliw. Hindi siya completely laughtrip sa akin, kasi sabi ko nga cliché…it means typical. Napanood at nabasa ko na mga ito. Weh, di nga? Sige simulan natin sa panget na bida na si Reah Rodriguez o Eya. Panget siya…sabi niya. Pero kung tutuuisin di naman. Neglected lang siya, kulang sa budget sa pagpapaganda. Parang si Sunako ng Yamato. Maganda siya kaya lang napabayaan. Si Sunako sa trauma, si Eya sa pera. Pero pagnaayusan wag kayo nagmumukha na silang tao.

Sa guy na si Cross Sandford ay parang si Tsukasa Domyoji ng Hana Yori Dango, na may pagka-Natsume ng Gakuen Alice. Siya yung mayabang na may ipagyayabang. Mayaman, gwapo at may abs. Ay meron pa pala, isa rin siyang matapobre, mayabang, walang galang at nanununtok ng babae. Oo, totoo may sinuntok siyang babae.

At tulad ng Hana Yori, naging PA/maid siya ng young master na si Cross. Syempre banas si guy, e laki na niya para magkaroon ng yaya. Si girl di tumanggi dahil pera at pangarap ang nakataya dito. So by this time alam niya ng very dominant ang mga personalities ng 2? Hindi? Hindi ko ba nasabi…sige matayog ang mga ego nito kaya ang kinalabasan: aso’t pusang relasyon. Lagi nagtatalo, lam niyo naman foreplay lang yun. At tulad ng kawikaan sa ingles na: the more you hate the more you love. Yun, yon!

Nakakaaliw siya. Nalaman ko na bata pa pala ang author, kaya hindi na nakapagtataka kung bakit napaka-juvenile ng pagkakasulat. At sigurado ako na may nabasa na akong mga shoujo series na nabasa niya kasi nabasa ko siya ulit dito. Okay lang, maayos naman ang execution ng karamihan kaya lang grabe lang sa pagkakahawig e…oo, yung Cinderella moment nabasa ko na yun!

Marami akong napuna, una: hindi ko gusto ang pacing. Mabilis, mabagal sa madaling salita, di consistent. Medyo may pagkakataon na tinatamad ang author. Alam ko na comedy ito pero ang pagdadahilan kung bakit hindi idinetalye ang isang pangyayari dahil ‘boring’ay hindi ko masyadong nagustuhan. Marami naman paraan para mag-skip ng scenes. Ayaw ko rin ng mga conflict na inilagay tapos tatapusin ng wala lang. Naglagay ka pa ng conflict. Ang heavy ng problem tapos ang light ng resolution. Tsk, ma men namen! Isa pa yung, mga characters na di dapat inilagay. Pang-gulo sila, as in literal ng pang-gulo, walang sense ang characters kaya dapat hindi na lang sila inilagay.

At pinakamahalaga sa lahat…ay hindi pa pala. Pangalawa sa pinaka importante. Ganito ba talaga magsalita ang mga nasa alta de sociedad? Paksheet lang hindi ako makapaniwala.

Ok, ito na pinakayaw ko: ang personalities nila Cross at Eya ay sobrang magkahawig. May pagkakataon na ang istorya ay sinasalaysay ni Cross. At pansin ko na ang paraan ng kanyang pananalita & pag-iisip ay halos katulad ni Eya. Kaya nga bigla akong nahiwagahan sa mundo ng mayayaman dito Pinas. Kasi kung makapagmura itong mga batang eto e WAGAS! At hindi lang silang dalawa, yung kaibigan niya lalaki na si Chad ganun din (mag-isip at magsalita). Ano ito? Birds with the same feather think alike?

Pero unpublished pa yung ibang istorya may panahon pa ang mga taong involved dito na ayusin ang ang dapat ayusin. Para sa iba ok na ito, para sa akin hindi. Hindi ako masyado mapanuri lalo na teknikal na aspeto pero kung masyadong halata, ibang usapan na yun.

Sa kabuuan ayos naman siya. Pwede na. Saludo ako sa may-akda ng librong ito. Pero next time, yung next books ok na sana.

PS: Hindi ako nagbabasa ng wattpad, fiction press and the likes.

PPS: Unang pagkakataon ko magsulat ng Tagalog (Taglish) na review. Grabe hirap magtype ang daming baybay.

[RaiRaiKen · Rating 1 out of 5]

This book is a symbol on how poor literacy is in the Philippines, or how the generation of today is sinking into a fantasy of God-knows-what and is quickly turning into apathetic persons. This is disappointing.

UPDATE!

In Wattpad, I posted a chapter-by-chapter review regarding this book, you may read it here

But here are my main reasons why this book deserves 0 to 1 star only:

1) The story is forgettable. It's like Twilight (but Twilight seems so much better now if it's compared to DNP); it's sensational; it's what people talk about; it's a trendy plot that should be copied over and over again; it should be turned into a MOVIE! But just like Twilight, people will have to get over it sooner or later and move on with their lives. I've seen a lot of Twilight books in second-hand bookstores and even heard a lot of my used-to-be-Twilight-hard-fans friends wanting to throw them away already. I mean, really, which part or any book of the Twilight saga do you remember wholeheartedly? I've read book 1. After reading it, I completely forgot what it was all about, except that Edward Cullen was a vampire disco ball.

2) The author knows squat! I don't know if the author has actually lived her life or if she's been trying to hide under a rock. Yikes! She's young! A teen! A person who's supposed to be curious about the world, but she has limited her interests on Koreanovelas, manga and anime. I'm surprised she's only two years younger than me and she's in college now, I guess. DNP is set in a warped, Barney the Gay Dinosaur-lalaland version of the Philippines and with college student characters that don't even really do anything related to college or even know what it's like to be a college student. The author is like Garrett in the movie Flipped. When Bryce Loski asked Garrett what a rooster looked like:

Bryce: Is that a rooster?

Garrett: Nah, that looks like a chicken.

Bryce: How do you know?

Garrett: It just does.

Do you guys see what I mean? When you're 19, you should at least know the few basic technicalities in life, like what happens when you try to apply for a job or how society pushes a person to be at least courteous when in public, and not act like a loon in a store like NBS.

[Clark · Rating 5 out of 5]

Maganda po sya, Laughtrip! :) I am going to wait for the updated version na rin kasi ipa-publish na daw sya soon.

[Grace · Rating 1 out of 5]

Borrowed a copy from a friend and I was really excited to read this but was not satisfied and was so disappointed. Wasted my one-sitting-read time in this book. I should have just finished reading other really good reads on my tablet.

Please guys, don't waste your 150 pesos for this one. I might give you a lot of reasons as to why you shouldn't. Baka abutin nga ng ilang taon yung mga rants ko about this book. But I'll make this simple.

1. Isang buklat mo lang sa libro, tanggal na yung mga pages. Mukhang tinipid ng publisher at dinikitan ng ordinaryong rugby.

2. If you think you'll like it(the story or maybe in general the book itself), I'm telling you right now it's a big NO. Seriously? The story? Inaamin ng author na cliché ang istorya. Masyadong simple. O di kaya mas mababa pa sa simple. Paligoy-ligoy. Tila walang MATINONG patutunguhan.

3. The characters?
Yung bida? Okay, panget siya. Valedictorian siya. Pero the whole time TATANGA-TANGA siya. Daig rin niya ang mga matatanda kung makalimot. Or she's just plainly stupid. Just pick from the two and it's still not going to get better. At ang pananalita niya, mukhang palengkera.
Cross Sandford? Minsan naiisip kong bakla 'tong lalakeng 'to na tila ba mayroong mens sa bawat oras.
WALANG CHARACTER BUILDING. WALANG GROWTH. Tuturuan ka lang ng bida paano maging tanga.

4. Trying hard jokes. Tama na. Hindi nakakatawa eh. Masyadong pilit. Dagdagan mo pa ng corny tuwing may joke.

5. Diary ng Panget. So this is supposed to be written in a diary style. Nasaan ang diary style? Nasa dulo ng bawat chapter? BOO!

I don't care whether the author is Filipino, but to be honest, the story doesn't even deserved to be published. Hah! Am I being hard and rude? Nah! It's my review.

[Maria Ella · Rating 1 out of 5]

Dear author, I am not your market - so stop selling this story line. This is too weak. To PBB Teens. Sorry. I am not buying this idea. Good thing I never met you in a wattpad account, and good thing I am not into reading fanfiction anymore.

The writing and delivery is "trying too hard". Sorry.

[Phoebe A · Rating 2 out of 5]

Psicom is the publisher. I read some of their books and I guess this publishing house really aims for mainstream marketing; it is confirmed again as I read "Diary ng Panget".

The cover art of Diary ng Panget is like a fanart, it's cute.

The only background I have is that it was popular in Wattpad (and the author is younger than me). I don't expect too much from Wattpad but I think it's one of the places for budding writers so let's give a twirl!

