My father got this book for free from the author herself in 2010 while he was visiting New York for work. He was appreciative, but he didn’t read much anymore by then, so the book just gathered dust in one of our house’s shelves by the time he got back. For years I saw the book and I never thought anything of it, until midst of 2013 when I started reading. I saw it in the aforementioned shelf and the cover always drew my attention. Since then I always meant to read the book but never got to it, until two days ago that I read it because I was curious and had the time and want of finally reading it. I only read five pages but yesterday I actually sat down (lay down more like) and actually read it.
For the first hundred pages I actually enjoyed the book. I enjoyed the main character, Presley Thurman, even though she’s not the type of personage I’d usually enjoy. She’s too chic—too girly, obsessed with clothing. Yet she was fine, I was enjoying her because she was just a girl with her own tastes and pleasures, I thought nothing of it. But after the hundred pages mark, I just started to feel put off by her. She became annoying, and she became the stereotypical diva I just tend to dislike. She became way too chic, caring too much about superficial things in the midst of a murder, she was incredibly gossipy and just in overall deeply annoying, while also being completely contradictory, claiming she’s the queen of rationalisation while saying she thought it was fine to buy the expensive designer shoes she loves instead of paying rent every once in a while, feeling very offended in page 107 when Chris was discouraging Presley and her friend Katy from sticking their noses in the whole Senator Daniels’ murder situation because he called them “you girls”, claiming they were women and the term “girls” was downright insulting (specially coming from men), but on the next page she tells Katy “you’re a big girl”. On page 189 this is repeated as she tells her mother “I’m a big girl”, and once again says this on page 279 to Cooper and Dirt. What’s with the hypocrisy or double standard?
One of the things that bothered me the most from the book was the writing. It wasn’t bad but it didn’t feel quite right at the same time—it’s rather odd to explain. I just felt that given the theme of the book, the conversations between the characters were just quite unprofessional at times. One of the senator’s security guards, Simon, who also has a military background, speaks to his superiors in the most informal way, replying “Sure, boss” when Cooper decides to handle Presley, who by the way, has been ridiculously unprofessional at her writing job. It’s quite a petty complaint, but “Yes, sir” or “Yes sir, Mr. Sands” would have felt more appropriate given the political position of his boss and Simon’s profession and his military background, where titles or ranks (e.g. Corporal, General, Captain) are quite important or just common to mention as a sign of respect to someone who is in a superior position to you. Moreover, the Senator was completely unprofessional and disgusting during his “interview”, calling Presley a “pretty little thing” and “little lady”. However, given how Daniels was shown as a womaniser, it’s natural to believe the author intended him to be this… unprofessional. Besides this, however, Presley was given time and an opportunity by the Senator himself to interview him, and she literally accomplished nothing. She got no information, she made no questions—she was just completely awful at her job.
Another thing that bothered me: some of the characters. The protagonist (Presley) and one of the deuteragonists (Dirt) are just so frustrating I contemplated leaving this book unfinished many times. In the midst of the murder of a very important political figure, Dirt is so unprofessional at his job as a sheriff that he refuses to cooperate with Cooper just because he has a petty grudge, even though Cooper, as the head security of the Senator, has useful information that could bide invaluable to the investigation. Presley, though, she’s just the worst. Not only is she unprofessional enough to the point I ponder how she got her HR manager title at McLaughlin industries to begin with, but she’s also a gossipy, immature, snoopy, privacy-invading bitch. She thinks she’s entitled to everyone’s private lives just for the sake of gossiping and all confidential information in an investigation she has NO legal role in. She constantly pesters the guy she so claims to like just because she wants to play hard-to-get, because she wants him to chase her and constantly does things to piss him off, just to prove to herself he cares, and that she is so desirable he should feel lucky just for witnessing her presence alone. It’s exasperating.
The story is interesting and I think the book itself is promising and has potential, but there were just too many factors involved that made the book very frustrating to read at times. Moreover, I believe Laina Turner Molaski requires a serious editor. I found at least five grammatical and/or spelling missteps in just the first twenty pages, and there were more mistakes scattered throughout the chapters, sometimes repeated in a same page. While I don’t have a particular problem with this since it doesn't affect my personal reading experience, I do believe that if you’re going to publish a book, it must be neat in all or most respects, just for presentation and professionalism. A great deal of people may have a problem with it, an assumption well asserted by reading other reviews which complain about the same issue. Furthermore, you can find the same complaints by reading reviews from the second book, meaning that this is an issue that prevailed and shouldn’t have.
All in all, the storyline was interesting, and the book shows promise when reading the synopsis. But the protagonist's personality, some of the dialogue between the characters and certain events just made this book almost unbearable to me at times. These complaints may seem to head the book towards a negative rating, however, towards the end, the book was becoming a little bit as enjoyable as it was in the beginning, so it redeemed itself, in a small way. I believe the book was okay and I liked it at the beginning, and enjoyed the last couple of chapters as well, though Presley with her entitled attitude and stupidity almost ruined it, but the other characters cloaked her frustrating behavior quite a bit. Still, I didn’t quite like it that much as a whole, so I believe a 2.5 rating is quite fair in terms of my general enjoyment. However, two stars seems too harsh, so I believe rating it a three, “I liked it”, is fairer. A couple of annoyances, though quite poignant during my reading experience at times, don’t justify judging the book so harshly as a whole, since it was an enjoyable read for the most part.