I'll start by saying the story itself was good. Adventure, murder, conspiracy, kidnapping, mythology, true love... however, I found several things about this book distracting:
While the "voice" of Juna Lee (the radical mermaid in question) was impeccable, and fit her character well, the plethora of pop culture references disappointed me. The references also fit her character, but there were so many of them it seemed as though the author was stretching to fit as many in as possible. This series had the potential to continue to have worth on into the future, but with so many references to current cultural phenomena (most of which lack the class to become timeless), it will rapidly lose its relevance in coming years. Juna Lee would have come off just as young, hip, and flaky without permanently relegating her to 2004. Mermaids should live longer than that.
Juna Lee's voice was discernible instantaneously in each chapter section, but the other characters required a paragraph or more of text before I realized whose head I was in. Sometimes, the only thing that distinguished Rhymer was the occasional glottal stop to let me know he had a Scottish accent. This device would have been far less annoying had it been consistent. Apparently, Rhymer has no accent at all unless he's saying the word "not." Same goes for his cousin, Undiline, in Alice at Heart.
In this tome, as well as in book one of the series, there are far too many uses of the term "gilding the lily," or its southern-mer-permutations (gilding the water lily, gilding the magnolia). The first time it was used was apt. The second could be attributed to repetition as a literary device. Beyond that, it was just bothersome.
Throughout the series, it is explained that mer-folk dislike flying, and goes briefly into the physiological reasons why. And yet, in a list of famous mers of whom you may have heard, you'll find the name Amelia Earhart...??
And possibly the most distracting of all: the editing. There were countless extra spaces between words where there shouldn't be, and some extra spaces in the middle of words. Occasionally there were spaces left out. A celebrity's name was misspelled. All this makes me wary of reading any other book from this publishing company.
[received via GoodReads First Reads giveaway]