When I read the first part, I think that its target is the mass readers. It was a struggle for me to read this part as the persona shifts from Tagalog to English inconsistently, however, I got used to it eventually. The heroine has a kalog (loose) and friendly personality as if she's really speaking to you as her bestfriend. I got friends who talks like that in real life but when it is for reading lines like that, it's a let down. I continued reading it like I was the persona (like I do in other novels who uses first person) but I really can't, so I imagine that the persona was my girl friend. Still, I can't picture her a Eya so I imagined another friend--my gay friend, and it fits! (not that I discriminate, judge or anything but that's really how he talks about stuff when he's talking to me). But that imagination was also obliterated as I go through some chapters (thank God).

I think that I will really enjoy this if I hear Eya talking to me in real life--not reading it. I also think that it'll fit as a script in television dramas or chick flick. You know, the commercialized kind of thing.

This is the epitome of a fiction with characters that represent the extremities of the personalities. Also, it's like a mixture of Asian dramas + animés.

I'm rating this as an okay. I don't like it but I don't hate it. It's fine (And this is a break for me; reading law books for four consecutive weeks, I can't anymore!)
Well, the preference will always differ to the ones who will read it.
I wish good luck to the writer.

[Cicay Foutley · Rating 4 out of 5]

Hindi ko ugaling dumaan sa magazine section ng bookstore dahil wala naman akong hilig sa artista. Kung may sasadyain man ako ron, malamang hindi ako magtatagal at ang dadamputin ko agad ay sports magazine. Pero sa sobrang dami ng taong namimili dahil malapit na ang pasukan, pinili kong umiwas at napadpad ang mga paa ko sa napakaluwang na magazine section. Nahagip ng mata ko ang maliit na libro. Akala ko Filipino manga kasi mala-anime ang cover.

DIARY NG PANGET.

Binasa ko yung summary. Hmmm... may kahawig. Baka isa na namang produkto ng nakakasukang chic-lit, masasayang lang ang pera. Ayoko non. Nasagap ng tenga ko ang usapan ng magbabarkadang geek (base sa pananalita at pananamit) na may hawak ng nasabing libro -- nabasa na raw nila yung part 3 sa internet. Gusto lang nilang magkaroon ng kopya kaya sila bibili.

Teka lang... Ano raw?! Internet? My Sassy Girl ang peg? Kaloka. Tinignan ko ulit yung cover, galing pala sa wattpad yung istorya. Oh--kay.

Samakatuwid, binili ko rin. Curious lang. Tsaka suporta na rin sa batang manunulat.

Isa lang ang tanong ko -- dumaan ba sa kamay ng copyreader ang draft?! Kasi naman, spell APPARTMENT.

Diyos ko day.

*__* FULL REVIEW: http://sprinterjin.blog.com/2013/06/0...

[Kyra]

It's not that I don't like Tagalog books. It's not like I don't like the culture of my country but this is ...
It's a constant reminder of how the literacy rate here in the Philippines is slowly deteriorating.

What I don't like about this book (as well as other books like this) is that many readers call themselves 'bibliophiles' when the only thing they've ever read is this. In my school, there are a lot of novels like this. It saddens me that the only thing my fellow thirteen year old classmates have actually read is this and other books of the erotica genre. I've never seen my classmates purchase meaningful books such as Harry Potter and the Hunger Games and for this instance, I would've been happy if they've read TFIOS. But no, when I read English books, all they do is bash me and bash fricking Harry Potter (not on my watch)

I've read this and truthfully there's nothing really special about it. I don't know why a lot of people like this. I only read this because I'm tired of all the buggery I was getting from the nasty little buggers I have for classmates. It made me laugh every once in a while, yes. But the thing is - I learned absolutely nothing. The thing about books is, they teach you lessons and take you to another world/dimension/universe.

Don't tell me I'm culture-bashing, because I'm not. I'm still proud of the works my fellow Filipinos have published and I look forward to reading them.

I'm not going to rate this.

[Trinie Romualde · Rating 2 out of 5]

Reviewer’s Note: This contains spoilers. Also, please wear an open mind while reading this review.

Disclaimer: I don’t own the words/paragraphs that are taken from the novel “Diary ng Panget.” They are only used as references in this review.

Reference: HaveYouSeenThisGirl, 2013. Diary ng Oanget. Psicom Publishing, Inc. Quezon City, Philippines



Strengths

EYA

- Typical na outcast pero lapitin ng boys. The difference is, she is not the cliché damsel-in-distress heroine. Also, her attitude reflects the common thoughts of Filipina teen-agers.



PHYSICAL LOOK

- May tatlong rason kung bakit maaaring makakuha ng atensyon ang physical look ng DNP: a) the reader is from wattpad and s/he is a fan of DNP/Denny; b) the title—I showed the book to non-wattpad readers and their reaction? “Ay! Anong meron sa title? Bakit naman ganun?” Apparently, the title is is a potential for piquing a reader’s interest; and c) the one who saw the book is a manga lover because it so happened that DNP’s cover is manga-type. Even my Korean students thought that DNP is a manga.



PROLOGUE

- Catchy at humorous ang prologue. Personally, it’s the reason why I read DNP. Hindi ito ang typical prologue na mababasa natin sa mga nobela (it’s even the reason why I really searched for the “Become a Fan” button of wattpad two years ago.



LANGUAGE

- Isa sa mga ikinatutuwa kong bagay tungkol sa DNP ang light atmosphere dahil na rin sa language na ginamit dito. Magaan lang basahin at hindi ‘trying hard’ magpalalim ng Tagalog. Madali rin maka-relate ang mga kabataan dahil sa natural na ‘tone’ ng pananalita ni Eya.



HUMOR

- Both online and book version have this. It’s one good thing, sa drama ba naman ng Pilipinas ngayon, hindi pa ba natin gugustuhing magbasa ng isang kakatwang kwento? “Laughter is the best medicine,” sabi nga nila.





Areas of Improvement



A. COVER

- Kung strength ng DNP ang cover nito, isa rin ito sa mga dapat ma-improve. Hindi nag-ko-compliment ang cover sa description ng mga bida.

Pang-high school ang uniform ng babae at lalaki sa cover ng story samantalang sa intro ng story, ang sabi e graduating na sa college si Eya. I just can’t imagine college students (inside a sosy school) wearing school uniforms that are meant for high schoolers. I hope you’re getting my point.



B. DIARY ENTRIES

- The title does not compliment the content of the story. Ang sabi kasi ng title, “Diary ng Panget.” It only suggests that the story must be about the diary of Eya. However, with (barely) five short diary entries, I can’t say that the story revolved around the diary of Eya. It revolved more about the actual ‘life’ of Eya and the diary entries were only like her comments about what happened to her life.



Personally, DNP pa lang ang nabasa kong may ‘Diary’ sa title na may pinakamaiikling diary entries at content (p.5—1 sentence, p.27—2 sentences, p.54—5 sentences, p.85—12 sentences, p.116—3 sentences) at iyon pang mga tipo ng diary entries na kumbaga sa clause, embedded clause lang. Buo pa rin ang kwento kahit tanggalin sila.



I believe there’s still more for the story to tell. It is in need to give justice to its title or else, the title “Diary ng Panget” won’t fit it, “Buhay ng Panget” will probably do.



C. SPACING

- Napansin ko lang sa story: ang laki ng spacing every after paragraph. It’s one reason why I can’t say every page is meaty (content-wise). Hindi naman kaliitan ang font at medyo malaki naman ang line spacing, so why not use the ‘tab’ spacing instead? Marami pa sanang nadagdag na scenes, mas masasabi pang may laman ang bawat page at mas maayos pa sana ang sequencing ng kwento.



D. CROSS’s POV (p.117-119)

- I understand Denny’s intention to show the readers how Cross felt and thought in that situation (since logical na kung paano sila napunta roon), however, his dialogues, reactions, and gestures will already be enough. Nakabawas din iyon ng continuity sa flow ng kwento, bumalik-balik kasi sa eksena, pati tuloy dialogues nagpaulit-ulit na rin. I mean, we have to consider continuous flow of events and economy of words when writing.



Please remember that the story is entitled “DIARY NG PANGET.” As much as possible, kung pwede naming hindi na magsingit ng POV ng ibang characters (lalo na at pwede naming hindi na lang), the better. A story’s title is like a spell, it may be broken because of one’s sudden appearance.



E. SLOW PACING + LACKING DETAILS

- Personally, natagalan ako sa mga pangyayari. It’s either napapahaba ang narration o napaparammi ang dialogues. Hindi ko naman masabing dahil detailed kasi maraming mga scene na kailangan ng details pero wala namang details. Ang labas tuloy, walang masyadong na-achieve ang first book.



Ex.

