No, no, no! What the hell? Why did the author completely change one of my favorite stories from its original? I love this particular free, online set of stories ("The Dragon's Pit" anthology) available from her website. Kipling's story is "The Pack" and it is far better than the new rewrite.
At first, I was thrilled with the fact that the author was going to elaborate on the story. For some reason, I thought she'd stick to the original plot and character, and flesh out the backstory and other details. However, this is a substantial change in plot and in character. I thought Ril and Sie came off as far less endearing and lovable here, and the insta-sex between Tori and Kipling is less palatable. The original story fit much better in the world of the Dragon Pit (and had introduced Oliver, the lawyer, conveniently). It's not believable that Kipling wouldn't recognize the smell of dragons after he had spent time in the Pits (ok, maybe they were a different, wolves-only Pits?). He doesn't have electricity in the rundown cabin, and he just squats in it, according to the new version. But would Tori and the dragons not know what was happening in their backyard? A lone wolf coming in, wouldn't Ril and Sie have smelled him in their roaming of their territory?
The new rewrite, taken as an independent story, is merely OK. It's lost a lot of charm and doesn't have any better writing to offset that in any way. Derr's writing is still pretty bad in most places, and generally, I forgive her those writing sins because she is so brilliant at world-building, romance and likable characters.
If you want to read something brilliant by Megan Derr, read the absolutely amazing set of stories in Volume 2, Fairy Tales Slashed (especially "Beast" and the "Wizard's Tower") as well as the superb "Magic and Mischief" anthology.
Sigh. I feel like a Star Wars fan after Lucas put out Episode 1. I'm not looking forward to the other rewrites. Please, please, Megan, just stick to the original stories and clean up the typos and the grammatical mistakes. That's all you need to do!