I wanted to start this review off with something coy like "If Nefertiti was ancient Egypt's The Other Boleyn Girl, then The Heretic Queen is its Mean Girls!" But that wouldn't be true. This book is nowhere near as funny or clever as Mean Girls, and it is significantly more mean-spirited. Having enjoyed Nefertiti, the first book in this duology, I was unprepared for just how much I would come to dislike this book. I spent so much time rolling my eyes that it's a wonder they didn't get stuck in the back of my head. By the time I reached the halfway mark, I was more excited about writing this review than finishing the audiobook. So what was it about this book that got me all in a tizzy? Let's break it down.
Bad History Plenty of writers take creative liberties when writing historical fiction, but The Heretic Queen borders on fanfiction. In this telling, we're to believe that young Nefertari is the daughter of Mutnodjment, the heroine of Nefertiti and younger sister of the eponymous heretic queen, that Mutnojdment was forced into marriage with the dastardly pharaoh Horemheb, and that she died in childbirth shortly thereafter. Horemheb isn't Nefertari's father though: Mutnodjment was already pregnant when Horemheb abducted her for what must have surely been a very short marriage. This marriage gave Horemheb legitimacy, since Mutnudjmet's father, Ay, was pharaoh when Horemheb had him assassinated.
This presents a few issues. For one, scholars aren't even sure if the real Horemheb was married to Nefertiti's sister or if the two women just had similar names (whoops). Mutnudjment would have had to have been at the twilight of her childbearing years to have birthed Nefertari, given that there were at least five kings who reigned in the period between the two books, and Nefertari is only thirteen when we first meet her. Although I called Horemheb a putz in my review for the last (fictional) book I read featuring him, in reality he was the designated heir to King Tut, and Ay usurped the throne by marrying Tut's widow—who also happened to be Ay's own granddaughter (yikes). Horemheb is depicted as a monster for trying to destroy Nefertiti's legacy, even though she and Akhenaten had him wrongfully imprisoned for like a decade in the first book, and they would have destroyed the country if not for Horemheb. So already, we're off to a rough start.
Our Leading Lady Nefertari is the quintessential Cool Girl: a beautiful, brilliant tomboy who can run wild with the boys and inspire envy in the girls (oh, and she's a princess). She's kind, poised, learned, merciful, pragmatic, charitable, and brave. She prays for her enemies, feeds the poor and needy, satisfies the king's every need, and never complains. She can speak eight languages by the time she's fourteen. She's not just a princess, she's a natural diplomat who charms all petitioners and negotiates treaties. Only now she's not just a princess and diplomat, she's a warrior queen who accompanies Ramesses to battle and fearlessly puts her life on the line without suffering so much as a scratch. Whereas Ramesses' first wife, Iset, bears a son who only lives a few hours, Nefer not only gives birth to a healthy son but—well, would you look at that, twins! Two healthy sons are better than one! The common people who hater Nefer because of her relation to the heretic queen function mainly as a plot device, and even then, the ones that actually meet her directly naturally come to love her. The author even re-writes the Exodus to reflect well on Nefertari. The Exodus.
A Tale of Two Priestesses Pulling the strings behind the scenes are Ramesses' two aunts, who are both priestesses. Good Aunt (I'm not bothering with their names) naturally takes Nefertari under her wing and coaches her to become Chief Wife. Bad Aunt puts her money on Iset. Unlike Nefertari, Iset is shallow, whiny, stupid, clingy, snobbish, catty, materialistic, and generally just pathetic. She has no leadership talent and Ramesses doesn't consider her an intellectual equal. She can't kick it with the boys and she lets her emotions take over her. When she finally does produce a living child, she proves to be an inadequate mother. The only redeeming quality Iset has is physical beauty. Oh, and her parents were filthy commoners (which is pretty rich, no pun intended, seeing as Ramesses' grandfather was also a commoner who became pharaoh, but no one ever mentions that). The rivalry between the two women to see who can become Chief Wife is at the heart of this story, yet everything about Iset is designed to pale in comparison to Nefertari. It was so blatant that I found myself rooting for Iset out of pure spite. Which brings us to. . .
The Love Triangle (ugh) Judging by the Author's Note, Moran clearly thought she was writing a great love story between two epic historical figures, but that could not be further from the truth. Nefertari and Ramesses are childhood best friends who grew up together, until Ramesses is married to Iset and Nefer gets whisked away by Good Aunt to a temple where she is taught how to entice Ramesses into choosing her as his next wife, and then eventually as his Chief Wife. (Why Nefer needed to be trained in this when she and Ramesses were already thick as thieves and she could have just, y'know, talked to him instead, is beyond me). When she shows up at a palace banquet, the two of them immediately fall into bed together, Ramesses decides to marry her, and they even make a dramatic entrance together fresh from their tryst, humiliating his pregnant wife in the process. (Side-note: Sorry to be crass, but the whole point of the Madonna-whore complex is that someone gets to be the Madonna. There's a reason why Anne Boleyn refused to sleep with Henry VIII for all those years. Realistically, if Nefer seduced Ramesses before they were married, he likely would have dropped her afterwards or consigned her to the harem. We're talking about a guy who is believed to have fathered 100 children in his lifetime. He married several of his own daughters. Ramesses clearly got around.)
Although Ramesses refrains from officially declaring a Chief Wife, he pays Iset only scant attention after that, which is portrayed not as cruelty on his part but as an indication of his passionate love for Nefertari. Iset, by contrast, is regarded as pathetic for wanting Ramesses to pay more attention to her, a roadblock to his and Nefer's epic romance. Perhaps the most egregious example of this is when Iset is giving birth for the second time, having lost her first child, and Ramesses brings Nefertari to the birthing chamber with him. When Iset tells her to leave, Ramesses scolds the woman presently undergoing a painful labor to deliver him a spare for her insolence. Shortly after the birth, Nefer and Good Aunt intrude again, berate Iset for her bad attitude (again, this is a woman who just gave birth twenty minutes ago) then reveal that Bad Aunt, her only friend at court, has been using her this whole time. Ramesses immediately abandons Iset to go off to war, taking Nefer along to keep him company, and is annoyed when Iset protests. God, doesn't she realize whose story this is?!
Ramesses is clearly supposed to be this book's dashing hero, but really he's just an enormous POS. Nefertari is an unrealistic self-insert for women wanting to live out a power fantasy. Iset exists to be routinely humiliated and demeaned in order to make Nefertari look that much more amazing, all while being told that it's really all her own fault, actually. The triumphant ending of Nefer becoming Chief Wife and living happily ever after with her devoted husband and their perfect children is barf-inducing. Then to top it off, it's revealed in the Author's Note that none of Nefertari's children outlived Ramesses in real life, and he was succeeded by one of his sons with Iset instead. Who'd've guessed it?
I haven't even gotten into all the plot holes and faulty logic peppered throughout this book. This was a giant step down from Nefertiti and a perfect encapsulation of the mean-girl feminism of the early-2000s. I might give Michelle Moran another shot one day, but I came out of The Heretic Queen hating almost every character, and unfortunately, it's even making me second-guess my initial opinion of Nefertiti as well.