· Lacking details

a. [Kaso bigla akong pinigilan ng isa sa mga kaklase ko.

“Hoy totoo ba yung rumors na kasama mo daw si Chad Jimenez sa mall?” OK. Saan naman nanggaling yun?

“Wag ka nang magdeny ugly girl, may nakakita sa inyo.” (DNP, p.55)]



Questions: Paano siya pinigilan ng isa sa mga kaklase niya? Hinawakan ba siya sa braso?

Paano ito nagtanong? Bitchy ba? Para bang kakainin nang buhay si Eya?

b. Sa “I love you Spongebob!” part (p.39), isang “AHH!” lang at narration na about next day ang setting. It may be confusing dahil walang detail na magsasabi kung paano natapos ang pag-uusap ng EYOSS lalo na at walang distinct spacing na maghihiwalay sa prior at succeeding event.



· Slow pacing

- Iyong scene sa kotse ni Chad: inabot ng 11 pages (pp. 97-107). Take note, isang scene lang ‘yan pero inabot na ng ganyan kahaba (considering na 125 pages lang ang naka-allot para sa kwento). Again, please consider economy of words.



F. “YUNG” AND “AY” FEVER

- I noticed that ‘yung’ and ‘ay’ are used in the story every now and then even in cases that the two are not needed. Using ‘ay’ and ‘yung’ repetitively may cause incoherence so please minimize the use of both. We always have to have clear and smooth flow of ideas din po.



Ex.

[“Back off!” ay anak ng kamote, bakit ba may instinct ako na kapag nagpapanic ay nanunulak ako ng tao? At ang pinakamalala pa sa lahat ay automatic na nilabas ko yung pepperspray sa may bulsa ko (nakuha ko lang yun for free sa grocery store nung isang araw, I use it for protection from bad people and aliens and dinosaurs since gabi na ako umuuwi) tapos itinapat ko pa yung pepperspray sa kanya habang napaupo siya sa may sahig dahil tinulak ko siya ng malakas at yung ice cream niya natapon sa may sahig. (DNP,p.15)]



This paragraph may be edited as:

[Natulak ko siya nang malakas. “Back off!”

Napaupo siya sa sahig at natapon ang ice cream niya.

Ay anak ng kamote, bakit ba may instinct akong nanunulak ng tao kapag nagpapanic? At ang pinakamalala pa sa lahat, automatic na nilabas ko ang pepperspray (na nakuha ko lang for free sa grocery nung isang araw) mula sa bulsa ko at itinapat ‘yon sa kanya. I use my pepperspray as protection from bad people and aliens and dinosaurs since gabi na ako umuuwi.]



G. CHAD AND EYE’S CAR SCENE

Let’s have this first:

[Nanlaki ang mga mata ko kinilabutan ako sa naisip ko, tinulak ko siya at kukuhanin ko na sana yung pepperspray sa bulsa ko kaso bigla na niya akong tinulak pahiga sa upuan ng kotse at pumaibabaw siya sakin habang hawak-hawak niya yung kamay ko na may hawak na pepperspay, pinigilan niya akong magamit ito. (DNP, p.97)]



-When I read this part, I was like 0______o. Plus the fact na parang wala lang ‘yan kay Eya later (oo nga’t nagalit siya pero dahil na-realize niyang ‘joke’ lang ang ginawa ni Chad). I mean, sinong babae ang hindi magagalit na paibabawan ng isa lalaking hindi naman niya masyadong kilala? (They knew each other for less than three weeks and they barely talk/meet). Kung sa boyfriend nga hesitant pa di ba?

In Philippine context, it’s already a form of harassment. Disrespect ‘yon sa pagkababae ni Eya, and if it’s some kind of joke, well, it’s not a good joke especially na may driver sa unahan at pwede silang makita sa rearview mirror nang ganoon ang posisyon. We also have to consider the age bracket of most DNP readers—too young to realize that what Chad may be anti-feminism.



H. ITALICS

- In third person POV type of narration, we use italic letters to denote that the words said are from the thoughts of the character-in-focus in the narration. However, in first person POV, if it’s going to be used for the same reason, it’s not needed since the narrator already holds the thoughts in the narration.

Ex.

[“Umm... let me think,” nilagay niya sa may baba niya yung daliri niya at kunwa’y nag-iisip, nakatingin siya sakin, I feel like melting! Pagkatapos ng ilang saglit, ngumiti siyang muli, oh that killer smile! (DNP, p.8)]



This may be edited as:

[“Umm... let me think.” Nilagay niya sa ilalim ng baba ang daliri niya nang parang nag-iisip. Nakatingin siya sa ‘kin.

I feel like melting!

Ngumiti ulit siya pagkatapos ng ilang saglit.

Oh, that killer smile!]



- I changed ‘kunwa’ to ‘na parang’ because since Eya holds the POV, she musn’t be aware of what’s inside Chad’s head. Malay ba ni Eya kung totoo o kunwari lang ang pag-iisip ni Chad, di ba?



I. FEMININE MALE DIALOGUES

- Personally, sa book version ko lang na-feel na parang naging sobrang feminine ng male dialogues na sinulat ni Denny.



Paulit-ulit ko na po itong sinabi noon pero sasabihin ko pa rin ulit ngayon: Please, Writers, avoid TagLish (especially conyo language) when writing a male character’s dialogue and let him act his age and gender.



Ex.

a. [“Asar! I’m going out for a while with my friends and when I come back I want her out of this house!”– Cross Sandford (DNP,p.34)]

- “Asar!” may be changed with an English curse that fits Cross’s age (e.g. Heck! Or Damn!)



b. [“No, it’s ok. I’ll pick that. Sige, magbihis ka na, I’ll just wait sa counter.” – Chad Jimenez (DNP,p.64)]

c.1. [“Talaga? Sa Willford ka din? That’s great! Walang problema, pagkatapos ng klase mo at part time tsaka ka dumiretso sa anak ko just do your job well and I hope tumagal ka talaga sa kanya.”—Cross’s dad (DNP,p.32)]

c.2. [I’m sorry, sanay lang kasi ako. Alam mo na, kelangang English Speaking for business purposes sa other countries. Anyway, saktong-sakto ang dating mo hija, kakaretire lang ng pang-25 na personal na katulong na hinire naming.” – Cross’s dad (DNP, p.30)

- Aside from the two dialogues from Cross’s dad are girlie, they both don’t sound to be something that an old professional businessman will say. Businessmen don’t tend to speak Conyo language.

d. [“Hindi ako maniyak atsaka anggara, may ganto pala! Wahaha! Ngayon lang ako naka-encounter ng isang babae na tinatapatan ako ng pepperspray sa mukha! From now on I will call you peppy, shortcut sa pepperspray! You’re so funny!”—Chad Jimenez (DNP, p.16)

e. [“Hey you old man! Anong kalokohan na naman ito? I told you I don’t want a personal maid or assistant or whatever na bubuntot-buntot sakin!”—Cross Sandford (DNP, p.33)

f. [“Don’t worry, I’ll give you a ride pauwi, I have my car.”—Chad Jimenez (DNP, p.12)

- ‘pauwi’ may be replaced with ‘home’.



J. ILLOGICAL SCENES AND/OR DIALOGUES

· a. Philippines’s emergency hotline

[“Someone please call 911, mamamatay ata ako sa pagod.” (DNP, p.76)

- Ang 911 ay hindi po emergency hotline ng Pilipinas, para sa US po ‘yan. 117 naman po ang para sa Pilipinas.

· b. Cashier- customer scene

[“Ano po maam?! Naglolokohan po ba tayo dito? Hindi naman po ata tama yan, andaming naubos na oras para lang iregister lahat ng binili niyo, tingnan niyo nga po ang dami na pong naiinip sa pag-iintay sa pila dahil sa dami ng binili tapos hindi niyo pala bibilhin? Hindi pepewede yung ganiyan. It’s either babayaran nyo po yan or tatawag po ako ng guard.” (DNP, p.46)]

- First off, what the cashier said shows unprofessionalism. If you are a cashier, no matter how bad the customer is, you can’t shout to the customer. Always, always, always remember the saying, “The customers are always right.”

The cashier may have simply (and politely) uttered, “Sorry po, Ma’am, hindi na po pwedeng ibalik, na-punch na po kasi ang mga item.” (Iyan din ang madalas sabihin ng mga cashier sa mga katulad na sitwasyon.)

Another thing, di yata’t hindi alam ni Eya ang mga karapatan niya bilang mamimili gayong apat na taon na niyang pinag-aaralan ang isang business-related na course at nagkaroon pa siya ng subject na EKONOMIKS noong high school? She must, at least, be aware that no matter what happens, she may (in any circumstance) still decide not to buy an item regardless of the fact that it’s already been punched in the counter (unless may hiya si Eya na magbigay ng hassle sa store dahil kakailanganing ipatawag ang manager para mag-void ng mga item).



