I skimmed other reviews before embarking upon this one but thought I'd give it a go, anyway.....next time I'll just believe people and not waste my time, because I can't say I wasn't warned.
It might be a great story-it sounded interesting, the cover is a super one but......he has no idea how to utilise a comma or semicolon or when to begin a new sentence. I give you...
"He felt something, something disturbing, he turned quickly and looked up" and (on the SAME page) "He scanned the apartment building to the one side of the parking lot, seeing nothing, he slammed the car door...." See what I mean ? He just slings in commas as opposed to beginning a new sentence and it is SO off-putting and distracting.
We also had a whole paragraph where he told us what Paul was getting up to and each new sentence he began with "Paul" as opposed to he.....we hadn't forgotten his name or thought he was suddenly referring to someone else !!!
I was only 2% into it, hit upon THIS passage, and being too breathless to continue I called it a day......read this to yourself.....you'll understand what I'm trying to describe:
"After a quick breakfast of oatmeal, Paul filled his thermos with coffee unplugged his two cell phones, one personal and the other his police-issued Blackberry, pocketed them, laced up his black running shoes (he refused to give into adulthood) he always wore with his suits, donned his parka, turned off the lights to the tiny porcelain Christmas tree in the hall and opened the front door"......and......breathe........christ, I was GASPING to myself after getting through that !! AND he wrote into as opposed to in to, which just succeeded in adding insult to injury !!
I downloaded this a couple of years back and there has been no further update so it really is published in this state. Sadly, I don't have the patience to keep trying to read something presented so terribly. Such a pity.