Disclaimer: The author provided this book to me in .epub format for review, but I did not receive any compensation. The review is honest and strictly my opinion.
Title & Cover: The title seems a good fit after reading the book, but it did nothing to actually pique my interest in the story. The cover, however, is rather nice. I'd probably leave the printed book lying around for visual appeal instead of returning it to the book shelf.
Plot & Elements: I really appreciate unique stories, and that is where Demon Possession scores most of its points. Even though it's a paranormal romance, there's much more happening around the couple. The author took elements which don't normally work together, such as demons and spaceships, and made a great story out of them.
Characters & Dialogue: The characters weren't extremely multifaceted, but they were distinct and believable. The author did a good job at making the reader forget they were demons running a spaceship with an alien hitch hiker, and instead introduced relatable characters .
Analia is a great main character. It's easy to get attached to her with the right amount of sympathy and respect. She doesn't spend her time moping around, but she's also not flawless. Sebastian was entertaining with his internal torment. And though the supporting characters, such as Sonya and Calic, border a little close to cliché, they were still fun to be around. They also provided the right environment to foster Analia's character into staying believable.
The dialogue itself flows quite well throughout, and kept the story moving forward for the most part. I enjoyed the exchanges, but I think it could have improved just a little by giving the characters slightly more distinct speech patterns, word choices, etc. to really drive home their differences. But considering how long they've all been in a ship together, I'll let it pass.
Grammar, Style & Voice: The points Demon Possession rack up for plot and elements, it begins to lose for grammar. I don't expect any book to be flawless, but there are many grammatical issues throughout. For example, the format for dialogue quotes are often grammatically incorrect. Also, there are several wrong words in the narrative, such as “verses” instead of “versus”. And there are a variety of other issues: problems with verb tenses, clauses and the misuse of commas.
Outside of that, the style and voice were easy to follow and pleasurable to read. Despite the grammatical issues, I never had to re-read to understand what was happening.
Point-of-View, Structure & Pace: The author stays in the right point-of-view in each section, which I feel is a mark of a good writer. She made sure to show what others were feeling based on interpretation from the POV character and not bopping around from one head to another.
The structure of the book was pretty good. I was a little jarred on a couple of occasions, such as when Sebastian had so many point-of-view pages near the beginning. Since Analia is the starting character, I would have liked to spend a little more time with her, in between Sebastian, than being thrown straight to him for a longer period. There were also a few random point-of-views that crop up, such as Ethan. It felt more like a convenience to the author than a benefit to the reader. It all works out in the end, though.
I like that the author started the story right at the action: Analia's escape. No lolling around, it got right to the point and set off on the adventure. How Analia escaped showed both her desperation and creativity; her thoughts about Darius illustrated just how terrible of a master he was; and, right away, we learn there must be more to Analia and her captivity than a normal slave. In fact, the author provided enough questions to keep me wanting to turn the pages even through the occasional down time.
Overall: All in all, I liked Demon Possession. It mainly lost stars over the grammar issues, because they were simply too much to be ignored. However, Analia was a great character who was depicted quite well. The author kept in mind many things Analia wouldn't know due to her time in captivity, as well as keeping the psychology of a slave in the forefront. I also appreciated the author using plant-and-payoff, subplots, both a character and story arc, and other techniques which really tied the book together. Every rock turned revealed pieces that eventually fit together into a satisfying conclusion which leaves just enough open for the series to continue. And what more can you ask from a story?
Edit: Now that the story has been edited, I've boosted it from three stars to four.