· c. Lory’s bodyguards inside the campus

- This one’s illogical dahil:

Una, isang malaking sampal para sa Willford kung magkakaroon ng bodyguards sa loob ng campus ang mga estudyante nila. Ibig kasing sabihin niyon, hindi pinagkakatiwalaan ng mga magulang ang security system ng eskwelahan. Hindi ba’t marapat lamang na sa ganoong uri ng paaralan e ramdam na ramdam ng mga mag-aaral ang pagiging protektado at hindi na nila kailangang magkaroon ng mga bodyguard?



Pangalawa, maaaring makasuhan ang bodyguard ni Lory. Labag po sa batas ang manutok ng baril lalo pa’t menor de edad na nga, babae pa ang tinutukan. Ever heard of RA 9262? Tapos may follow-up pang death threat si Lory?



Pangatlo, hindi ba lapitin ng media ang Willford? Imagine, mayayaman at model/s ang mga nag-aaral doon. It must be a ‘one of a kind ‘ school, baka nga na-fe-feature pa ito sa mga TV show. Di yata napabalita ang ginawa ng bodyguard gayong laging naghahanap ng ‘scoop’ ang mga miyembro ng press?



How about the “Mean Girl”? Hindi man lang ba siya nagsumbong sa parents niya? Traumatic ang matutukan ng baril, right? Hindi man lang ba nila kakasuhan ang bodyguard?



Anyway, hindi ko naman po sinasabing hindi pwedeng magkaroon ng bodyguards si Lory, ‘yon nga lang, kailangang alam nila kung paano sila dapat kumilos—iyong hindi sila katatakutan ng mga estudyante sa Willford. Halimbawa, ang simpleng paglapit sa nang-aaway kila Eya at tahimik na aristokratong paggamit ng kamay panghawi (para umawat) ay sapat na bilang ‘warning.’ Naniniwala akong matatalino ang mga college student sa Willford kaya madali na nilang maadidistinguish na bodyguards ang mga lumapit sa kanila at alam na nila ang kahulugan ng gestures ng mga ito.

· d. Sosy Drunkard

[“Woot. Miss, crush mo ako noh kaya mo ako binangga? Halika miss sama ka sakin, let’s have some fun!” (DNP, p.18)

- Having the dialogues coming from a street drunkard, isn’t this too educated? I mean, karamihan sa mga lasinggerong nagkalat sa lansangan ay hindi gumagamit ng TagLish. Karamihan din, hindi “Let’s have some fun!” ang sasabihin kundi, “Huwag kang mag-alala, mag-e-enjoy tayo sa pupuntahan natin!” Sundan pa ng mala-demonyong halakhak.



· e. Eya’s diary entry at the party

- This part is confusing dahil naglagay na ng diary entry si Eya gayong hindi pa naman pala tapos ang party at hindi pa siya nakakauwi para magsulat ng diary. Dala ni Eya ang diary niya sa party at nagsulat siya sa dilim, ganun po ba?



K. POOR EDITING

- Hindi ko na po pahahabain nang husto ang opinion ko ukol dito. Kahit naman kasi anong sabihin ko, iisa lang bottom line niyon: I saw that there’s a very LITTLE effort given to the editing process (considering that editing is the most crucial part of publishing a story—it speaks for the credibility of the publishers to publish good reads).



As for my last statement, sana next time, hindi ko na makitang sobrang liit ng effort na binigay sa editing process. P600 from every avid reader is not a joke, tama po ba? Therefore, the price paid for the book has to be compensated well. Well-furnished book lang, okay na.



(Note: Lilinawin ko lang po, I have nothing against Denny. I adore her writing actually. ‘Sides, hindi naman po writer lang ang kailangan sa pag-e-edit, tama po ba? It’s a work that has to be done hand-in-hand by the parties involved.)





*Sample technical errors*

a. Wrong Spelling

appartment—apartment

nuh—‘no

yung—‘yung; ‘yong

tyan—tiyan; t’yan

panget—pangit

nako—naku

kelangan—kailangan

ata—yata

nangangaggat—nangangagat

umorder—um-order

nanunuod – nanonood

huy—hoy

kalhating—kalahating



· # WRONG CHOICE OF WORDS + WRONG GRAMMAR#

# [“Master, someone wants to apply for the young master’s maid.” (DNP, p.30)]

Edited: “Master, someone wants to apply as the young master’s maid.

# [“Can I sit beside you?” (DNP, p.41)

Edited: “May I sit beside you?”

- In cases like this, the modal ‘can’ denotes ‘ability to do something’ (as if asking, “Kaya ko bang umupo sa tabi mo?”) while ‘may’ denotes aking for permission to do something (as if asking, “Maaari ba akong umupo sa tabi mo?”)

# [“Ibig bang sabhin niyan, nagpepeke-pekean ka lang ng luha kanina?!” (DNP, p. 103)

- Saying so is like saying that Chad’s tears are true because of the additional ‘pekean’.

# [“...4th year Accounting student na ako...” (DNP, p.6)

Edited: “... 4th year Accountacy student na ako...”



Others:

na dun—na roon

Umm sir—Umm, Sir

tinulak ko siya ng malakas—tinulak ko siya nang malakas

atsaka isa pa—at/saka/isa pa (using these at a time is redundant)

na-depressed—na-depress

[Joli Soo · Rating 4 out of 5]

First thing, ang isa sa advantage ng storyang ito (sa aking opinyon) ay ang kanyang catchy na title. masasabi ko na kahit sa title palang ay masasabi mo na talagang humor ang genre nito. Nung una ko itong nakita, naisip ko na 'haaay, ito nanaman tayo, parang Crazy Little Thing Called Love lang siguro ang tema nito' kasi nga from the title itself, aakalain mo na isa itong story na 'May isang panget na may gusto sa isang gwapo na isinusulat niya ang kanyang feelings sa kanyang diary.. and so on.' pero dun ako nagakamali.

Sa starting ay nakakatawa talaga siya! masasabi ko na noong mga panahon na binabasa ko ito ay nag-eenjoy talaga ako, dahil nga sa mga kabaliwan ng mga characters especially si eya! Pero yung part na medyo naaano ako ay yung about sa part ng 'panget thingy' kasi nga yung pagka- describe sa kapangitan/mukha ni eya ay parang 'sapat na parang may kulang din' pero ayos narin kasi nga nandyan naman yung mga schoolmates/classmates niya sa Wilford, especially si cross na nilalait talaga siya dahil nga daw pangit siya.

Nung nabasa ko naman yung part ni chad akala ko nun na baka sila yung magkatuluyan ni eya, Kaya nga medyo na-sad ako nung sumulpot si Lory! haha pero okay naman kasi it shows na hindi malandi si eya o kung ano in fact, tinulongan pa niya si chad na mapalapit kay lory.

Doon na middle part like doon sa 'takot sa hospital si cross' na part ay doon ako unang kinilig sa kanilang dalwa! magkantahan ba dsw ng rocketeer sa iisang room (o diba sinong hindi kikiligin dun?) Doon din sa middle part sumulpot si 'Mysterious Guy Memo' na hindi mo maintindihan kung ano ang binabalak/iniisip. Para siya yung 'Raisins' sa 'Fruit Salad' kumbaga, hindi mo alam kung magugustuhan mo ba siyang kainin o hindi para sa ibang tao.

All in All nagustuhan ko talaga siya! so all I can say is "Thumbs Up for you miss denny, kasali narin yung mga daliri ko sa paa xD"


see' yah in Book 2- Diary ni Eya!!

[Jersey · Rating 2 out of 5]

Inaamin ko, ang libro na ito ay lubos na nakakatuwa at nakakaentertain. Ang mga dialogue, kahihiyan, at mga banat ay talagang mapapahalakhak ka sa tuwa. Pero, inaamin ko rin, na hindi ko lubos na nagustuhan ang istorya.

Una sa lahat, ang uri ng pagsulat ng awtor ay madaling intindihin dahil ito'y hinango sa kung papaano tayo magsalita araw-araw. Pero piling ko na hindi ito ganung kaganda kapag ito'y sinulat na. Nakakairita at kulang pa sa editing.

Pangalawa, masyadong dinidegrade ni Eya ang kanyang sarili. Kahit na inilalarawan siyang "panget", parang may kulang pa rin, para bang sinasabi niya na panget lang sya pero di naman. At saka, ang pagtingin ng mababa sa sarili -- katulad ng ipinakita ni Eya -- ay hindi isang magandang halimbawa sa mga makakabasa nito.

Pangatlo, di ko masyadong naramdaman ang mga characters. Para bang wala silang "depth" at di ko magawang makarelate o magcare sa kanila, pati na kay Eya.

