Reads Like a First-Year University Research Paper
I don't think I have ever written a review before actually finishing a book, but after having struggled through 12 chapters, I simply had to stop. I hate to say this, but the author is NOT a gifted writer and is severely in need of a developmental editor. It is difficult for me to explain in a review all that needs to be changed in this book. Perhaps the most consistent flaw is his repetitiveness; however, this repetitiveness is largely due to his habit of making statements without bothering to develop the idea. Then, a paragraph or so later, he will make the statement again, perhaps with one more deatil. Then, perhaps a paragraph or whole chapter later, he will bring the subject up yet again, repeating all he had already said with perhaps a few more pieces.
Because the author fails to develop his ideas when he should, the paragraphs tend to be only one or two sentences long, and the ideas keep skipping back and forth.
There is little craftsmanship in the writing itself. Paragraph after paragraph might start with the same word (e.g. "Charlemagne), or the same phrase/words are used multiple times within the same short paragraph. Example (paraphrased, as I don't have the book open right now): "They were guilty of treason, which was punishable by death. Therefore there was no surprise they were executed because they were guilty of an offense punushable by death."
Many commas are missing, making it difficult to understand the meaning. Inconsistent spelling is used (e.g. "Pope Hadrian" in one paragraph and "Adrian I" two paragraphs later. Additionally, the author brings in opinions that, to me, feel like he was trying to impress his university professor.
The whole book reads like this. Frankly, it was doing my head in, as I was spending my entire time editing in my head, instead of reading and enjoying the book.
The author seems to have researched the subject (although there are no footnotes, so I cannot be sure), but it makes little difference until the text is completely rewritten/restructured by an experienced developmental editor, ghost-writer or co-author.