Pang-apat, ang "kilig factor" ay di ko masyadong naramdaman. Siguro dahil unang volume palang ito, pero (pasensya na sa mga kaklase ko ^^) sa tingin ko wala pang "chemistry" pero naengganyo naman ako sa love-hate relationship ni Eya at Cross.

Panglima, ang plot ay medyo predictable at parang may hula na ako sa mangyayari pati ang mga characters at romance ay cliche din. Siguro mas maganda kung lalagyan ito ng mga twists and turns, medyo mas marami at mas matinding drama at development sa mga characters.

Huli, masyadong maikli ang istorya at mabilis ang mga pangyayari. Bakit di nalang tinapos ito at ginawang isang libro lamang?

Siguro dahil may mga expectations ako sa Diary ng Panget na di natupad kaya di ko sya masyadong nagustuhan katulad na lamang ng aking mga kaklase. Pero irerecommend ko pa rin ito sa mga gustong matawa sa nakakatuwang banat at kalokohan. AT dahil curious ako at medyo naengganyo naman ako sa libro na ito, babasahin ko pa rin ang mga kasunod na mga volume!

[Machie · Rating 2 out of 5]

Warning: Rant Ahead

I have to admit I'm not really a reader of Filipino books, and NO, it's not because I have a deep hatred for our country or whatsoever, Tagalog books really just make me feel weird (don't ask me why).

I've been hearing about this 'Diary ng Panget' way back when I was in highschool and when I found out that it's from 'Wattpad' I was like, uhm, yeah, I'll pass. Call me snob or whatever but I'm not really into that site. *shruggs* Anyway, let's start.

My first thought before reading this book was "NO", as in a big NO talaga.

It's funny, I'll give it that. But that's just it. Though on most cases, the jokes are already too much, the author tries way too hard it's a bit pitiful.

There are some characters I liked, like Chad and the other girl (darn, I forgot her name, basta the half-Brit one). It doesn't bother me much that they're both pathetic when it comes to 'love' sometimes.

Eya is...ugh.. I feel bad for her sometimes and at the same time I want to smack her for some reasons.

Now, Cross *takes a deep breath* *exhales very slowly* Cross is... tHE BIGGEST FUGGIN ARSEHOLE IVE EVER ENCOUNTERED IN THE WHOLE FICTIONAL WORLD. I SWEAR EVERYTHING HE DOES PISS ME OFF. HE'S A JERK, A GIRL-HITTER, A SUPERCILIOUS SNOB, THE EPITOME OF MEAN, HE'S CRUEL AND CRUEL AND have i already said CRUEL? HE'S NOT - N O T THE LEAST BIT ATTRACTIVE TO ME. No, nothing can justify his behavior. Yes, he's the rudest brat ever who needs serious help. I've lost count on how many times I'd almost given up on this book for I really can't handle Cross' attitude. For a guy who supposedly had 50 or so 'sex slaves' (maids) I think it's beyond impossible and unbelievable that he had never kissed anyone yet. He said that other people's salivas are disgusting. Are you frickin kidding me? What did he do with his past 'maids' then? Play hide and seek? (my sister told me about the Cross-not-having-a-first-kiss-yet information, because she had read the second book)

Also, there's this thing.. Eya said that she'd never touched a phone (let alone had one), but she knows what Finding Mickey is? Wow, just wow. May time manood sa cable pero di marunong mag-unlock ng cp or mag-ignore man lang ng tawag?

I'm well aware that this book is written for fun only, and I'm fully aware that I should be lenient when it comes to all the grammatical (even spelling) errors and whatnot but I can't help but be frustrated by them all. Balak ko talagang bigyan to ng 1 star pero gustong-gusto ko talaga yung scene na muntik ng ma-rape si Eya then sabi nya: "Don't touch me! Noli Me Tangere!" IDK, but I really found that one funny.

I still have loads of things to say but I'm running late for school now so I'd just cut it here.

[Joey · Rating 3 out of 5]

Diary ng Panget ( Diary of an Ugly ). This romantic-comedy novel became so successfully phenomenal that it was eventually adapted for a movie in 2014. In fact, the said movie did well at the box office and redounded its main casts, Nadine Lustre and James Reid to fame. However, it is just the way around when I checked the feedback of the readers here on Goodreads. Most of them gave it 1 out of 5 stars. Most of their reasons are : first, The concept of the story is “ obviously tweenie boppe-rish ” and “ immature” as two of the readers put it; second, it is out of reality; third, it could symbolize the poor literacy in the Philippines as another reader put it; and finally , the part they cringed at is that it is tattered with poor English grammar.

The concept of the story is said to be “ obviously tweenie boppe-rish” ( or for teenyboppers) and “ immature” , for the character of Eya appears to be like a teen-ager. The readers in their twenties who gave it a go or just the teen-aged readers who claim to be “mature’ may expect her to act her age since she is in college. In other words, at her age, she is expected to be mature and responsible as what young adults usually do. How do the readers find her so? The way she speaks? Well, who knows when and how a person should be mature at her/his age?

The concept of the story is said to be out of reality. The readers must not have known that this is fiction. If they do, they should not have read it in the first place. Kung makapag-comment naman, parang hindi nag-aral ng literature in high school. In short, this is the pigment of the author’s imagination. On the contrary, sometimes fiction can be drawn based on an author’s personal experiences and observations. Therefore, the concept of the story can happen in real life. So if you are ugly, you can choose to have a romantic life.

This book is said to be symbolizing the poor literacy in the Philippines. Maybe because of the noticeable parts that raised the brows of the “grammarian” readers and thus made them not giving it a quarter of one star : It is tattered with some English grammar mistakes. For instance, the author must not make uncountable nouns countable such as “advices” instead of “ advice”, “ luggages” instead of “luggage”, “jewelries” instead of “ jewelry”. Also, she must not forget the past tense form whenever she refers to something that happened in the past. Furthermore, she should be careful about using the words she wants to use in describing situation since we have this” word territory” or ‘polysemy “ in English language. For instance, she should not be confused about the difference between “ invicible” and “invisible” when Eya describes herself that you-know-who ignores her as though she cannot be seen since she is not much of a good look. Invicible means unconquerable , so invisible is the accurate word , and I believe this is what Eya means to say. Therefore, the revoltingly conspicuous grammatical mistakes must be the primary vortex of the readers’ negative opinions of this book .

On the contrary, dear readers, tell it to the marines! Put the blame on the publisher taken possession of capitalism. It should have helped the author be guided by a proof-reader. Look at the credible publisher of Bob Ong. If you still remember his book Stainless Longganisa, there is a part that mentions about his publisher who was always sending him messages whenever his proof-reader found some mistakes in his writings. As a matter of fact, don’t forget the fact that the author was still 18 when she wrote it. Besides, she is not that typical of a brilliant writer who knows how to write as efficiently and fluently as a professional writer who have obtained a Master’s Degree in Creative Writing.

Admittedly, I even revolted at it when I thought of the same ideas above. I am not typical of a reader at my 20’s who is not supposed to read such genre. My friends even you might find me” baduy” ( of bad taste ) . I am no longer a teen-ager to read it. But as one of my friends on Goodreads put it, I have this reading horizon. In other words, I read any kinds of books . Besides, it just so happened that I did not read such YA in my teen-age life. Now I have this regression or recidivistic habit. Gee! Kinikilig pa rin ako (laughs)

So in the end, I gave it 3 stars because not only that I was giddy and I giggled and laughed my head off , but I also want to disabuse the readers of their comment that IT DOES NOT MAKE SENSE.

THE BOOK MAKES SENSE. Do you know why? Forget the negative comments above. Forget being such an intellectual and intelligentsia. Do not be a hypocrite. The author educates us all along about some moral lessons as usual whenever you read a book.

1. Be strong despite that life is unfair. Eya lost both her parents when she was still young, but she never gives up on her life. She remains tough, cheerful, and positive. So, do dare it is out of reality!

2. Believe in yourself. No matter how much you lack of your physical appearance , do not ever underestimate yourself. It is not about the physical beauty. It is about the inner beauty that radiates on the outside .

3. There are some quotes which could awake you to what is LOVE. Ponder over them , and you will bring back to your senses. ^^

Finally, the author, Denny, has the potential to be a good writer. You have to hand it to her. How come she is able to write such story which young teen-agers can relate to? I was even moved. Hehehe

I have been reviewing books since I took an active part in Goodreads in 2013. The longer I am into this passion, the more I come to the realization that books of any genre could be good reads. There are books that do not placate you, so you could decide against giving it 1 star which means you did not like it. However, as I always put it , 1 star does not necessarily mean the book is a crap contrary to what Virginia Woolf put, “BOOKS ARE THE MIRRORS OF THE SOUL.”

Denny, the real name of the author , wants to be a writer. She hopes to produce a novel which she can call her masterpiece someday, so this book will be the springboard for her dream. I hope that she has taken the negative comments above as constructive criticism.

P.S

A piece of advice: Denny, just be careful with the consistencies of your plots. For instance, I was confused when Eya is not able to speak English as fluently as Lory and Chad. Eya is expected to be smart since she is a scholar of the academy. Keep it up! ^_^

[Lyn Liza · Rating 3 out of 5]

Matagal ko nang naririnig sa mga pinsan ko ang tungkol sa Diary ng Panget bago pa man ito ipubish. Sa totoo lang, hindi na ako nagbabasa ng mga kwentong katulad nito maliban na lamang kung tatamaan ako ng katamaran sa paggawa ng mga kailangan sa eskwelahan o nasisiraan na ako ng bait sa dami ng binabasa ko. Pero paminsan-minsan nagbabasa din ako.

Kanina, humiram ako ng kopya ng librong ito sa pinsan ko. Nakita ko kasi na nagbabasa siya nung ikalawang bahagi at ako naman ay tinatamad na magbasa ng nasa reading list ko talaga. Kaya hiniram ko at sinimulang basahin. Hindi naman matagal basahin ung aklat. Sa katunayan, wala pang dalawang oras, tapos ko na ang limang kabanata nito. At ngayon naisipan ko na gumawa ng pagtalakay sa aklat.

Bilang isang modernong likha, ang Diary ng Panget ay maituturing ko na isa sa mga repleksyon ng kontemporaryong lipunan. Makikita sa wika na ginamit ng manunulat ang "code-switching" ng Filipino at Ingles at bagama't may magsasabing hindi ito katanggap-tanggap sa literatura, bilang isang linguista, ito ay isang pagsasalamin lamang sa paraan ng pagsasalita at pag-iisip ng manunulat.

Isa rin akong baguhang manunulat. Noong labinglimang taong gulang din ako, nagsulat din ako ng isa kwento na katulad nito, bago pa man mauso ang Wattpad. Nakilala ko din ang ilang manunulat na ngayon ay mga "published authors" na. At naenganyo din ako na basahin ang mga sinulat nila.

Aaminin ko na medyo na-disappoint ako sa kwento. Sa cliche na plot, wala akong problema. Sa totoo lang, fan ako ng cliches. Pero sa paraan ng pagsusulat, doon ako nagkaroon ng kaunting problema. Masyadong mabilis ang takbo ng istorya na sa sobrang bilis pakiramdam ko may hinahabol akong tren. Madami-dami na din akong nabasang ganitong istorya pero sana nagkaroon man lamang ng editing, at proofreading ang kwento. Maaari pa naman sana itong pakulayin ng husto. Gayundin, nakakalungkot isipin na ang kwentong ito ay may mga typographical errors, mga maling gamit sa salita, at mga maling salita. Inilista ko ang ilang pagkakamali na nakita ko. Ang pinakatumatak sa akin ay ang ilang ulit na pagkakaroon ng maling baybay sa "apartment." Alam ko na ito ay typorgraphical error lamang [nagkaroon ng dobleng 'p'] subalit, tungkulin ng publishing house na idaan sa tamang proseso ng pagwawasto at pag-uulit ang manuskripto bago ilathala.

Nakalulungkot isipin na madaming mga kabataan ang nakababasa ng likhang ito subalit nakikita nila ang mga kamalian. Ito ay isang sigaw na rin para sa mga tagalathala ng mga aklat para sa paaralan. Pero mabalik tayo sa istorya.

Siguro nga ay dapat kong mabasa ang sumunod na bahagi ng kwento. Hindi ako sang-ayon sa desisyon ng publishing house na hatiin ang kwento sa apat na bahagi at magkaroon ng limang kabanata sa unang aklat. Bitin. Bitin ang kwento ay para sa isang mambabasa na katulad ko, himala na hindi ako nagtapon ng mga bagay-bagay sa kwarto ko sa inis dahil sa pagkabitin. Sana ay inilathala na lang ito ng buo sa iisang libro, upang sa gayon at makita ng mambabasa ang paglaki at pag-unlad ng mga tauhan; upang mahusgahan namin ang pagiging bilog o lapad ng mga tauhan. Ipagpapalagay ko na ito ay sinadya upang bigyan ng pagkasabik ang mga mambabasa subalit mangyaring malaman ninyo na hindi ako natuwa dito.

Sa humor na kalakip ng kwento, dito ako humahanga sa manunulat. Alam ko ang hirap ng pagsusulat ng nakakatawang kwento. Madaling paluhain ang mambabasa, madali ring pasabayin sila sa damdamin ng mga tauhan pero mahirap silang patawanin. Ito ang arte na malamang kailanman di ko magawang maperpekto. Subalit, masasabi ko na konting ayos na lang, malayo pa ang mararating ng manunulat sa kanyang humor. Konting hasa pa! Pero bilang baguhan sa larangan, masasabi ko na maganda ang nagawa niya para patawin kami.

Sa kabuuan, mayroon akong tatlong puntong nais iparating sa manunulat at sa tagapaglathala. Una, ipagpatuloy pa nawa ng manunulat na hasain ang kanyang talento at sana ay alamin niya din ang ilan pang mga kasanayan para ma-improve ang paraan ng pagsusulat. Ikalawa, sana isaisip ng tagapaglathala na ang paglathala ng mga kwento ay hindi laging nakabase sa manunulat, sapagkat tungkulin din nila na bigyan ng komento at iwasto ang mga bahagi na sa tingin nila ay makadaragdag sa potensyal ng isang likha. At panghuli, inirerekomenda ko ang lathalaing ito sa mga baguhan pa lang sa pagbabasa.

[Sam Bucu · Rating 2 out of 5]

Noong online days pa lang ng Diary ng Panget, sinubukan ko na itong basahin. Hanggang sa umpisa nga lang ang naabot ko. Pero ang unang naging impresyon sa akin ng kakaunting narating ko sa kuwento ay may improvement na sa narration style ni Denny (HYSTG) dahil mas malaman na sa detalye at hindi puro dialogue lang ang mababasa. 'Yun kasi ang napansin ko sa ibang akda ni Denny na mas nauna kong nabasa.

Kaya lang, ngayong nakonsumo ko na ang published edition ng DnP, parang nagbago ang isip ko tungkol sa initial impression nito sa akin. Marami na ang mga naunang nakapuna sa technicalities ng libro gaya ng typographical errors at iba pa. Kaya hayaan ninyong magtuon ako ng pansin sa mismong nilalaman ng kuwento.

Nadagdagan na nga sa detalye ang narration, kaso hanggang sa puntong mukhang nasobrahan naman na ito. May mga parte ng kuwentong "nakakangawit" basahin. Kumbaga, sangkaterba ang mga nangyayari sa o napapag-usapan ng mga tauhan na nagkukulangan naman ng significance para sa takbo ng kuwento. Kagaya na lamang ng unang paghaharap ng bidang si Eya at ni Chad Jimenez maging ang mga sumunod na pagkikita nila. Pati rin ang ilan sa puro yata asaran na lang nina Eya at ng among si Cross. 'Yan 'yung tipo ng mga pangyayari na puwedeng-puwedeing lampasan nang hindi maaapektuhan 'yung pagkakaintindi ng mambabasa sa kabuuan ng kuwento.

Hindi rin gaanong napangatawanan ang pagiging "Diary ng Panget" nito dahil naging masyadong pahapyaw naman ang mga entries sa talaarawan ni Eya. Kapansin-pansin rin ang kawalan ng petsa sa bawat entry, samantalang 'yun ang hindi dapat nawawala sa mga ganitiong klase ng sulatin.

Bukod pa riyan, nakakapanlumo rin ang paulit-ulit na pagpapakita kung gaano katindi ang pagka-asiwa ni Eya sa kanyang sariling kaanyuan, maging ang lebel ng kababawan at pagka-intrimididda ng ibang taong nakapalibot sa kanya. Oo, sangkatutak nga ang isyu ng mga teenagers sa panahon ngayon. Pero pupwede naman ding ipunto 'yun sa ibang tao sa paraang hindi nakakabagabag ng damdamin ng iba. Hindi 'yung ipinagduduldulan na lang sa halos bawat pahinang madaraanan ko. At parati ring sumasagi sa isip ko habang binabasa ito, Eto talaga ang pinagkaguluhan at patuloy na pinagkakaguluhan ng mga kabataan ngayon?

Mabuti na lang at nariyan ang mga tauhang kagaya nina Chad at Lory na handang ipakita ang "brighter side" ng pagkatao ni Eya. Ito ngang si Lory ay may linya pa patungkol sa paghahanap ng mga tao sa kanilang mga depekto sa sarili kahit na may angkin din naman silang kagandahan. Kahit paano ay medyo nalihis iyon sa pesimismo ni Eya. Gayun pa man, bandang huli ay tila bale-wala pa rin ang pag-entrada nila Chad at Lory sa eksena; mas nangingibabaw pa rin ang matinding pagkapit ni Eya sa ideyang nasa rurok na siya ng kapangitan. 'Susmaryosep.

Sa pangkalahatan, masasabi kong kinapos sa balanse ang mga detalyeng napapaloob sa kuwento ng Diary ng Panget. Sumobra sa mga pwede nang matabas sa mga kaganapan, nagkulang sa mga mas kinakailangang bahagi para sa progreso ng kuwento. Sa kasamaang palad ay hindi ko maikukumpara ang librong ito sa orihinal na nalathala sa Internet sapagkat hindi ko nga naipagpatuloy ang pagbabasa sa huli.

Dear HYSTG fans, hindi po por que mga pagkukulang ang nabanggit sa rebyu-rebyuhang ito, ibig sabihin ay rant o hate message na po ito. Magkaibang-magkaiba po 'yun sa sinulat ko dito. Hindi ako tumutuligsa kay Denny at sa mga katha niya. Bagaman hindi rin talaga ako isang fan, batid kong may potensyal siya bilang isang manunulat. Nakita ko na 'yun sa ibang mga akda niya. I even ended up believing that her stories are that of charming and heart-warming quality. Denny's writing had been to much better times. However, I don't think it's the same case with this one.

Sa ngayon, titingnan ko pa kung babasahin ko na rin ang iba pang installment ng series na ito. Baka sakali naman kasing may makita pa rin akong kaliwanagan sa kabila ng mga naunang napuna ko. Kapag nangyari 'yun, nakahanda akong bawiin ang mga salitang nabitawan ko na.

[Lyra · Rating 2 out of 5]

NOTE: This review is for the three books.

Here we go...

First point, I think it’s a little too informal for a book. I mean, it was the first time I had read a book with onomatopoeia as part of the description plus emoticons. When it was still in Wattpad, it’s acceptable. But now? Uh, hello, editors! But, still… it’s not that many so I can just bear with it.

Second point, there are some parts or scenes that should have been deleted. I think it’s not really important and are only filler for the story. Gosh. I paid 150 pesos per book just to read those fillers? They could have deleted those and made the story a little shorter and compile them into a single book. But, hey! It’s business, so what can I do?

Third point, I don’t like the materials used in this book. I don’t know. Maybe I’m just used with books that, even if they’re just paperbacks, the cover are still a little harder than this one. And the ink! Oh, the ink. It doesn't smell good. I really love inhaling the scent of my new books, but with this one? Ugh. A big no-no.

Fourth point, though some parts of the book can be deleted, there are also some parts where, even if they’re not that important, you just can’t afford to lose them! They are so hilarious that I really laughed out loud (though those parts appeared only on the third book).

[Cha · Rating 2 out of 5]

Well, I really don't like this book. Even from the start. But my friends like it though. I don't know why. (Maybe because they haven't read much books yet) I didn't even finish the book 'coz it's irritating. First, too many typo errors. I would be able to understand if there were errors if it is online, I mean if it is still in wattpad but no, this is a BOOK! It must be edited severaaaaal times. Hindi basta-basta 'yan. I don't get Psicom actually. Ma-ipublish lang lahat ng book? Basta famous, gora na? Lul! I'm starting to hate this publisher. I understand that it is a marketing technique but hey, limitations! Not just because marami s'yang reads, eh kelangan na i-publish. Okay, going back to DNP. One more thing is.. IT IS JUST SO DAMN CORNY. I don't get it why are they laughing at it. Well, maybe it is because I've read many good stories already and out of the stories I've read, Diary ng Panget will not be included in the Top 100 Great Stories. Sorry, I like Denny (the author) but this story is just so cliché. Not recommendable. pfft. -_-" The description says that it made many people laugh with matching headbang. Let me tell you one thing.. I DIDN'T EVEN LAUGH A SINGLE TIME. Mababaw ang kaligayahan ko, I laugh easily but this book's just sooooooo asdfghjkl. irritating, nakakaBV, corny, not even funny!!! -_-

[Catastrophe Queen · Rating 1 out of 5]

I seriously regret reading this. The only reason I did was out of curiosity. Well damn. I absolutely loathed this book. I can't believe how much literature has changed.

This book needed major editing. It was cliche, predictable, frivolous and mediocre. Oh gosh I'm sorry. But it's the truth. The author is about my age and her writing style is obviously tweenie bopper-ish. The characters were supposed to be in college but I mistook them for 14 year olds because they were so immature.

The only time I enjoyed reading this was when I found errors --- and there were a lot. So I don't really understand why a lot of people think this is one of the greatest books ever. It was okay. It was entertaining. But it didn't really help me learn something. It left no lasting mark. It didn't keep me up all night in silent contemplation.

She's probably going to end up beautiful and married to the asshole, Cross. It's so unrealistic. Why can't she just stay ugly and reach self-realization of how shallow physical beauty is if one's personality is lacking?

In the words of Matt from 13 Going On 30 "Narrow man. Narrow hopeless people". Ugh.

I am seriously contemplating the death of my tablet just for this.

[Julla Lopez · Rating 2 out of 5]

I was actually expecting something that will intrigued me sa book na ito. Yes, cliche` and librong ito and I like cliche` books pero sa totoong lang, na boring ako all the way sa ending (or ending nga ba)

First of all, may mga typos which irritates me. I don't know if this was really edited or what pero madami akong napansin na typos.

Second, yung characters. I want to like Eya kasi siya yung main character but I don't understand kung baket niya masayadong dina-down yung sarili niya. So what kung panget siya? Habang binabasa ko yung libro, ni isa sa mga characters ay walang nag improve. Lalo na si CROSS. Akala ko mag i-improve siya sa mga kalagitnaan ng storya pero, WALA.

Third is that, parang walang climax. Siguro dun sa may party yung climax but...

it wasn't that suspenseful.

And then yung mga jokes ni Eya sa sarili niya. Parang walang sense. Masyadong maraming mga exaggerating sentences na minsan ay corny na.

Hindi ko ito na basa sa Wattpad (dahil hindi ko na ito naabutan) and I really expected something na nakakapagpakilig and makakapag trigger ng mala-dead 'kong bones but....

nako ewan ko.

[Maj · Rating 2 out of 5]

Ang sabi nila marami raw cut to. At unfortunately, may factory defect pa yung nabili ng classmate ko na libro na hiniram ko. 6 pages blank, so marami na ngang cut ang published work, dumami pa lalo sa kamalasan ng kaibigan ko. Haha.
Parang kinopya lang yung story niya sa wattpad(kasama yng typographical errors) tapos diretso print. "APPARTMENT"
May kulang. Hindi sa dahil putol nga talaga yung story dahil may part 2, 3. etc pa. Hindi rin dahil sa 6 pages blank sa paperback copy na nabasa ko. May kulang talaga. Siguro medyo nag-expect na rin ako kasi maraming may gusto na kaibigan ko nito. Pero hindi kasi ako mahilig magbasa rin sa wattpad, at ng Tagalog na short stories/love stories.
Amazed ako sa nagsulat kasi ang bata niya pa naka-publish na siya ng libro. hash tag 'INGGIT.' Kaya mababaw lang yung story, very typical. Cinderella-like. At may innocence. Pero gusto ko na flawed yung bidang babae. Kahit minsan natatangahan na ako sakanya. Hello naman dun sa 'Sanford' na hindi niya maalala nung nag-apply siya ng trabaho. Medyo nakulangan nga lang talaga ako. At parang hindi ako kinilig(HINDI AKO BATO!). Hahaha
It's a good time-killer. Kung medyo mahilig ka sa light, entertaining at short stories, push mo to, baka maenjoy mo.

[jyc · Rating 4 out of 5]

★★★★ // highly entertaining. has interesting characters that i totally enjoyed. some events are totally outlandish, but definitely gave me a good laugh.

[Madam E · Rating 4 out of 5]

Disclaimer: Ang review kong ito ay para na sa DNP 1-4. Hindi ko ikukumpara ang istorya ng nasa sa Wattpad dati dahil may pagbabago sa ilang karakter, parte ng kwento at ending.

Una sa lahat, tama ang kasabihang "don't judge the book by it's cover", maaaring mukhang pambata sa unang tingin ang librong ito pero siguradong makakarelate ang lahat: bata, matanda, may ngipin o wala; girl, boy, bakla, tomboy or in between :P

Totoong cliché ang kwento, parang pinaghalo-halong Korean drama na Japanese manga at Disney touch, pero sa kabuuan nakakatuwa ito. Bata pa ang author kaya naiintindihan kong hindi gaanong kapormal ang paraan niya ng pagsusulat, may mga typhograpical errors din sa ilang bahagi ng libro pero sa kabila nito ay madaling basahin ang mga ito (1-4). Natapos ko lahat ng kalahating araw.

Hindi lang puro kalokohan, kilig at katatawanan ang kwento. Aaminin ko maraming beses akong biglang napangiti habang nagbabasa dahil karamihan sa mga eksena ay nakakapagpaalala sa'kin ng mga past events sa buhay. Marahil sa iba ay ganoon din. Matapos mo itong basahin ay siguradong.mae-LSS ka na din sa mga kantang Rocketeer ni Clara C at 1234 ng Plain White T. Baka nga magustuhan mo na rin ang Boy Bawang, si Cookie Monster at ang magsulat ng sarili mong diary.

Pero bukod sa mga ito ay marami rin namang aral na matututunan mula sa libro. Una, ang konsepto ng tunay na kagandahan ng tao. Naniniwala akong may Eya sa ating lahat na masyadong binababa ang sarili. Ikalawa, ang pagpapakatao. Naniniwala rin akong maraming Cross sa mundo na kelangan lang ng konting push para mahanap ang sarili nila. Higit sa lahat, ang pagharap sa realidad ng buhay ng hindi nawawalan ng pag-asa. Lahat naman tayo nangangarap ng happy ever after pero sa totoong buhay hindi gaya sa mga fairytales ang nagiging ending kaya kelangang harapin natin ang bawat araw at maniwala lang tayo na kakayanin natin ang mga pagsubok na darating. *spoiler alert :P*

Maganda rin ang twist ng istorya kaya sulit ang pagbabasa hanggang sa huli. Mula sa Wattpad, naisalibro na nga ito at isusunod na ang pelikula. Kaya naman siguradong naeexcite na ang marami at isa na ko doon.

[Angeli · Rating 1 out of 5]

I am really not satisfied with this book. Okay, as much as I want to give it a three or four star rating, no. Just no. This isn't the version that was posted on Wattpad but shards of it.

I am truly disappointed that a lot of parts got edited out. I think they're planning on doing a series for it.

What really annoys me most is that I think it wasn't even that proofread much. There are so many typos, for example the summary/snippet of the story at the back cover of the book misspelled "Sanford" to "Sandord", really?

I'm a fan of the original Diary ng Panget not really this version.
This version, well, must have been very difficult for Denny (the author) to write or might I say edit, but it's completely different from the original. Although I'm still waiting for the third season, which she was writing before she announced they were making a book out of it.

[Von · Rating 4 out of 5]

Sa title pa lang alam mong mala-comedy na toh. Ang ganda ng librong ito dahil sa pagiging light niya. Hindi siya yung libro na nakaka stress. Hindi kagaya ng ibang libro na pa iiyakin ka pa dahil sa paghihiwalay ng dalawang bida. Dito papaiyakin ka sa kakatawa. Although na medyo may pag ka cliché talaga ang story dahil sa yaya thingy na yan at may pagka informal talaga ang pagsulat. Pero hindi pa rin naman mababawasan ang pagkaganda ng istoryang ito. Kaya thumbs up for Ate Denny :).

[Anna · Rating 3 out of 5]

Diary ng Panget. Marami ang naka-relate sa title ng book kaya madami ang nagkainteres magbasa.. at isa na ako dun, hihi. Isa sa mga malulupet ng novel sa wattpad ang nasabing istorya kaya naman napili na lang na isa-libro at maiparating sa iba pang mga panget. wew. Wala akong tiyaga magbasa sa wattpad dahil nga masakit sa mata pero noong malaman kong naka-hardcopy na ito, agad akong bumili para malaman kung anung gayuma ang pinainom ni Eya sa mga cute boys para dikitan sya ng mga ito. Biro lang! Sa totoo lang, na-curious ako sa title at sa istorya kaya pagkabiling pagkabili ko ay binasa ko na agad. Maganda yung istorya. Oo, nakakatawa nga sya. Nakakaliw basahin at bagay na bagay sa mga teens na nagpapantasya sa mga crush nila. Ang bawat characters ay may pakinabang in a sense na kuhang kuha nila kung paaano pagalawin ang istorya. Maganda ang pagkagawa ng kwento kaso, bitin. Mukhang may part two pa. At mukhang may papalit na rin sa 'Precious Hearts Romances Presents [add title here]' dahil sa mga nakakakilig na eksena sa book.

Gusto kong malaman kung pinoy ba talaga ang awtor nito o Korean o isa lang talaga syang fan ng KPOP dahil animated manga ang cover nito na mukhang hindi angkop sa pilipino na nagbabasa ng pilipinong libro. At 'yong puntong "Eah?" na madalas nababanggit sa book na nagpapakita ng ekspresyon ng karakter ay madalas kong naririnig na sinasabi ni Naruto sa mga episodes na pinapanood ko. Tingin ko, naiimpluwensyahan si awtor ng kung ano anong lahi kaya halo halo din ang naiilagay nya sa book na kung saan e hindi na masyadong nasa reyalidad pero gaya ng sabi ko sa umpisa ito ay para sa mga nagpapantasya sa mga crush nila. Eto ung sinasabing informal written, ok na rin. Iintayin ko 'yong sequence para masundan ko 'yong storya.

Nasabi ko na nga, ayos ang istorya kaso 'yong pagkapublished, medyo may mali. May mga typo error akong nakita kaya masasabing... sana hindi nila ni-rush. Pero chill lang, hindi pa tapos ang istorya kaya maghintay na lang sa susunod na kabanata.

[wanderinggene · Rating 3 out of 5]

It took me awhile to be in the mood to read this. I can't get through the way it was written. I read a lot of Tagalog books but I was simply not in the mood to read this. But when I did, grabe laugh trip! Yes, it needs an editor and I think it would be better to edit out some of the parts, especially the corny ones. Perhaps edit the unimportant stuff and publish it into a one bundle instead of 4 novellas. Oh well, business.

Speaking of corny, na-miss ko tuloy ang Boy Bawang!

I sometimes think that DNP is so similar to Meteor Garden/Hana Yori Dango. The girl being bullied, rich, pogi guy na habulin ng babae no matter how asshole he is and a gwapo male bestfriend (who is also rich). Yeah, sounds familiar, no? DNP was written in a very conversational way, like a friend telling a story about what happened to her while I was not with her. It reads like that and I kind of miss the days when I was in college, just hanging out with my friends in between classes. I'm pretty sure I talked like Eya sometimes lol.

Also I don't get why there's a lot of flak about this. It's a funny book aimed for teens, it's meant to be that way. Were they expecting this to be mind blowing? I think it's actually great that this became popular in WattPad. It means that a lot of teens/people are still reading even if they're always online. They're not just wasting away in Facebook. I think it's important that people are reading, regardless of what it is. They gain perspective from different points of view and learn new words. You cannot believe how many Tagalog words I learned from this book. Talapirin? Tagalog ba yun?

And kudos to the author, she's still in uni but a published author already.

Thanks to my co-parent Vanessa for lending me her copy. :)

[Trishia · Rating 1 out of 5]

Where do I start? Honestly, I would point each one out at the get go, but looking at the other reviews, it would simply be redundant. After just reading Mina Esguerra's Fairy Tail Fail, I had high hopes for local love stories once again. So I saw this one book in National, along with the rest of the local indie offers, and with all the hype it was getting, I decided, why not? It might be good.

Bottomline? I was SO wrong. This book is the proof that popularity does not equate to quality. It just so happens that this particular age or generation has an abundance in female readers with raging hormones who think K-Pop/Shoujo romance are the real deal. And PSICOM just happened to be there to make a goldmine out of it.

What a sad industry we are in. I think one day, when these teens grow up, and they have read more and better material, hopefully, their taste will also grow and mature. And then they'll look back on their younger days and say, "Shit, binasa ko yan?"

In the end, I would suggest to the author to try to be ORIGINAL, but then again, if she does aim to be famous, then originality is totally out of the picture. That's what MAINSTREAM is all about. Using tried and tested formulas over and over again. Pang "masa" nga naman. That's why the likes of Erap and Binay still win elections. Dahil mas marami ang masa. Quantity over quality.

What a sad industry indeed.

[Hannah Keziah Dela Cerna · Rating 1 out of 5]

seriously... nakakabobo siya honestly. it was badly edited. had a lot of wrong grammars pa.

i'm sorry if i don't eat up this story like you all do. it really didn't suit my taste. cliche talaga. oa pa. it makes me sad that other authors in wattpad, which in my opinion have a lot more talent and potential, are not being published... but this literary **** did.

....it makes me so sad. it actually reflects our generation's taste and state of mind.
this was a shallow book. totally wasted my time. i actually gave it another chance and read season 2 but no, it just killed my brain cells.

i'm sorry to the legions of fans of this story, we just have to agree to disagree. i'm sorry to the author as well. but please please please do proof read. i'm cheering you on to improve your writing skills! :)

*mourning my brain cells and praying for the author*

[Rodgine · Rating 4 out of 5]

Interesting and entertaining. The writing style's informal but I don't care.